Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cevabınız doğal ancak biraz dağınık ve tekrarlayıcı. Daha net ve etkili bir şekilde neden çikolatayı sevdiğinizi açıklayabilirsiniz. Ayrıca, cümle yapınızı basit ve anlaşılır tutmalısınız.

예시: Yes, I love eating chocolate because it tastes delicious and makes me feel happy. Whenever I eat it, I enjoy the rich and sweet flavor that satisfies my cravings.

제안: Cevabınızda belirsizlik ve karışıklık var. Daha net ve doğrudan cevap vermeye çalışın. Ayrıca, gereksiz detaylardan kaçının ve cümlenizi mantıklı bağlaçlarla destekleyin.

예시: I usually eat chocolate once a week, but sometimes I eat it more often, especially during my period because I crave sweets more then.

제안: Cümleniz biraz karışık ve uzun. Daha kısa ve net cümlelerle doğrudan soruya cevap verin. Ayrıca, bağlaçları kullanarak cümlelerinizi daha akıcı yapabilirsiniz.

예시: Yes, when I was a kid, I loved chocolate a lot. For example, when I ate ice cream with my friends, I always chose chocolate flavor and sometimes even three scoops of it.

제안: Cevabınızda anlam belirsizliği ve dilbilgisi hataları var. Daha açık ve doğru ifadeler kullanmalısınız. Ayrıca, nedenleri daha spesifik ve mantıklı şekilde açıklayın.

예시: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it has a sweet and rich taste that many people enjoy. Some prefer pure chocolate, while others like it combined with different flavors like strawberry.

제안: Cevabınızda konudan sapmalar ve tekrarlar var. Soruyu doğrudan cevaplayıp, neden sevdiğinizi açıklayın. Cümlelerinizi daha düzenli ve kısa tutun.

예시: My favorite chocolate flavor is white chocolate because it is creamy and sweet. I especially enjoy it in ice cream, like Magnum bars.

제안: Cevabınızda düşüncelerinizi daha açık ve net ifade edin. Ayrıca, cümlelerinizi tamamlayarak daha etkili bir iletişim kurabilirsiniz.

예시: I believe gifts should be meaningful and show our feelings. So, I don't prefer giving chocolate as a gift, but some people might like it because it is sweet and popular.

× I love eating chocolate and that is probably my favorite flavor.

✓ I love eating chocolate and that is probably my favorite flavor.

No correction needed here as the use of 'eating' is correct as a gerund after 'love'.

× So you could probably count me in a position where my hands and my mouth full of covered chocolate and I will say I love it.

✓ So you could probably count me in a position where my hands and my mouth are full of covered chocolate, and I will say I love it.

The original sentence lacks the verb 'are' to complete the clause 'my hands and my mouth full of covered chocolate'. Adding 'are' corrects the sentence structure.

× I would probably say once in a week, but it goes up when I'm in my period, so I don't think I could tell you a specific time, but I could say I'm eating it too much and I can stop.

✓ I would probably say once a week, but it goes up when I'm on my period, so I don't think I can tell you a specific time, but I can say I'm eating it too much and I can stop.

The phrase 'once in a week' should be 'once a week' for correct frequency expression. Also, the correct preposition is 'on my period' not 'in my period'. 'Could' is replaced with 'can' to express ability in present tense.

× Did you often eat chocolate when you were a kid?

✓ Did you often eat chocolate when you were a kid?

No correction needed; the past tense question is correctly formed.

× I remember like everyone around me, like my friends at that age would go to either ice cream and they would put all the flavors, but I would put like 3 cups of chocolate and that's how I love chocolate so much.

✓ I remember, like everyone around me, my friends at that age would go to ice cream places and they would put all the flavors, but I would put like 3 cups of chocolate, and that's how I love chocolate so much.

The phrase 'go to either ice cream' is unclear; 'go to ice cream places' is clearer. Commas added for clarity. The use of 'put' is acceptable here as informal speech.

× I think that chocolate is popular because of people who has mouthpiece and enthusiastic taste.

✓ I think that chocolate is popular because of people who have mouthpieces and enthusiastic tastes.

The relative clause 'people who has' should be 'people who have' to agree in number. 'Mouthpiece' should be plural 'mouthpieces' to match 'people'. 'Taste' should be plural 'tastes' to agree with 'people'.

× So people like me will go for chocolate while the others go for mixed flavors like strawberries.

✓ So people like me will go for chocolate while others go for mixed flavors like strawberries.

The definite article 'the' before 'others' is unnecessary here; 'others' alone is correct.

× My favorite flavor of chocolate is white chocolate. I love magnum so much. All I'm talking about is ice creams. But uh, believe me, I love chocolate. But it comes to my mind and probably it's white chocolate.

✓ My favorite flavor of chocolate is white chocolate. I love Magnum so much. I'm talking about ice creams. But, believe me, I love chocolate. When it comes to my mind, it's probably white chocolate.

'Magnum' is a proper noun and should be capitalized. 'All I'm talking about is ice creams' is awkward; 'I'm talking about ice creams' is clearer. 'But it comes to my mind' should be 'When it comes to my mind' for correct expression.

× I think gifts are meant to be meaningful and not, uh, just a gift. It includes feelings towards that people, intentions towards that people. So I would actually say I don't like it, but others can do it if.

✓ I think gifts are meant to be meaningful and not just a gift. They include feelings towards those people, intentions towards those people. So I would actually say I don't like it, but others can do it if they want.

'It includes' should be 'They include' to agree with plural 'gifts'. 'That people' should be 'those people'. The last sentence is incomplete; adding 'if they want' completes the thought.