Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and 'because' repeated unnecessarily. Make your answer more concise and natural by directly stating your opinion and supporting it with clear reasons. Use linking words like 'however' appropriately to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: Honestly, I do not like singing because I lack confidence in my singing abilities. However, I enjoy listening to music as it helps me relax and unwind after a long day.

제안: Focus on clear sentence structure and avoid awkward phrasing like 'this the singing also not fascinates me'. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically and provide specific reasons or feelings to enrich your answer.

예시: No, I have never learned how to sing because I am not confident in my abilities, and singing has never really fascinated me. However, I truly admire people who have a passion for singing.

제안: Avoid repetition and filler words like 'umm'. Use correct verb forms and sentence structure. Provide a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details using linking words to make your answer coherent and natural.

예시: Honestly, I do not like singing because I feel shy and lack confidence. However, if I ever get the chance in the future, I would definitely like to sing for my daughter.

제안: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and complete your sentences fully. Use linking words to connect your ideas clearly. Also, be specific about how singing brings happiness and relate it to your personal experience for a more effective answer.

예시: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because it helps people unwind and express their emotions. For example, I prefer to listen to music whenever I feel stressed, which makes me feel better.

× I do not like singing because I, uh, because I, because I'm not confident about my singing abilities.

✓ I do not like singing because I'm not confident about my singing abilities.

The sentence has unnecessary repetition and filler words which disrupt the flow. Removing redundant phrases improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× it uh, calms me and unwind me after a long day.

✓ it calms me and unwinds me after a long day.

The verb 'unwind' should be in the third person singular form 'unwinds' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. Also, filler words like 'uh' should be omitted for clarity.

× No, I have never learned singing because I'm not confident about my singing abilities and this the singing also not fascinates me in any of in my life.

✓ No, I have never learned singing because I'm not confident about my singing abilities and singing has never fascinated me at any time in my life.

The phrase 'this the singing also not fascinates me' is grammatically incorrect. 'Singing has never fascinated me' is the correct form. Also, 'in any of in my life' is incorrect; 'at any time in my life' is appropriate.

× I really feel shy and embarrassed in singing in front of others.

✓ I really feel shy and embarrassed singing in front of others.

The preposition 'in' before 'singing' is unnecessary. The gerund 'singing' can directly follow 'embarrassed' without 'in'.

× Umm but in future if I get chance to sing, I definitely sing for sing for my daughter.

✓ But in the future, if I get a chance to sing, I will definitely sing for my daughter.

The phrase 'in future' should be 'in the future'. 'Get chance' requires an article 'a'. The verb 'sing' needs to be in future tense 'will sing'. Also, 'sing for sing for' is a repetition error.

× I also prefer to listen music and whenever I feel stressed.

✓ I also prefer to listen to music whenever I feel stressed.

The verb 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' when followed by an object. Also, 'and' is unnecessary before 'whenever' in this context.