Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar, avoid repetition, and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Use past/present forms correctly (e.g., 'I can' not 'I could' for ability).

예시: Yes, I'm fairly good at memorising things. However, I sometimes forget important items like homework or study materials, so I always write them down in a notebook to make sure I don't miss anything.

제안: Give a clear past-tense topic sentence, correct grammar, and add one specific detail about how you made it up, using linking words for coherence. Avoid repetition and use appropriate pronouns.

예시: Yes, I once forgot my best friend's birthday and I felt awful. Because we had been friends for five years, I apologised and later bought her a gift and took her out to dinner to make it up to her.

제안: Start with a direct topic sentence and avoid filler words. Use plural/singular nouns correctly and give one specific example of a consequence, linked logically.

예시: As a student, I need to remember my homework, projects and presentations. For example, if I miss a presentation, I could lose marks, so I set reminders to avoid that.

제안: Give a concise topic sentence, correct vocabulary (e.g., 'tasks' not 'tax'), and explain one method with a specific detail using linking words (e.g., 'for example' or 'so'). Remove extra fillers.

예시: I use digital tools to remember important tasks. For example, I keep a calendar app on my phone and set reminders for deadlines so I receive alerts a day before and on the due date.

× Yes, I once forgotten my best friend birthday, I feel really bad and sad because we have been knowing for like 5 years and I apologize to her because I felt really bad and I promised her that I will make it up to them.

✓ Yes, I once forgot my best friend's birthday. I felt really bad and sad because we have known each other for about five years, and I apologized to her because I felt really bad and promised her that I would make it up to her.

The phrase 'once forgotten' uses the past participle incorrectly without an auxiliary; the simple past 'forgot' is needed (Grammar problem type ID 9). 'Best friend birthday' needs a possessive ('best friend's birthday') (Grammar problem type ID 22 Article/errors). 'We have been knowing' is incorrect; stative verbs like 'know' use the present perfect 'have known' (Grammar problem type ID 6 Present tense issue). 'I apologize' should be past 'I apologized' to match the sequence of past events (Grammar problem type ID 5 Past tense issue). 'I will make it up to them' should be 'I would make it up to her' to reflect the past-tense promise and correct pronoun reference to one friend (Grammar problem type IDs 7 Future tense issue and 12 Incorrect use of pronouns). Suggestions: use simple past for completed past actions (forgot, apologized), use present perfect for actions continuing to present (have known), use possessive forms for relationships, and match pronouns and tense consistently.

× Yes, I really could. I'm memorizing things, but sometimes I forget the important things such as my homework, school text and something like that.

✓ Yes, I can. I memorize things, but sometimes I forget important things such as my homework, school texts and similar items.

'I really could' is incorrect modal use; 'can' expresses ability in general (Grammar problem type ID 4 Modal verb usage). 'I'm memorizing things' suggests a continuous action; a habitual action should use simple present 'I memorize' (Grammar problem type ID 6 Present tense issue). 'school text' should be plural 'school texts' to match 'homework' as countable items (Grammar problem type ID 1 Singular and plural issue). Suggestions: use 'can' for ability, use simple present for habits, and pluralize countable nouns when referring to multiple items.

× That's why I I always write down the important things I really have to do so I can memorize all of the things.

✓ That's why I always write down the important things I have to do so I won't forget them.

The sentence contains a duplicated 'I I' and an awkward expression 'so I can memorize all of the things.' 'Memorize' is not the intended meaning; the speaker wants to avoid forgetting, so 'won't forget them' or 'remember them' is better (Grammar problem type ID 12 Incorrect use of pronouns and ID 26 Sentence structure errors). Suggestions: remove duplication, choose verbs that reflect intended meaning ('remember' or 'won't forget'), and replace 'all of the things' with 'them' to avoid redundancy.

× I am a student, so I have to remember my homeworks, my projects, presentations and my school texts because they're really important.

✓ I am a student, so I have to remember my homework, my projects, presentations and my school texts because they're really important.

'Homeworks' is incorrect pluralization; 'homework' is an uncountable noun and should remain singular (Grammar problem type ID 1 Singular and plural issue). The rest of the sentence is acceptable. Suggestion: use 'homework' as an uncountable noun and keep other plural nouns as appropriate.

× And if I miss one of them, OK, I will have many punishment at school, yes, So they're really important.

✓ And if I miss one of them, I'll get a lot of punishment at school, so they are really important.

'I will have many punishment' uses incorrect quantifier and count noun form; 'punishment' is usually uncountable, so use 'a lot of punishment' or 'many punishments' (Grammar problem type ID 14 Incorrect use of quantifiers). Also 'they're' is fine but capitalization and filler words 'OK, yes, So' should be smoothed (Grammar problem type ID 26 Sentence structure errors). Suggestion: use 'I'll get a lot of punishment' or 'I'll receive many punishments' and maintain consistent, concise phrasing.

× OK so like I am a student so I have many things to do such as homework, tax and presentation.

✓ OK, since I am a student, I have many things to do such as homework, tests and presentations.

'Tax' is likely a wrong word choice; context suggests 'tests' (Grammar problem type ID 13 Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs / ID 26 Sentence structure errors). 'Presentation' should be plural 'presentations' to match 'many things' (Grammar problem type ID 1 Singular and plural issue). Suggestion: choose correct nouns ('tests') and pluralize when referring to multiple items.

× So I use my calendar, my reminder, smartphone and computer to write down the things I have to do during a week.

✓ So I use my calendar, reminders, smartphone and computer to write down the things I have to do during the week.

'My reminder' is better as plural 'reminders' and article 'during a week' is awkward; use 'during the week' or 'in a week' depending on meaning (Grammar problem type ID 11 Incorrect use of prepositions and ID 22 Article errors). Suggestion: use plural 'reminders' and 'during the week' to refer to tasks scheduled within a typical week.