Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is good but try to avoid redundancy and improve sentence clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and keep your answer within 5 sentences. For example, explain why singing is fun and how it helps express feelings more clearly.

예시: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it allows me to express my feelings and gratitude. Moreover, singing with my friends makes the experience even more enjoyable and memorable.

제안: Try to use more natural expressions and avoid awkward phrases like 'boycotted from the music club'. Also, provide clearer reasons for your actions and use linking words to connect ideas logically.

예시: Yes, I took singing classes when I was in Grade 5 as part of a music club. However, after attending for a few days, I realized it wasn't for me, so I decided to join the football club instead.

제안: Your answer is heartfelt but could be clearer and more concise. Use linking words to connect your ideas and correct grammar mistakes. Also, avoid repeating the word 'dream' too often.

예시: I have always dreamed of singing a special song for my mom to express my love and gratitude. I hope to fulfill this dream soon when I achieve something important.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains many errors. Try to organize your ideas logically using linking words and provide specific examples. Also, avoid incomplete sentences and improve vocabulary usage.

예시: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people. For example, listening to happy songs can lift your mood, while sentimental songs can help you express your feelings. People often choose songs based on how they feel.

× I think singing is in way of expressing one's feelings, gratitude and the things that I remain in one's heart.

✓ I think singing is a way of expressing one's feelings, gratitude, and the things that remain in one's heart.

The phrase 'in way of' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'a way of'. Also, 'the things that I remain in one's heart' is incorrect; it should be 'the things that remain in one's heart' to properly convey the meaning.

× I love singing along with my friends, which is really fun and.

✓ I love singing along with my friends, which is really fun.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'and' without completing the thought, which is a sentence structure error. Removing 'and' completes the sentence properly.

× I had joined a music club where I had learned to sing, but it didn't really go well.

✓ I joined a music club where I learned to sing, but it didn't really go well.

Using past perfect 'had joined' and 'had learned' is unnecessary here as the simple past tense 'joined' and 'learned' is sufficient to describe past events in sequence.

× I took classes around three to four days, then boycotted from the music club and transferred to football club.

✓ I took classes for around three to four days, then quit the music club and transferred to the football club.

The phrase 'around three to four days' needs the preposition 'for' to indicate duration. 'Boycotted from' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'quit' or 'left'. Also, 'football club' needs the definite article 'the'.

× So there is my one dream, whenever I accept something big, I want to sing a big song for my mom, expressing my love and my gratitude towards her.

✓ So there is one dream of mine: whenever I achieve something big, I want to sing a big song for my mom, expressing my love and gratitude towards her.

'My one dream' is awkward; 'one dream of mine' is better. 'Accept something big' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'achieve'. Also, 'my gratitude towards her' is better without 'my' before gratitude for smoother expression.

× It has been one of my childhood dream and it's still my dream.

✓ It has been one of my childhood dreams and it's still my dream.

'Dream' should be plural 'dreams' because 'one of my childhood dreams' refers to one among multiple dreams.

× Hope I will complete it soon.

✓ I hope I will complete it soon.

The sentence lacks a subject; adding 'I' completes the sentence structure.

× Yes, I do think people can relate to this. Thinking really brings happiness, is Happ brings happiness to people.

✓ Yes, I do think people can relate to this. Singing really brings happiness; it brings happiness to people.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'Thinking really brings happiness, is Happ brings happiness to people' is incorrect and confusing. It should be corrected to 'Singing really brings happiness; it brings happiness to people.'

× There are better. There are many varieties of songs in the market.

✓ There are better songs. There are many varieties of songs in the market.

'There are better' is incomplete; it should be 'There are better songs' to be a complete sentence.

× The sentimental song or the happy song.

✓ Sentimental songs or happy songs.

Using 'The' with singular nouns here is incorrect; plural forms without 'the' are appropriate to refer to types of songs generally.

× You can listen according to your mood, but sing really.

✓ You can listen according to your mood, but singing is really enjoyable.

The phrase 'but sing really' is incomplete and unclear. It should be rephrased to 'but singing is really enjoyable' to complete the thought.