Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tự nhiên và rõ ràng, tuy nhiên bạn nên tránh lặp từ và sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Ngoài ra, bạn có thể thêm ví dụ cụ thể để làm câu trả lời sinh động hơn.

예시: Yes, I enjoy singing, especially during my free time because it helps me relax and express my emotions. Additionally, it allows me to connect with others who share the same interest, such as joining local singing clubs or karaoke nights.

제안: Câu trả lời có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác, làm giảm tính tự nhiên và hiệu quả. Bạn nên chú ý sử dụng thì đúng, sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và dùng từ phù hợp hơn. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn.

예시: Yes, I have learned how to sing. When I was in primary school, I took part in classes where I received basic vocal training and learned about rhythms. Singing has always been my passion, and it has really helped me improve my confidence.

제안: Câu trả lời thiếu sự rõ ràng và mạch lạc, bạn nên sử dụng liên từ để kết nối ý và mở rộng câu trả lời với các chi tiết cụ thể hơn. Ngoài ra, tránh dùng từ không chính xác như "improved effectively" mà nên dùng cách diễn đạt tự nhiên hơn.

예시: I want to sing for my mother because she used to think I wasn't good at singing. However, I have improved a lot recently, so I want to show her my progress and express my feelings through song.

제안: Câu trả lời có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không phù hợp, làm giảm tính tự nhiên và hiệu quả. Bạn nên chú ý sử dụng cấu trúc câu đúng, từ vựng chính xác và mở rộng câu trả lời với ví dụ cụ thể và liên kết ý rõ ràng hơn.

예시: Of course, singing can bring happiness to people because it helps them relax and express their emotions freely. For example, many people find that listening to their favorite songs reduces stress and lifts their mood. Additionally, singing with others creates a strong sense of community and belonging.

× I took part in a classes where I received basic vocal training and learn about rhythms.

✓ I took part in classes where I received basic vocal training and learned about rhythms.

The word 'classes' is plural, so the article 'a' should be removed. Also, 'learn' should be in past tense 'learned' to match the past tense context.

× I took part in a classes where I received basic vocal training and learn about rhythms.

✓ I took part in classes where I received basic vocal training and learned about rhythms.

The verb 'learn' should be in past tense 'learned' to be consistent with the past tense 'took' and 'received'.

× Singing has always been a passion of my socialism, really have me improve my confidence.

✓ Singing has always been a passion of mine; it has really helped me improve my confidence.

The phrase 'passion of my socialism' is incorrect and unclear. It should be 'passion of mine'. Also, the sentence structure is fragmented and missing auxiliary verbs; adding 'it has' clarifies the meaning.

× Nowadays I have improved effectively, so I want to express.

✓ Nowadays I have improved effectively, so I want to express myself.

The verb 'express' requires an object; the reflexive pronoun 'myself' is needed to complete the meaning.

× many people find that seeing their favorite songs reduce chat and lift their mood.

✓ many people find that singing their favorite songs reduces stress and lifts their mood.

The phrase 'seeing their favorite songs' is incorrect; it should be 'singing their favorite songs'. Also, 'reduce chat' is incorrect; likely intended 'reduce stress'. Subject-verb agreement corrected to 'reduces' and 'lifts'.

× Additionally, sing with others create a strong sense.

✓ Additionally, singing with others creates a strong sense of community.

The verb 'sing' should be in gerund form 'singing' to act as a noun. The verb 'create' should be 'creates' to agree with the singular subject 'singing'. The phrase 'a strong sense' is incomplete; adding 'of community' clarifies the meaning.