Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: まず、質問に対して直接的な主題文を明確に述べ、文法の誤り（時制・単数・複数・語順）を修正してください。また、補足説明は2〜3文にまとめ、接続詞（for example, however, so）を使って論理的につなげるようにしましょう。語彙は“memorise/memorize”“forget”“important tasks”“phone reminders”などの一般的で的確な語を使い、意味の通る短い文を作る練習をしてください。具体的な改善点: 1) “I'm not good at memorizing things.”と明確に始める。2) 事例を一つに絞り、正しい時制で説明する。3) 結論や対処法で締める。

예시: I'm not very good at memorizing things. For example, I often forget important numbers or appointments, so I sometimes miss deadlines. Therefore, I usually set reminders on my phone to avoid forgetting.

제안: 回答を簡潔にし、出来事を時系列で正しい文法（過去形）で述べてください。接続詞（because, so, then）を使って原因と結果をつなぎ、感情表現は簡潔に。発話の明瞭さを上げるために短い文を使い、曖昧な語や不要な語（I that day I pray）を避けてください。具体的な改善点: 1) “Yes, I have”は状況に応じて“I have forgotten…”または“Once, I forgot…”にする。2) 理由を明確にする（e.g. I went out with friends and lost track of time）。3) 結果と感情（my boss was angry）を短く述べる。

예시: Yes, I have. Once last year I forgot to go to my part-time job because I went out with friends and lost track of time. As a result, my boss was very angry with me.

제안: 主題文を明確にし、語法と文法（単数・複数、時制、冠詞）を正しく使ってください。具体例と理由を一つか二つに絞り、接続詞でつなげて流れを作りましょう。語彙は“deadlines”“assignments”“teacher doesn’t remind me”など自然な表現に直してください。具体的な改善点: 1) “expiry date of assignment”は英語では“assignment deadlines”が自然。2) 主語と動詞の一致（teacher doesn't）を直す。3) 対処法（I keep a memo on my phone）を最後に述べる。

예시: I need to remember my assignment deadlines for school. Because my teacher doesn't always remind us, I keep a memo and set deadlines on my phone to stay organised.

제안: 答えを一文で始め、続けて具体的な方法を2つまで説明してください。冗長な表現を避け、同じ語の繰り返し（phone を何度も使う）を減らし、語彙のバリエーション（reminders, calendar, alarm）を使うと自然です。接続詞（for example, also, therefore）で文をつなぎ、最後に簡単な理由や効果を述べると良いです。具体的な改善点: 1) 主語＋動詞で明確に始める。2) 同じ語の繰り返しを避ける。3) 具体的なツール・習慣を挙げる。

예시: I remember important things by using my phone’s calendar and setting alarms. For example, I add events to the calendar and set reminders one day before, so I rarely miss appointments.

× Actually, I'm not good at memorizing things.

✓ Actually, I'm not good at memorizing things.

No change needed. The sentence correctly uses present simple for a general ability; keep as is.

× For example, I always forgot to do essential things or forget some numbers.

✓ For example, I always forget to do essential things or forget some numbers.

The student mixed past tense 'forgot' with present habitual 'always'. Use present simple 'forget' to express habitual action. Suggestion: use consistent tense for habits (I always forget).

× Therefore I always. Photo. Keep it.

✓ Therefore I always keep a photo to help me remember.

Original is fragmented and unclear. Combine fragments into a complete sentence: subject + verb + object. Use 'keep a photo' or 'keep a photo on my phone' to show purpose. Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments and express the full idea.

× Yes I have.

✓ Yes, I have.

Punctuation: add a comma. The present perfect 'I have' is fine as a short answer, but include proper comma. Suggestion: write 'Yes, I have.'

× I have forgotten to go to my part time jobs last year I that day I pray I hung out with my friends so I forgot to go and my boss angry me.

✓ I missed my part-time shift last year. That day I went out with my friends, so I forgot to go, and my boss was angry with me.

Multiple errors: 'have forgotten' with 'last year' (specific past time) should be simple past 'missed'. 'Part time jobs' should be 'part-time shift' or 'part-time job'. 'I pray' is incorrect; likely 'I pray' → 'I played' or 'I went out' — corrected to 'went out'. 'My boss angry me' needs past tense verb and preposition: 'my boss was angry with me'. Suggestion: use simple past for actions at a specific time and include proper verb forms and prepositions.

× I need to remember my expiry date of assignment of my school.

✓ I need to remember the deadline of my school assignment.

Awkward phrase 'expiry date of assignment of my school' — use 'deadline' and 'my school assignment'. Include definite article 'the' for a specific deadline. Suggestion: use common collocations: 'deadline' and 'my assignment'.

× My teacher don't remind me to hand out our assignments so I always keep a memo on my phone.

✓ My teacher doesn't remind me to hand in our assignments, so I always keep a memo on my phone.

Subject-verb agreement error: with singular 'teacher' use 'doesn't' not 'don't'. Also use 'hand in' for submitting assignments rather than 'hand out' (which means to distribute). Suggestion: ensure verb agrees with subject and choose correct phrasal verb.

× I always remember appointments to keep a memo on my phone or set a reminder on my phone.

✓ I always remember appointments by keeping a memo on my phone or setting a reminder on my phone.

Use 'by' + -ing to explain method: 'remember by keeping' or 'remember by setting'. Original used infinitive 'to keep' which is unnatural here. Suggestion: use 'by' + gerund to describe how you remember.

× When I know what I have to do, I always do it right now.

✓ When I know what I have to do, I always do it immediately.

'Right now' implies present moment; for habitual action use 'immediately' or 'right away'. The tense is present simple, which is correct; replace phrase for naturalness. Suggestion: use 'immediately' or 'right away' for prompt habitual actions.