Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は直接的で意味は伝わりますが、言い換えの繰り返しや多すぎるフィラー（uh, I, uh）が目立ちます。5文以内で簡潔にトピック文→理由→例の流れを作り、適切な接続詞（because, so, therefore）を使って論理的につなぎましょう。また、語彙を少し広げて “repeatedly” の代わりに “through repetition” など自然な表現を使い、文法（動詞形）を正しく整えてください。スピーチ中はフィラーを減らす練習をし、代わりに一呼吸おいて考えるクセをつけると良いです。

예시: No, I'm not very good at memorising things because I struggle with repetitive practice. For example, when I try to learn legal terms, I often forget them unless I review them several times. Therefore, I prefer to use spaced repetition techniques to retain information.

제안: 内容は伝わりますが、時制や文法の誤り（have got, I forgotten）や過度のフィラーがあり、意味が一度明確でない部分があります。過去の経験を話すときは過去形を一貫して使い、出来事の詳細（いつ、何が起きた、結果）を簡潔に述べてください。接続詞（for example, so）で説明を繋げ、不要な言葉を減らす練習をしましょう。例を話す際は日付や結果（どう対処したか）を一言付け加えると説得力が増します。

예시: Yes, I once forgot an important date. For example, I was supposed to take a mock bar exam last year, but I forgot the date and missed it. As a result, I rescheduled and set multiple reminders on my phone so it wouldn't happen again.

제안: 要点は伝わりますが、'legal places' の表現が不自然で具体性に欠けます。日常における記憶対象を具体的に（deadlines, case details, appointment times, legal articles）挙げ、なぜ覚える必要があるかを明確に説明してください。文を短く区切り、接続詞（because, so that）で理由をはっきり示すと良いです。また語彙を正確に使う練習をしましょう。

예시: As a law student, I need to remember deadlines, important case details, and appointment times. I do this because keeping track of dates and legal concepts helps me prepare for exams in civil and international law.

제안: 方法は明確で良いですが、フィラーが多く文が冗長です。目的を示すために 'so that' を使うのは適切なので、そこを活かして一文で論理的にまとめてください。さらに、具体的な方法（digital notes, flashcards, calendar reminders）を1〜2点追加するとより説得力が増します。発話時はフィラーを減らし、簡潔な文を心がけましょう。

예시: I often take notes so that I can review them later if I forget. I also set calendar reminders and use flashcards for important facts to make sure I don't miss anything.

× Uh, actually, no, I don't because I'm not good at doing something repeatedly.

✓ Uh, actually, no, I don't, because I'm not good at doing things repeatedly.

The plural form 'things' is needed because 'something repeatedly' is unnatural here when referring to repeated tasks in general. Use 'doing things repeatedly' to express the general activity. Also add a comma after 'I don't' for clarity.

× Uh, I think in order to memorize something, uh, I have to, uh, look at something and doing that, uh.

✓ Uh, I think in order to memorize something, I have to look at it and do that repeatedly.

Parallel structure requires the base form 'do' not the gerund 'doing' after 'and' when joined with another verb 'look'. Also replace the second 'something' with 'it' to avoid repetition and add 'repeatedly' to match meaning.

× Yes, I have got uh, I have forgotten something important.

✓ Yes, I have forgotten something important.

Using 'have got' here is unnecessary and ungrammatical in this context. The present perfect 'I have forgotten' already conveys the experience; remove 'have got'.

× Uh, for example, uh, I have I had to take mock exam for the bar exam but I forgotten the the date to uh.

✓ Uh, for example, I had to take a mock exam for the bar exam, but I forgot the date.

Mixing 'have' and 'had' is incorrect. Use simple past 'I had to' and past simple 'I forgot' for a specific past event. Add the article 'a' before 'mock exam'. Remove duplicate 'the'. Use 'date' without 'to'.

× Uh, I have to, uh, remember many legal places, uh, in order to, uh, solve my, uh, problems about law because I'm a law school student and I have to take many exams on civil law and international law and.

✓ I have to remember many legal terms and concepts in order to solve my law problems because I'm a law student and I have to take many exams in civil law and international law.

'Legal places' is incorrect; 'legal terms and concepts' fits context. Use 'solve my law problems' or 'solve legal problems'. 'Law school student' can be simplified to 'law student'. Use 'exams in' rather than 'exams on'. Remove trailing 'and'.

× Ah. Uh, when I want to remember important things, uh, I, I, I often take notes so that I can, uh, check it when, even when I forgot about that.

✓ When I want to remember important things, I often take notes so that I can check them even if I forget.

Pronoun 'it' should be plural 'them' to agree with 'things'. Use 'forget' (present simple/subjunctive) rather than past 'forgot' after 'even if' to express a general possibility. Remove filler and duplicate words for clarity.