Chocolate— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid spelling errors (Snickers), and use one or two supporting reasons with linking words. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I love eating chocolate, especially Snickers bars. I usually have one during exams because it helps me stay awake and improves my concentration. As a result, I feel more relaxed and less stressed afterwards.

제안: Give a concise frequency and one clear reason. Correct repetition and awkward phrasing. Use linking words like because or so to connect ideas. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

예시: I usually eat chocolate after lunch, about three or four times a week, because I often feel low in energy then. Eating chocolate gives me a quick boost, so I can concentrate on my tasks more effectively.

제안: Organize into a clear past-tense response. Correct grammar and remove repetitions; give one specific example or memory. Use linking words like when and because.

예시: Yes, I often ate chocolate as a child. My grandparents used to give me chocolate on special occasions, especially on my birthday, and I remember getting a Snickers bar because it was my favorite.

제안: Answer with a clear topic sentence and two specific reasons. Fix subject-verb agreement and be more precise about examples (brands, flavours, affordability). Use linking words like because and moreover.

예시: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it comes in many flavours to suit different tastes, and there are many brands at various price points. Moreover, chocolate is widely available and often associated with celebrations, which increases its appeal.

제안: State your preference clearly, give one or two specific reasons, and avoid wordy or repetitive phrases. Use linking words like because and so for clarity and keep it concise.

예시: My favourite flavour is dark chocolate because it has a rich, slightly bitter taste I enjoy. I also find it gives me a small energy lift during exams and improves my mood when I'm tired.

제안: Make a clear opinion sentence and provide one or two relevant examples. Correct grammar and awkward phrasing, avoid repeating verbs. Use linking words like for example or for instance.

예시: Yes, I think chocolate makes a nice gift because it is a simple, enjoyable treat that shows appreciation. For example, I often give chocolate to children who win a competition or to friends as a small thank-you present.

× Yes I love to eat chocolate, specially sneaker bars.

✓ Yes, I love to eat chocolate, especially Snickers bars.

Use 'especially' (adverb) instead of 'specially' for emphasis; 'Snickers' is a brand name and should be capitalized and pluralized as 'Snickers bars'. Also add a comma after 'Yes' for clarity.

× I often eat 1 during exam time because it keeps me up and help me concentrate a bit so I feel relaxed afterwards.

✓ I often eat one during exam time because it keeps me up and helps me concentrate a bit, so I feel relaxed afterwards.

Use 'one' instead of numeral '1' in formal writing. 'Helps' must agree with singular subject 'it' (third person singular present), so use 'helps'. Add a comma before 'so' connecting clauses. 'Help me' was incorrect due to missing -s.

× I often eat chocolate after my lunch because that time I feel low and it helps to boost my energy and I can concentrate on my task with very effective way so it I feel comfortable comfortable after that.

✓ I often eat chocolate after lunch because at that time I feel low; it helps to boost my energy and I can concentrate on my tasks more effectively, so I feel comfortable afterwards.

Remove 'my' before 'lunch' for natural phrasing. Use 'at that time' rather than 'that time'. 'Tasks' plural fits general activities. Use adverb 'effectively' instead of adjective 'effective'. Remove duplicate word 'comfortable'. Rearranged clauses and added punctuation for clarity.

× Looking back, when I was child I often ate chocolate because my grandparents gave gave me a in a one day and on especially occasions such as on my birthday she gave me a sneaker bar because I love the chocolate.

✓ Looking back, when I was a child I often ate chocolate because my grandparents gave me chocolate on special occasions; for example, on my birthday my grandmother gave me a Snickers bar because I loved chocolate.

Add article 'a' before 'child'. Remove duplicate 'gave'. Use 'gave me chocolate on special occasions' for clarity. 'She' is vague; specify 'my grandmother' and use past tense 'gave' and 'loved' to maintain past timeframe. Use 'Snickers' capitalization.

× In recent years, chocolates are very famous everywhere because it has a variety of flavours and people prefer to eat according to their choice.

✓ In recent years, chocolate has become very popular everywhere because it comes in a variety of flavours and people prefer different types according to their tastes.

Use singular 'chocolate' as an uncountable noun when speaking generally and 'has become' to indicate change over recent years. 'Comes in a variety of flavours' is natural; 'people prefer different types according to their tastes' fixes awkward 'eat according to their choice'.

× It has a lot of brands of chocolate, some are foreign brand which are more.

✓ There are a lot of chocolate brands, and some are foreign brands which are more expensive or well-known.

Use plural 'brands' not 'a lot of brands of chocolate' for concise phrasing. Begin with 'There are' to introduce existence. 'Foreign brand which are more' is incomplete; clarify what 'more' refers to (e.g., more expensive or better known).

× To be honest, my favorite chocolate flavour is dark chocolate because during my exam it helps to boost my energy and make my mood better when I feel tired, so that is why I like the most in my daily routine.

✓ To be honest, my favorite chocolate flavour is dark chocolate because during exams it helps boost my energy and improve my mood when I feel tired, so I like to have it in my daily routine.

Use plural 'exams' for general reference. 'Helps boost' is correct without 'to'. Use 'improve my mood' rather than 'make my mood better'. 'I like to have it in my daily routine' is clearer than 'I like the most in my daily routine'.

× Yes, I think it is a very good idea to give a chocolate as a gift to other because it is show our feelings and rewards.

✓ Yes, I think it is a very good idea to give chocolate as a gift to others because it shows our feelings and serves as a reward.

Do not use the article 'a' before uncountable noun 'chocolate' when speaking generally. Use plural 'others'. 'Shows' agrees with 'it' and 'serves as a reward' clarifies meaning. Remove extra 'it is' redundancy.

× First of all, if children took take part in competition and won a first prize, then definitely I give chocolate.

✓ First of all, if children take part in a competition and win first prize, then I would definitely give them chocolate.

Use conditional structure: present simple in the 'if' clause ('take part' and 'win') and a conditional 'would' in the main clause for hypothetical situations. Include article 'a' before 'competition' and 'them' as object of 'give'.