Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains some errors, such as confusing 'thinking' with 'singing'. To improve, make sure to directly answer the question with clear and relevant vocabulary. Also, avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise and natural. For example, start with a clear topic sentence and then add a reason or example.

예시: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relax and express my emotions, even though I haven't had formal training.

제안: Your answer is generally clear but could be improved by using more natural phrasing and linking words to make it coherent. Also, avoid repeating the same idea. Try to provide a concise answer with a reason and an example if possible.

예시: No, I have never taken formal singing lessons because I wasn't interested in becoming a professional singer. I usually just sing for my own enjoyment at home.

제안: Your answer is understandable but a bit disorganized and contains some grammatical errors. To improve, organize your ideas clearly using linking words and correct grammar. Also, try to be more specific and concise.

예시: I usually sing for myself, but sometimes I enjoy singing with my friends during karaoke sessions, especially when we sing love songs together.

제안: Your answer has some confusion and grammatical mistakes, such as mixing 'thinking' and 'singing'. To improve, directly answer the question with clear and accurate vocabulary, and provide a reason or example. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because it releases dopamine, which improves mood and helps people feel joyful and relaxed.

× Yes, I do love thinking, even if I don't have a big talent and I didn't attend some music classes.

✓ Yes, I do love singing, even if I don't have a big talent and I haven't attended any music classes.

The student mistakenly used 'thinking' instead of 'singing', which is the correct verb related to the question. Also, 'didn't attend' should be 'haven't attended' to match the present perfect tense indicating experience up to now.

× I didn't attend some music classes.

✓ I haven't attended any music classes.

The use of 'didn't attend' is simple past, but the context suggests experience up to now, so present perfect 'haven't attended' is more appropriate. Also, 'some' should be 'any' in negative sentences.

× I just sung for myself.

✓ I just sang for myself.

The past tense of 'sing' is 'sang', not 'sung'. 'Sung' is the past participle and should be used with auxiliary verbs like 'have' or 'had'.

× I wasn't so interested to become a singer or kind of amateur singer.

✓ I wasn't so interested in becoming a singer or some kind of amateur singer.

The correct preposition after 'interested' is 'in'. Also, 'to become' should be changed to the gerund form 'becoming' after 'interested in'.

× Usually for myself, but sometimes I can sing with my friends when we want to sing like karaoke style or just when I have a desire to sing when a love song and I want to sing with this song.

✓ Usually for myself, but sometimes I sing with my friends when we want to sing karaoke style or just when I have a desire to sing a love song and I want to sing that song.

The sentence had awkward phrasing and incorrect pronoun use. 'Sing like karaoke style' should be 'sing karaoke style'. 'When a love song' is incomplete; it should be 'a love song'. 'Sing with this song' is incorrect; it should be 'sing that song'.

× Oh yes, I think thinking can produce dopamine that can. Enhance the mood and I think it's important, people just saying because it makes people to smile and laugh sometimes.

✓ Oh yes, I think singing can produce dopamine that can enhance the mood, and I think it's important. People just sing because it makes them smile and laugh sometimes.

The student mistakenly wrote 'thinking' instead of 'singing'. The sentence was fragmented and had incorrect verb forms like 'people just saying' which should be 'people just sing'. Also, 'makes people to smile' should be 'makes them smile'.