Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the response more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one brief reason with a specific detail. Avoid awkward phrasing and redundancy (e.g. "you can say me").

예시: Yes, I really enjoy chocolate because I have a sweet tooth. For example, I often choose chocolate desserts after dinner because they lift my mood.

제안: Expand slightly with a brief reason or context using a linking word to make the answer more informative while keeping it concise.

예시: I eat chocolate daily, usually a small piece after lunch to satisfy my sweet craving.

제안: Organize into a clear topic sentence then one or two supporting details. Avoid repeating the same fact twice ("finished that whole box" and "finish that whole box"). Use linking words like "because" or "so" for coherence.

예시: Yes, I ate a lot of chocolate as a child. My parents would buy a whole box for me, and I usually finished it within a week because I loved sweets.

제안: Start with a concise topic sentence, then give specific reasons using linking words. Avoid repeated phrases and grammatical errors like "you have people can try the each of them."

예시: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it comes in many varieties. For instance, milk, dark and white chocolate suit different tastes, so almost everyone can find one they like.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence naming favourites, then a concise, polite reason for dislike. Avoid informal or extreme expressions like "makes me feel like vomit" and correct grammar ("slightly bitter").

예시: My favourite flavours are milk and white chocolate because they are creamy and sweet. I avoid dark chocolate because it tastes too bitter for me.

제안: Provide a concise topic sentence and one clear supporting reason. Avoid awkward or contradictory statements ("nobody would buy an expensive chocolate for himself"). Use correct articles and phrasing.

예시: Yes, chocolate makes a popular gift because most people enjoy it. Also, gifting a high-quality chocolate box can feel special, since people may not splurge on it for themselves.

× Yes, I like eating chocolates and you can say me a chocolate addict or a sweet addict because I am into eating a lot of sweet things.

✓ Yes, I like eating chocolate and you can call me a chocolate addict or a sweet addict because I am into eating a lot of sweet things.

'Chocolates' is plural but when referring to the food in general, the uncountable noun 'chocolate' is more natural. 'Say me' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'call' when labeling someone. Use 'call me' followed by the noun phrase. Suggestion: use uncountable nouns for general references and the verb 'call' for labels.

× I eat chocolate daily.

✓ I eat chocolate every day.

'Daily' is acceptable but 'every day' is more natural in spoken English. No tense change required, just word choice. Suggestion: use 'every day' for frequency in conversational responses.

× Yes, I often ate chocolate when I was a kid and my parents used to buy a full box of chocolate for me and I finished that whole box.

✓ Yes, I often ate chocolate when I was a kid; my parents used to buy a full box of chocolate for me and I would finish the whole box.

Mixing 'used to' with simple past 'finished' is acceptable, but 'would finish' better expresses habitual past action. Keep consistent past habitual phrasing. Suggestion: use 'used to' or 'would' with habitual past actions.

× I used to finish that whole box in a week.

✓ I used to finish the whole box in a week.

'That whole box' is awkward when referring to a previously mentioned item; 'the whole box' is more natural. Tense 'used to' correctly indicates a past habit. Suggestion: use definite article 'the' for previously mentioned items.

× Chocolate is popular around the world because you can have a different variety of chocolate and there are many different types of chocolate, white chocolate, dark chocolate, milk chocolate, so you have people can try the each of them.

✓ Chocolate is popular around the world because there is a wide variety of chocolate types, such as white chocolate, dark chocolate, and milk chocolate, so people can try each of them.

Sentence has awkward conjunctions and word order. 'You can have a different variety' is incorrect; use 'there is a wide variety' or 'many different types'. 'So you have people can try the each of them' is ungrammatical; correct form is 'so people can try each of them.' Suggestion: simplify and use 'there is' for existence and 'such as' for examples; place 'so' before the clause it connects.

× I love milk chocolate and white chocolate. I don't like dark chocolate because it's a slight bitter in taste and it makes me feel like vomit or something like that.

✓ I love milk chocolate and white chocolate. I don't like dark chocolate because it is slightly bitter in taste and it makes me feel like vomiting or sick.

'A slight bitter' is incorrect: use adverb 'slightly bitter' to modify the adjective. 'Feel like vomit' is ungrammatical; use 'feel like vomiting' or 'feel sick.' Suggestion: use adverbs to modify adjectives and gerunds after 'feel like.'

× Yes, it is a good choice of giving chocolates as a gift to others as they would love it and I think nobody would buy a expensive chocolate for himself or herself.

✓ Yes, it is a good choice to give chocolates as a gift to others because they would like them, and I think nobody would buy an expensive chocolate for themselves.

'Choice of giving' is awkward; use 'choice to give.' 'They would love it' mismatches plural 'chocolates' so use 'them.' 'A expensive' should be 'an expensive' before a vowel sound. Use gender-neutral singular 'themselves' instead of 'himself or herself.' Suggestion: match pronouns with their antecedents and use correct articles.

× So it is good to gift them these chocolates which are expensive.

✓ So it is good to give them these expensive chocolates.

'Gift them these chocolates' is acceptable in meaning but 'give them these expensive chocolates' is more natural. 'Which are expensive' is a non-restrictive relative clause but here a simple adjective works: 'expensive chocolates.' Suggestion: use concise noun phrase order: determiner + adjective + noun.