Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear but contains some grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to use correct verb forms and avoid repeating similar ideas. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, I enjoy eating chocolate because it has a unique taste. I especially like chocolate combined with vanilla and other flavors. Since childhood, I have enjoyed chocolates during my free time, and I also like giving them as gifts to my friends.

제안: Your answer is understandable but has grammatical mistakes and incomplete sentences. Try to form complete sentences and use linking words to explain your reasons clearly.

예시: I don't eat chocolate very often because I know that eating too much can harm our teeth. However, I enjoy having chocolate occasionally on weekends as a treat.

제안: Your answer has some grammar issues and incomplete thoughts. Try to use past tense correctly and complete your sentences. Use linking words to contrast past and present habits.

예시: Yes, I used to eat chocolate often when I was a kid because I was unaware of its negative effects. However, now I understand the impact, so I only eat chocolate rarely on special occasions like birthdays or wedding anniversaries.

제안: Your answer repeats ideas and has some awkward phrasing. Try to be more concise and use varied vocabulary. Use linking words to organize your points logically.

예시: I believe chocolate is popular worldwide because it has a delicious and unique taste. People of all ages, including children, adults, and seniors, enjoy eating chocolate. Therefore, its universal appeal makes it a favorite in many countries.

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to clarify your ideas and use correct sentence structures. Also, avoid unnecessary personal details unless relevant.

예시: My favourite chocolate flavour is chocolate combined with vanilla because it has a unique taste. I have liked this flavour for a long time and still enjoy it today.

제안: Your answer is clear but could be improved by using more precise vocabulary and better sentence structure. Use linking words to connect your reasons smoothly.

예시: Yes, I believe chocolate makes a great gift for various occasions because it is affordable and enjoyed by people of all ages. For example, it is suitable for birthdays, weddings, and other celebrations.

× Yes, I like to eat chocolates because it have very different taste and I like to eat chocolate flavour with the vanilla and also some other flavours.

✓ Yes, I like to eat chocolate because it has a very different taste and I like to eat chocolate flavour with vanilla and also some other flavours.

The word 'chocolates' should be singular 'chocolate' when referring to the substance in general. 'It have' is incorrect; 'it' is singular and requires 'has'. Also, 'the vanilla' should be 'vanilla' without 'the' as it refers to flavour in general.

× Since my childhood I used to eat chocolates in my free time and also I would like to give gifts to my friends as chocolate.

✓ Since my childhood, I used to eat chocolate in my free time and also I would like to give gifts to my friends as chocolate.

'Used to' correctly indicates past habitual action. 'Chocolates' should be singular 'chocolate' when referring to the substance generally. Also, a comma after 'Since my childhood' improves sentence clarity.

× I don't like eat chocolate very often but I think in the weekends I love to eat chocolate because I think eating too much it has a bad fact on our teeth.

✓ I don't like to eat chocolate very often but I think on weekends I love to eat chocolate because I think eating too much has a bad effect on our teeth.

After 'like', the infinitive form 'to eat' is correct. 'In the weekends' should be 'on weekends'. 'It has a bad fact' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'has a bad effect'.

× So I like to eat very rarely chocolate on weekends and.

✓ So I like to eat chocolate very rarely on weekends.

The adverb 'very rarely' should be placed after the object 'chocolate' for correct word order. The sentence was incomplete and has been corrected accordingly.

× Yes, when I was kid that time I used to eat chocolate, because that time I didn't know about bad fact of chocolates.

✓ Yes, when I was a kid, I used to eat chocolate because at that time I didn't know about the bad effects of chocolate.

'When I was kid' requires the article 'a' before 'kid'. 'That time' is better expressed as 'at that time'. 'Bad fact' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'bad effects'. 'Chocolates' should be singular 'chocolate' when referring generally.

× But now I know very well about the effects of chocolate.

✓ But now I know very well about the effects of chocolate.

This sentence is grammatically correct and requires no change.

× So I I eat rarely chocolates on some occasion like a birthday already, wedding anniversary or.

✓ So I rarely eat chocolate on some occasions like a birthday, wedding anniversary, or other events.

'Eat rarely chocolates' is incorrect; 'rarely eat chocolate' is correct. 'Occasion' should be plural 'occasions' to match the examples. The sentence was incomplete and has been completed for clarity.

× I think chocolate is a favorite because chocolate is very tasty and different and genuine taste.

✓ I think chocolate is a favourite because it has a very tasty, different, and genuine flavour.

'Chocolate is a favorite' is incomplete; 'a favourite' what? The sentence is improved by adding 'a favourite' meaning 'a favourite food'. 'Chocolate is very tasty and different and genuine taste' is awkward; better to say 'it has a very tasty, different, and genuine flavour'. Also, 'favourite' is the Canadian spelling.

× Every age of people like to eat chocolate like young people, old people and ladies or children.

✓ People of every age like to eat chocolate, such as young people, old people, ladies, and children.

'Every age of people' is awkward; 'people of every age' is better. 'Ladies or children' should be 'ladies and children' to include all groups.

× All people like to eat chocolate.

✓ All people like to eat chocolate.

This sentence is correct and requires no change.

× So that's why I think chocolate is your favorite and popular among the country.

✓ So that's why I think chocolate is a favourite and popular in the country.

'Your favorite' is incorrect here; it should be 'a favourite' to express general opinion. 'Among the country' is incorrect; 'in the country' is correct.

× My favorite flavor of chocolate combined with vanilla because this is very unique taste since my Chandana used to eat this flavor and now still I like to eat this type of chocolate flavor.

✓ My favourite flavour of chocolate is combined with vanilla because it has a very unique taste. Since my childhood, I have used to eat this flavour and still like to eat this type of chocolate flavour.

The sentence lacks a verb in the first clause; 'is combined' is needed. 'Since my Chandana' is unclear; likely 'since my childhood' is intended. 'Now still I like' is awkward; 'I still like' is better. 'Used to eat' is past habitual; 'have used to eat' is incorrect; better to say 'have liked' or 'have eaten'.

× Yes, I think chocolate is the best gift to others on a different occasion for the first reason that this is not very expensive and also every age of people like to eat chocolate.

✓ Yes, I think chocolate is the best gift for others on different occasions because it is not very expensive and people of every age like to eat chocolate.

'On a different occasion' should be plural 'on different occasions'. 'For the first reason that' is awkward; 'because' is better. 'Every age of people' should be 'people of every age'.

× So I think chocolate is a best gift for others too.

✓ So I think chocolate is a best gift for others too.

This sentence is correct except 'a best gift' should be 'the best gift' because 'best' is a superlative and requires the definite article 'the'.

× So I think chocolate is a best gift for others too.

✓ So I think chocolate is the best gift for others too.

The superlative adjective 'best' requires the definite article 'the' instead of the indefinite article 'a'.

× You know different occasions like birthday party or marriage function.

✓ You know, different occasions like birthday parties or marriage functions.

'Birthday party' and 'marriage function' should be plural to match 'different occasions'. Also, a comma after 'You know' improves clarity.