Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise, correct grammar, and give a clear topic sentence plus one supporting detail with a linking word. Avoid repetition and use natural phrasing.

예시: Yes, I am quite good at memorising things. For example, I often remember family appointments and shopping lists when others forget, which helps me organise tasks reliably.

제안: Use past tense consistently and structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and one specific detail about what happened and the result. Avoid unclear phrasing.

예시: Yes. When I was at school I once forgot my chemistry textbook on the day of an important test, but fortunately I borrowed a friend's book and managed to take the exam.

제안: Organise into a topic sentence and two specific supporting details with linking words. Remove fillers and be precise about frequency and purpose.

예시: In my daily life I need to remember my religious duties and health routine. For instance, I pray five times a day and also try to exercise at the gym three times a week to stay fit.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence, use one or two specific methods with linking words, and avoid repetition. Mention how effective the method is.

예시: I usually use my phone to remember important things. For example, I make a notes list before shopping or set reminders for travel plans, which helps me avoid forgetting tasks.

× My memory is very sharp.

✓ My memory is very sharp.

No change needed; 'memory' is correctly singular because it refers to an uncountable/abstract faculty.

× I am very good at memorizing things because even my siblings and my parents forget the things.

✓ I am very good at memorizing things because even my siblings and parents forget things.

Use plural 'siblings and parents' together without repeated 'my' for concision and drop the unnecessary definite article before 'things'. Suggestion: say 'my siblings and parents' and 'forget things'.

× But I remembered that, so I am good at memorizing the things.

✓ But I remembered that, so I am good at memorizing things.

Remove the definite article 'the' before 'things' which is unncessary. 'Things' here is a general plural noun.

× Yes, in my childhood when I am in school, I forgot my most important book of chemistry and its paper was on that day and I forgot it.

✓ Yes, in my childhood when I was at school, I forgot my most important chemistry book and its exam was that day, so I forgot it.

Tense consistency: refer to past time 'in my childhood' using past tense 'was' not present 'am'. Also reorder nouns: 'chemistry book' is more natural; 'its paper was on that day' is unclear — likely 'its exam was that day'. Ensure past tense throughout.

× But at this time I use my friend's book so it's don't it's not very important.

✓ But at that time I used my friend's book, so it wasn't very important.

Maintain past tense: 'used' and 'wasn't'. Remove redundant fragments 'it's don't it's'. Use 'at that time' for past reference.

× I, you know, remind my daily life, I need to remember that I have to pray prayers five times a day and recite a Quran plus, uh, do healthy exercise and go to gym.

✓ In my daily life I need to remember that I have to pray five times a day, recite the Quran, do healthy exercise, and go to the gym.

Grammar: 'remind my daily life' is incorrect — use 'In my daily life' or 'As part of my daily routine'. Article use: 'recite the Quran' (no indefinite article). Add 'the' before 'gym'. Use parallel verb forms without extra commas.

× These are the basic, these are the most important things that I used to remember in my daily life and the most important thing that after doing these things, we keep our, uh.

✓ These are the basic and most important things that I remember in my daily life, and the most important result of doing these things is that we stay healthy.

'Used to remember' implies past habitual action; context is present habitual, so 'remember' fits. Also complete the sentence: explain the result 'we stay healthy'. Fix repetition and sentence fragment.

× I remember important things like whenever I go to travel or something like this, or whenever I go for shopping and what we want for shopping, what what, what things I would want for I want for shopping.

✓ I remember important things, for example when I travel or go shopping; I note what we need to buy.

'Go to travel' is ungrammatical — use 'travel' or 'go travelling'. 'Go for shopping' should be 'go shopping'. Simplify repetition and use nouns/phrases: 'what we need to buy'.

× So I keep it on my notes on my phone.

✓ So I keep them in the notes on my phone.

Use plural 'them' to refer to 'important things' and preposition 'in' for items stored in an app or notes. 'Notes' plural matches 'them'.