Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear but could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy such as repeating 'sugar' and 'eat chocolates'. Also, use correct expressions like 'not healthy for our health' should be 'not healthy'. Try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

예시: I don't like eating chocolate because it contains a lot of sugar, which isn't healthy. Therefore, I usually avoid chocolates and sugary snacks, preferring healthier options like fruits and nuts.

제안: Your answer is relevant but can be improved by avoiding repetition and using linking words for coherence. Instead of repeating 'I don't like to eat sugary snacks' and 'I prefer healthier snacks', combine these ideas smoothly.

예시: I rarely eat chocolate due to health reasons since I prefer healthier snacks like fruits and nuts instead of sugary treats.

제안: Your answer lacks clarity and contains many hesitations and filler words. Try to organize your thoughts before speaking and avoid unnecessary fillers. Also, use correct grammar such as 'on special occasions' instead of 'on a special occasions'.

예시: Honestly, I don't remember exactly how often I ate chocolate as a kid, but I think I usually had it on special occasions like birthdays or holidays.

제안: Your answer has good ideas but needs better sentence structure and grammar. Avoid redundancy and use linking words to connect your points. For example, 'according to my point of view' can be simplified to 'I think'. Also, use plural forms correctly and avoid repeating 'chocolate' unnecessarily.

예시: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because of its delicious taste and its association with special occasions like birthdays and Valentine's Day, when many people give chocolates as gifts.

제안: You should try to answer the question even if you are unsure. It's better to give your own opinion or say you don't have a favourite flavour rather than asking the examiner for the answer. Practice expressing your preferences confidently.

예시: I don't have a favourite flavour of chocolate, but I usually enjoy milk chocolate because it's smooth and sweet.

제안: Your answer is clear and well-structured with good examples. To improve, try to use more varied vocabulary and linking words to enhance fluency and coherence.

예시: Yes, I believe giving chocolate as a gift is an excellent idea because it's popular and appropriate for many occasions. For instance, during holidays or birthdays, a box of chocolates can bring joy and show thoughtfulness to the recipient.

× I don't like to eat chocolates because it contains a lot of sugar.

✓ I don't like eating chocolates because they contain a lot of sugar.

The verb 'like' is commonly followed by the gerund form '-ing' when expressing preferences. Also, 'chocolates' is plural, so the verb should be 'contain' instead of 'contains'.

× Sugar is not healthier for our health.

✓ Sugar is not healthy for our health.

The comparative adjective 'healthier' is incorrect here because there is no comparison being made. The correct adjective is 'healthy' to describe sugar's effect on health.

× So that's why I avoid to eat chocolates and other sugar sugary snacks.

✓ So that's why I avoid eating chocolates and other sugary snacks.

The verb 'avoid' should be followed by the gerund form '-ing' rather than the infinitive 'to eat'. Also, 'sugar sugary' is redundant; 'sugary' alone is correct.

× I always prefer to eat healthier snacks like fruit, nuts.

✓ I always prefer to eat healthier snacks like fruits and nuts.

When listing examples, 'fruits' is plural to match 'nuts'. Also, 'prefer to eat' is acceptable but consistent use of gerund is better.

× I don't like to eat sugary snacks.

✓ I don't like eating sugary snacks.

Similar to previous, 'like' is better followed by the gerund form '-ing' when expressing preferences.

× I always prefer to eat healthier snacks like fruit, nuts and more.

✓ I always prefer eating healthier snacks like fruits, nuts and more.

Consistent use of gerund after 'prefer' is recommended. Also, 'fruits' plural is better here.

× I don't remember exactly how often I eat chocolate when I was a kid.

✓ I don't remember exactly how often I ate chocolate when I was a kid.

The action of eating chocolate happened in the past, so the verb should be in past tense 'ate' to match the time frame.

× I think I had it on a special occasions like on birthday, umm, or uh, any special occasions as well as umm uh, my parents, umm.

✓ I think I had it on special occasions like birthdays or any other special occasions, as well as when my parents...

'Occasions' is plural, so 'a special occasions' is incorrect. Also, 'birthday' should be plural 'birthdays' to match 'occasions'. The sentence is incomplete but corrected for grammar.

× According to my point of view, chocolates are popular because of its taste as well as the main reason is a chocolate is a famous for a special occasions like on birthday parties and more Valentine days and most of the people prefer to give a chocolate on these occasions.

✓ From my point of view, chocolates are popular because of their taste. The main reason is that chocolate is famous for special occasions like birthday parties and Valentine's Day, and most people prefer to give chocolate on these occasions.

'Its' should be 'their' to agree with plural 'chocolates'. 'A chocolate is a famous' is incorrect; 'chocolate is famous' is correct. 'Special occasions' is plural, so 'a special occasions' is wrong. 'Valentine days' should be 'Valentine's Day'. Also, sentence structure improved for clarity.

× Can you give me the answer please?

✓ What's your favourite flavour of chocolate?

The student did not answer the question but asked the examiner to provide the answer, which is inappropriate. The correction is to provide an answer or acknowledge the question.