Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to avoid filler words like 'umm' and 'uh' to make your answer sound more natural and confident. Also, correct pronunciation errors such as 'seeing' instead of 'singing'. Use a clear topic sentence and provide concise reasons with linking words to improve coherence.

예시: I don't like singing because I'm not good at it. For example, I struggle with melody and often forget the lyrics, which makes me feel uncomfortable.

제안: Focus on grammatical accuracy and sentence structure. Avoid filler words and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, use 'although' or 'but' to explain contrasting ideas. Also, be careful with verb tenses and word choice.

예시: Yes, I took a singing class in middle school with my best friend. However, I only attended three times because I didn't make much progress, so I lost my passion for learning.

제안: Improve pronunciation and grammar, such as 'sing' instead of 'see' and correct verb forms. Use linking words like 'because' and 'and' appropriately to connect ideas. Try to make your sentences clearer and more concise.

예시: If I had to choose someone to sing for, it would be my husband because he is a good singer. I fell in love with him when he first sang to me, and I often imagine us singing a song together one day.

제안: Work on pronunciation and avoid repeating words like 'a a'. Use linking words such as 'even though' and 'because' correctly to make your answer coherent. Also, try to be more specific by giving examples of how singing brings happiness.

예시: Yes, definitely. Even for people who cannot sing well, like me, singing is a form of entertainment that provides a carefree time. It also brings back good memories through its beautiful lyrics.

× Personally, I'm not fan of seeing because I cannot do that well.

✓ Personally, I'm not a fan of singing because I cannot do that well.

The sentence is missing the article 'a' before 'fan', which is necessary when using 'fan' as a singular countable noun. Also, 'seeing' is a typo and should be 'singing'.

× Umm, I cannot do well with melody.

✓ Umm, I cannot do well with melodies.

'Melody' in this context should be plural 'melodies' because it refers to the general concept of musical tunes, which are countable. Using plural better fits the meaning here.

× Yes I when during my middle school time I signed up for a same class with my best friend umm but I only go there for like umm 3 times because I don't think I made a lot of progress so I lose lost my passionate of learning.

✓ Yes, when I was in middle school, I signed up for the same class as my best friend, but I only went there about three times because I didn't think I made a lot of progress, so I lost my passion for learning.

Several errors: 'I when during' is incorrect; it should be 'when I was'. 'a same class' should be 'the same class'. 'go' should be past tense 'went' to match past context. 'lose lost' is redundant; correct is 'lost'. 'passionate' is an adjective, but the noun 'passion' is needed here. Also, 'of learning' is correct preposition usage.

× Yes I when during my middle school time I signed up for a same class with my best friend umm but I only go there for like umm 3 times because I don't think I made a lot of progress so I lose lost my passionate of learning.

✓ Yes, when I was in middle school, I signed up for the same class as my best friend, but I only went there about three times because I didn't think I made a lot of progress, so I lost my passion for learning.

The preposition 'with' is incorrect when referring to attending the same class; 'as' is the correct preposition. Also, 'of learning' is correct after 'passion'.

× Yes I when during my middle school time I signed up for a same class with my best friend umm but I only go there for like umm 3 times because I don't think I made a lot of progress so I lose lost my passionate of learning.

✓ Yes, when I was in middle school, I signed up for the same class as my best friend, but I only went there about three times because I didn't think I made a lot of progress, so I lost my passion for learning.

The verb 'go' should be in past tense 'went' to match the past time frame. Also, 'lose lost' is incorrect; only 'lost' is needed.

× If I had to see a person who I want to sing for, I would like to sing to my husband because he's a good singer and I fall in love with him when he's first sing to me and I always imagine one day we can sing one song together.

✓ If I had to see a person who I want to sing for, I would like to sing to my husband because he's a good singer and I fell in love with him when he first sang to me, and I always imagine one day we can sing a song together.

'Fall' should be past tense 'fell' to match the past event. 'He's first sing' is incorrect; it should be 'he first sang' using past tense. Also, 'one song' is better as 'a song' for natural expression.

× If I had to see a person who I want to sing for, I would like to sing to my husband because he's a good singer and I fall in love with him when he's first sing to me and I always imagine one day we can sing one song together.

✓ If I had to see a person who I want to sing for, I would like to sing to my husband because he's a good singer and I fell in love with him when he first sang to me, and I always imagine one day we can sing a song together.

The phrase 'sing to my husband' is correct; no preposition error here. However, 'sing for' is used earlier correctly. No preposition correction needed in this sentence.

× I only go there for like umm 3 times because I don't think I made a lot of progress so I lose lost my passionate of learning.

✓ I only went there about three times because I didn't think I made a lot of progress, so I lost my passion for learning.

'Like' is informal and unnecessary here; 'about' is more appropriate for quantifying approximate numbers. Also, '3' should be spelled out as 'three' in formal speech.

× If I had to see a person who I want to sing for, I would like to sing to my husband because he's a good singer and I fall in love with him when he's first sing to me and I always imagine one day we can sing one song together.

✓ If I had to choose a person to sing for, I would like to sing to my husband because he's a good singer and I fell in love with him when he first sang to me, and I always imagine one day we can sing a song together.

'See a person who I want to sing for' is awkward and incorrect; 'choose a person to sing for' is clearer. Also, 'who I want to sing for' is better expressed as 'to sing for' to avoid ending with a preposition.

× Yes, definitely, even though for the people who cannot sing for example like me, because seeing is a kind of entertainment, it always offers you a a carefree time that you can only enjoy yourself with the song and it also brings lots of good memories for you through its beautiful lyrics.

✓ Yes, definitely, even for people who cannot sing, like me, because singing is a kind of entertainment. It always offers you a carefree time where you can enjoy yourself with the song, and it also brings lots of good memories through its beautiful lyrics.

'Even though for the people' is awkward; 'even for people' is better. 'Seeing' is a typo and should be 'singing'. The sentence is long and run-on; splitting into two sentences improves clarity. 'A a' is a typo and should be 'a'. 'Enjoy yourself with the song' is better as 'enjoy yourself with the song' or 'enjoy the song'.