Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn nên tự nhiên hơn và tránh lặp từ như "I would say no" hai lần. Bạn nên sử dụng câu chủ đề rõ ràng và thêm chi tiết cụ thể hơn để làm câu trả lời hiệu quả hơn.

예시: I don't really like eating chocolate because I find it too sweet and slightly bitter, which doesn't suit my taste preferences.

제안: Bạn nên tránh lặp từ "often" và sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Ngoài ra, hãy chú ý ngữ pháp như chia động từ cho đúng số ít số nhiều.

예시: I usually eat chocolate when I feel dizzy or during my period because it helps relieve cramps and calms me down.

제안: Câu trả lời có nhiều từ thừa và ngập ngừng, bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp và sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh. Hãy tránh dùng từ không cần thiết và nói rõ hơn về cảm nhận của bạn.

예시: Yes, I used to eat chocolate almost every day as a child because I loved its sweet taste and it satisfied my cravings.

제안: Bạn nên tránh lặp từ và sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Hãy nói rõ hơn và cụ thể hơn về lý do tại sao chocolate phổ biến.

예시: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it has a pleasant taste that appeals to many people, and it is affordable for most consumers.

제안: Bạn nên tránh dùng từ ngữ không chính thức như "you know" và nói rõ ràng hơn. Hãy sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và liên kết ý tốt hơn.

예시: My favourite chocolate flavour is peppermint because it offers a refreshing taste that balances the sweetness and bitterness of chocolate.

제안: Câu trả lời khá tốt nhưng bạn nên sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và tránh lặp từ. Hãy thêm ví dụ cụ thể hơn để làm rõ ý.

예시: I think chocolate makes a good gift for close friends because it's affordable and delicious, but for important people, it might seem too informal.

× Currently I would say no because for me chocolate is kinda too sweet and it's also a little bit bitter.

✓ Currently I would say no because for me chocolate is kind of too sweet and it's also a little bit bitter.

The word 'kinda' is informal and considered slang. The correct form is 'kind of' which is the proper present participle phrase to express a moderate degree.

× I often eat chocolate because it helps to stop the pain, the period cramp and it also help me to calm down a little bit when I was in the period.

✓ I often eat chocolate because it helps to stop the pain, the period cramp and it also helps me to calm down a little bit when I have my period.

The verb 'help' must agree with the singular subject 'it' and be in the third person singular form 'helps'. Also, 'when I was in the period' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'when I have my period' to indicate a recurring event.

× There's a lot, umm, I think like I eat chocolate, uh, every day because at that time I really like the sweet taste and chocolate can fill up all my desire.

✓ There were a lot, umm, I think I ate chocolate every day because at that time I really liked the sweet taste and chocolate could fill up all my desire.

The sentence refers to the past, so 'There's' (there is) should be 'There were' to match plural past tense. Also, 'I eat' should be 'I ate' and 'I really like' should be 'I really liked' to maintain past tense consistency.

× I think first of all, uh, chocolate is umm, it has a taste that everyone can easily uh, taste it and like like it.

✓ I think first of all, uh, chocolate has a taste that everyone can easily taste and like.

The phrase 'chocolate is umm, it has' is redundant; 'chocolate has' is sufficient. Also, 'taste it and like like it' is repetitive; 'taste and like' is correct.

× So peppermint can be a little bit different. It has some, you know, cool taste when the chocolate come into my mouth.

✓ So peppermint can be a little bit different. It has some, you know, cool taste when the chocolate comes into my mouth.

The verb 'come' must agree with the singular subject 'chocolate' and be in the third person singular form 'comes'.

× But when there's an important person, giving a chocolate can be a little bit informal.

✓ But when it's an important person, giving chocolate can be a little bit informal.

The phrase 'giving a chocolate' is incorrect because 'chocolate' is an uncountable noun here and does not need an article. Also, 'there's an important person' is better expressed as 'it's an important person' in this context.