Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer needs to be clearer and more natural. Avoid grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, then support it with reasons using linking words. For example, say "No, I don't like eating chocolate because it is too sweet and my doctor has advised me to avoid sugar due to health reasons."

예시: No, I don't like eating chocolate because it is too sweet. Moreover, my doctor has advised me to avoid consuming too much sugar as I have some health issues.

제안: Your answer is understandable but can be more natural and concise. Avoid repeating phrases like "as I mentioned before." Instead, directly answer the question and add a brief explanation if needed. For example, "I rarely eat chocolate because I don't like it."

예시: I rarely eat chocolate because I don't like it.

제안: Your answer has good content but needs better grammar and linking words. Use past tense consistently and connect ideas smoothly. For example, "Yes, I often ate chocolate when I was a kid because I liked it a lot. At that time, I was not concerned about my health, but now I am more careful."

예시: Yes, I often ate chocolate when I was a kid because I liked it a lot. However, I wasn't worried about my health back then, but now I am more careful about what I eat.

제안: Your answer is relevant but can be more coherent and natural. Use linking words and correct grammar. For example, "Chocolate is popular worldwide mainly because it is sweet and delicious. Also, children love it as a treat, which makes them happy when they receive it."

예시: Chocolate is popular worldwide mainly because it is sweet and delicious. Also, children love it as a treat, which makes them happy when they receive it.

제안: Your answer has good ideas but needs clearer structure and grammar. Use linking words and avoid repetition. For example, "My favourite flavour is dark chocolate because it has health benefits. Doctors often recommend it to help reduce stress and anxiety."

예시: My favourite flavour is dark chocolate because it has health benefits. Doctors often recommend it to help reduce stress and anxiety.

제안: Your answer needs to be clearer and more organised. Avoid redundancy and improve grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas. For example, "I believe chocolate is a good gift because it is sweet and symbolizes love. Many people, like boyfriends, give chocolates to their girlfriends as a sign of affection."

예시: I believe chocolate is a good gift because it is sweet and symbolizes love. Many people, like boyfriends, give chocolates to their girlfriends as a sign of affection.

× No, I don't like to eat chocolates as they are too sweets and as I am threat so doctor advised me to not eat too much sugar or don't consume too much sugar in it.

✓ No, I don't like to eat chocolates as they are too sweet and since I have a threat, the doctor advised me not to eat too much sugar or consume too much sugar in it.

The adjective 'sweets' is incorrectly used instead of the adverb 'sweet' to describe chocolates. Also, 'as I am threat' is incorrect; it should be 'since I have a threat' or 'because I have a health issue'. The phrase 'advised me to not eat' should be 'advised me not to eat' for correct modal verb usage and word order.

× Yeah, I often eat chocolate when I was a kid.

✓ Yeah, I often ate chocolate when I was a kid.

The sentence mixes present tense 'eat' with past time 'when I was a kid'. The verb should be in past tense 'ate' to match the past time reference.

× As a kid, I like the chocolate very much.

✓ As a kid, I liked chocolate very much.

The verb 'like' is in present tense but the sentence refers to past time 'as a kid', so it should be 'liked' in past tense.

× At that time I was not so much worried about my health, but now I am worried so much about my health.

✓ At that time I was not very worried about my health, but now I am very worried about my health.

The phrase 'so much worried' is incorrect; 'very worried' is the correct adverb-adjective combination to express degree of worry.

× Yeah, one of the main reason of chocolate is popular that it is so much sweet and it is the one of the favorite kind of food item that the kids want.

✓ Yeah, one of the main reasons chocolate is popular is that it is very sweet and it is one of the favorite kinds of food items that kids want.

'Reason' should be plural 'reasons' because of 'one of the'. 'So much sweet' is incorrect; 'very sweet' is correct. 'The one of the' should be 'one of the'. 'Kind' and 'food item' should be plural to match 'one of the'.

× And I think for kids it's kind of a treat or something they feel happy after receiving it.

✓ And I think for kids it's kind of a treat or something that makes them feel happy after receiving it.

The phrase 'something they feel happy' is incorrect; it should be 'something that makes them feel happy' to correctly express cause and effect.

× My favorite flavor of chocolate is kind of dark chocolate as because I know that the dark chocolate have a good effect on health.

✓ My favorite flavor of chocolate is kind of dark chocolate because I know that dark chocolate has a good effect on health.

'As because' is redundant; use 'because'. 'Dark chocolate have' is incorrect; 'dark chocolate has' is correct subject-verb agreement.

× As doctor doctor always advice people to have dark chocolate so that they can be stress free.

✓ As doctors always advise people to have dark chocolate so that they can be stress free.

'Doctor doctor' is a repetition error; should be 'doctors'. 'Advice' is a noun; the verb form is 'advise' for third person plural 'doctors'.

× Their mind should be relieved from anxieties and other mental problems.

✓ Their minds should be relieved of anxieties and other mental problems.

'Mind' should be plural 'minds' to agree with plural pronoun 'their'. The correct preposition is 'relieved of' not 'relieved from'.

× I somehow believe that gifting chocolate to other is kind of a good gift because I think chocolate is one of the one of the thing which a person imagine that it must be sweeter.

✓ I somehow believe that gifting chocolate to others is kind of a good gift because I think chocolate is one of the things which a person imagines must be sweet.

'Other' should be plural 'others'. 'One of the one of the thing' is redundant; correct is 'one of the things'. 'Imagine that it must be sweeter' is incorrect; 'imagines must be sweet' is correct.

× Or I think in it is belief of many people that chocolates are kind of showing a love to someone.

✓ I think it is the belief of many people that chocolates are a way of showing love to someone.

The sentence structure is incorrect and unclear. 'Or I think in it is belief' is wrong; correct is 'I think it is the belief'. 'Showing a love' should be 'showing love'.

× For example, boyfriend gives many of the boys give girl their girlfriend.

✓ For example, many boys give chocolates to their girlfriends as gifts.

The original sentence is incomplete and confusing. It lacks proper subject-verb-object structure and clarity. The corrected sentence clearly expresses the intended meaning.