Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more fluent, reduce hesitation and repetition, and give one clear topic sentence plus one specific example. Use linking words to make it coherent (for example: "so", "for example"). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: I'm not very good at memorising things. For example, I often forget small but important items like my keys or phone, which causes me to be late sometimes. To avoid this, I usually place them in the same spot by the door so I don't lose them.

제안: Provide a clear, concise example with correct vocabulary and grammar. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give specific details about what you forgot, why it happened, and how you felt. Use linking words like "for instance" or "as a result." Avoid filler words and self-corrections.

예시: Yes, I once forgot to complete an important task my boss had assigned. For instance, I missed a report deadline because I misread the due date, and as a result I felt very anxious and apologised to my manager. After that, I started using reminders on my phone to prevent it happening again.

제안: Answer directly with a topic sentence and give one or two specific items you must remember, plus a brief reason. Use linking words (e.g. "because", "so") correctly and avoid filler sounds. Keep it to 2–3 clear sentences.

예시: At the moment I don't have a fixed routine, so the main thing I need to remember is to take my keys when I leave the house. I also try to remember my wallet and phone because I often go out for errands.

제안: This answer is fairly clear but could be improved by using more natural phrasing and a short explanation of why these methods work. Use linking words like "so" and keep sentences concise (max 4 sentences). Replace filler words with smooth phrasing.

예시: I usually make a to-do list on my iPhone or write tasks on a piece of paper and stick it to the fridge. This works well because I see the list every day, so I'm less likely to forget important tasks.

× I always for, I always forgot umm, some, some very important thing like where is my key and where is my phone?

✓ I always forget some very important things, like where my keys, my phone, or my wallet are.

The student mixed tenses and used singular 'thing' when referring to multiple items. Use plural 'things' and present simple 'forget' to match the habitual action. Also, in indirect statements the word order should be 'where my keys are' rather than question order.' Note: improve by saying short habitual statements in present simple and pluralize countable nouns.'

× Yes, sometimes I would forget uh, the job gold I, I made and umm, my boss had give me the job task and uh, I, I think that is very stressful and very uh, and make me feel very anxiety because I didn't mean to.

✓ Yes, sometimes I forgot the work I had done, and my boss had given me a task, which I found very stressful and made me feel very anxious because I didn't mean to.

Multiple tense errors: 'would forget' is acceptable for habitual past but the sentence mixes past simple, past perfect, and incorrect verb forms. Use past perfect 'had given' for an action before another past event, 'forgot' or 'would forget' consistently, and correct adjective 'anxious' rather than noun 'anxiety' in 'feel anxious.' Use 'made me feel' for causation.'

× Umm, because now I'm, umm, I'm have a recess period in my life.

✓ Umm, because now I have a recess period in my life.

The phrase 'I'm have' is incorrect; you should use either 'I'm having' (present continuous) or 'I have' (present simple). Here 'I have a recess period' is more natural. Pronoun 'I'm' followed by base verb causes ungrammatical structure.'

× So I don't have a very, uh, I, I don't have a static routine.

✓ So I don't have a very static routine.

Redundant filler words aside, the main issue is repetition. The present tense 'don't have' is correct; remove the duplicated clause to make the sentence fluent.'

× So, uh, I just need to, uh, remember, take my key when I go out.

✓ So I just need to remember to take my keys when I go out.

After 'remember' use the infinitive 'to take' to express future action you need to do. Also pluralize 'keys' for natural usage. Structure should be 'remember to + verb.'

× Sometimes I would, uh, write a task, uh, write a task list in my iPhone or, uh, just write in a paper and I would stick that, uh, paper in my Mac or in my refrigerator so to keep me remember things.

✓ Sometimes I write a task list on my iPhone or on paper, and I stick that paper on my Mac or on my refrigerator to help me remember things.

Use present simple 'write' for habitual actions rather than 'would' here, which is possible but less natural. Use correct prepositions: 'on my iPhone' and 'on paper.' 'So to keep me remember' is ungrammatical; use 'to help me remember' (infinitive after 'to' and verb 'help'). Also use 'stick on' rather than 'stick in' for placing notes on surfaces.'