Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer needs to be more natural and clear. Avoid redundancy and incorrect phrases like 'to inhale'. Try to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, then add specific reasons using linking words. For example, explain why you prefer singing alone and how it affects your mood.

예시: Yes, I like singing, but I usually sing only when I am alone because I feel shy singing in public. Singing helps me relax and refresh my mind, especially when I am feeling stressed.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains confusing phrases like 'launch sing birthday'. Try to respond directly and clearly. Use linking words to explain how you practice singing and under what circumstances.

예시: No, I have never taken formal singing lessons. However, sometimes I try to imitate songs I watch on YouTube or TV, but only when I am alone, not in front of others.

제안: Your answer is heartfelt but incomplete and has some hesitation. Try to complete your sentences and avoid filler words like 'uh'. Use linking words to explain why you want to sing for your mother.

예시: If I had the chance to sing for someone, I would definitely dedicate a song to my mother because she means the world to me. Although I am not a professional singer, I would sing for her to show my love and appreciation.

제안: Your answer has good ideas but needs clearer expression and better grammar. Avoid filler words and use linking words to connect your ideas logically. Be specific about how singing helps people.

예시: I believe singing can bring happiness because it acts as a form of self-healing. It helps people relax and refresh their minds, especially when they are under pressure.

× You like singing? Yes, I like to sing song but when I am alone because I feel sad to sing in public.

✓ Do you like singing? Yes, I like to sing songs but only when I am alone because I feel sad to sing in public.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'You like singing?' as a statement instead of a question. Also, 'sing song' is incorrect; it should be 'sing songs' to indicate plural. The pronoun usage and sentence structure needed correction to form a proper question and statement.

× Mostly I sing when I alone to depress myself and to rejuvenate myself.

✓ Mostly I sing when I am alone to depress myself and to rejuvenate myself.

The sentence is missing the verb 'am' after 'I' which is necessary for correct subject-verb agreement and sentence completeness.

× It is type of therapy to inhale.

✓ It is a type of therapy to inhale.

The sentence is missing the article 'a' before 'type'. Also, 'to inhale' is unclear and likely incorrect in this context; however, as per instructions, only grammar issues from the list are corrected.

× No, I have never got a chance to launch sing birthday.

✓ No, I have never got a chance to sing publicly.

The phrase 'launch sing birthday' is incorrect and unclear. It seems the student meant 'sing publicly' or 'sing at a birthday'. The correction uses 'sing publicly' to fit the context and correct grammar.

× Sometime I try to imitate singing from the YouTube or listen watching song in ATV, but that is when when I am all alone, not in each other or in public.

✓ Sometimes I try to imitate singing from YouTube or listen to songs on ATV, but that is only when I am all alone, not with others or in public.

The sentence has multiple preposition errors: 'from the YouTube' should be 'from YouTube', 'listen watching song' should be 'listen to songs', 'in ATV' should be 'on ATV', and 'not in each other' should be 'not with others'. These corrections improve clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Yes, if I got opportunity to sing for someone, then I'll definitely, uh, dedicate my saying to my mother, which is my whole world and I love more than anyone else.

✓ Yes, if I got the opportunity to sing for someone, then I'll definitely dedicate my singing to my mother, who is my whole world and whom I love more than anyone else.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'saying' instead of 'singing'. Also, 'which' should be 'who' when referring to a person, and 'I love more than anyone else' needs 'whom' as the object of love. The article 'the' is also missing before 'opportunity'.

× Uh, in fact, I'm not a singer. I cannot sing well, but for my mother, I.

✓ Uh, in fact, I'm not a singer. I cannot sing well, but I would for my mother.

The original sentence ends abruptly and is incomplete. Adding 'I would' completes the sentence and clarifies the meaning.

× Singing UH is always self healing.

✓ Singing is always self-healing.

The interjection 'UH' is unnecessary and should be removed. Also, 'self healing' should be hyphenated as 'self-healing' when used as an adjective.

× It is type of therapy which make oneself relax and refresh.

✓ It is a type of therapy which makes oneself relax and refresh.

The sentence is missing the article 'a' before 'type'. Also, the verb 'make' should be 'makes' to agree with the singular subject 'therapy'.

× Without music one cannot uh imagine and how inconvenient life you will be in living in a pressure.

✓ Without music, one cannot imagine how inconvenient life would be when living under pressure.

The original sentence is awkward and ungrammatical. The correction improves sentence structure, removes unnecessary interjections, and clarifies meaning.