Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 문장 구조와 문법을 더 정확하게 하고, 불필요한 반복과 경청 표현(umm 등)을 줄이세요. 답변은 주제 문장으로 직접 시작하고, 그 다음에 구체적인 예시와 연결어를 사용해 논리적으로 확장해야 합니다. 예를 들어 'I'm not very good at memorising things'라는 주제 문장 뒤에 'However'로 대조를 보여주고, 'for instance' 대신 'for example'를 쓰며 플래시카드 사용법(언제, 얼마나 자주, 어떤 주제로)을 구체적으로 설명하세요.

예시: I'm not very good at memorising things, but I'm actively working to improve. For example, when I prepare for exams I use flashcards every evening for about 30 minutes. This helps me recall key facts more quickly, and I review difficult cards more often to reinforce them.

제안: 기본 구조는 좋았으나 문법과 발음 오류를 줄이고 세부 정보를 더 추가하세요. 사건을 설명할 때 시간, 장소, 결과와 감정(예: 어떻게 해결했는지)을 연결어로 자연스럽게 이어 말하면 더 설득력 있습니다. 또한 'A' 같은 불필요한 단어는 제거하세요.

예시: Yes, once when I was travelling to France I realised I had left my passport at home, so I couldn't board the plane. It was very stressful, but fortunately I contacted my family and they brought the passport to the airport the next day, so I was able to catch a later flight.

제안: 답변이 너무 짧고 반복적인 'umm'이 많아 명확하지 않습니다. 즉시 주제 문장으로 시작하고, 어떤 종류의 일들을 체크리스트에 넣는지 구체적으로 설명하세요. 또한 연결어를 사용해 이유나 빈도(예: every morning, to avoid forgetting appointments)를 덧붙이세요.

예시: In my daily life I need to remember appointments and household tasks, so I write a checklist every morning. This helps me prioritise what to do first and ensures I don't miss important meetings.

제안: 문장을 완성형으로 만들고 연결어를 사용해 흐름을 부드럽게 하세요. 현재는 문장 분리가 불분명하고 문법 오류가 있습니다. 'I usually write a checklist before I go out'처럼 주어와 동사를 명확히 하고, 체크리스트 외에 다른 기억 방법(전화 알람, 캘린더 등)을 추가하면 답변이 더 풍부해집니다.

예시: I usually write a checklist before I go out, which is very useful for reminding me of essential items. I also set phone alarms for appointments and use a calendar app to track important dates.

× Honestly I'm not very good at it memorizing things.

✓ Honestly, I'm not very good at memorizing things.

The original sentence contains an unnecessary pronoun 'it' before the gerund 'memorizing', which makes the phrase ungrammatical. Remove 'it' and add a comma after 'Honestly' to improve flow. Use 'memorizing things' as the object of 'good at'.

× However I try to improve umm for instance people exam, I use flash card to review them which help me recall information.

✓ However, I try to improve. For instance, before an exam, I use flashcards to review material, which helps me recall information.

Multiple issues: missing articles and pluralization ('flash card' -> 'flashcards', 'people exam' is incorrect; should be 'before an exam' or 'for exams'), missing commas, and subject-verb agreement ('helps' agrees with singular 'which' referring to 'reviewing material' or 'this method'). Split into sentences for clarity and add appropriate articles and plural forms.

× A Once when I was traveling to France, I realized I had forgotten my passport at home so I couldn't board the plane and it was very stressful.

✓ Once when I was traveling to France, I realized I had forgotten my passport at home, so I couldn't board the plane and it was very stressful.

The leading 'A' is unnecessary and should be removed. Add a comma before 'so' to join the clauses correctly. Tenses are fine (past perfect 'had forgotten' is correct).

× Umm. In my daily umm I need to umm write a checklist in advance umm.

✓ In my daily life, I need to write a checklist in advance.

Remove filler 'umm' and add the noun 'life' after 'daily'. Include a comma after the introductory phrase. The sentence becomes concise and grammatically correct.

× I usually write the checklist in advance I'm going out. Is very useful. To remind.

✓ I usually write a checklist in advance when I'm going out. It is very useful for reminding me.

The original contains run-on and fragment sentences. Add 'when' to connect clauses and use 'a checklist' (article). Replace fragments 'Is very useful. To remind.' with a full sentence 'It is very useful for reminding me.' This corrects sentence structure and clarifies purpose.