Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is a bit long and has some grammatical errors. Try to keep your response concise and directly answer the question first, then add a supporting detail. Also, avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure for clarity.

예시: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me improve my language skills. For example, I practice singing in English and Korean to sound more natural.

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and repetitive. Try to organise your ideas logically and avoid repeating words. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, I have learnt to sing both at school with a teacher and through online apps. My first lesson focused on vocal techniques, which I found very helpful.

제안: Your answer is a bit confusing and contains many fillers. Try to be more confident and clear in your response. Structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, avoiding hesitation sounds.

예시: I usually sing for myself and sometimes for my mother. However, I prefer singing songs by famous artists rather than my own compositions.

제안: Your answer is incomplete and lacks clarity. Avoid trailing off and make sure to finish your sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific reasons or examples.

예시: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because it helps people relax and concentrate. Additionally, singing and listening to music often encourage people to dance, which lifts their mood.

× Actually, I love singing since my 11 years old 'cause I always try to sing beautifully and natural in English, Korean and other languages.

✓ Actually, I have loved singing since I was 11 years old because I always try to sing beautifully and naturally in English, Korean and other languages.

The phrase 'since my 11 years old' is incorrect; it should be 'since I was 11 years old' to indicate the starting point in time. Also, 'natural' is an adjective but should be the adverb 'naturally' to modify the verb 'sing'. Additionally, 'cause' is informal; 'because' is more appropriate in this context.

× Yes for sure I learned how to sing with my teacher in the school and with online apps and other like these things.

✓ Yes, for sure, I learned how to sing with my teacher at school and with online apps and other similar things.

The phrase 'in the school' should be 'at school' to correctly indicate location. 'Other like these things' is awkward; 'other similar things' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× And firstly my first lesson was was related to vocals I remember.

✓ And my first lesson was related to vocals, I remember.

The repetition 'was was' is a typographical error and should be corrected to a single 'was'. Also, 'firstly' is unnecessary here and can be omitted for clarity.

× Who do you want to sing for?

✓ Who do you want to sing for?

No correction needed; the sentence is grammatically correct.

× I don't think if I have someone to sing for, but umm in my opinion, uh, I will sing for my mother and for myself.

✓ I don't think I have someone to sing for, but umm, in my opinion, uh, I will sing for my mother and for myself.

The phrase 'I don't think if I have' is incorrect; it should be 'I don't think I have' to express doubt or negation properly.

× But no, I'm concentrating with uh, singing only other songs like artists and celebrities, not my own songs.

✓ But no, I'm concentrating on singing only other songs like those of artists and celebrities, not my own songs.

The verb 'concentrate' is followed by the preposition 'on', not 'with'. Also, 'like artists and celebrities' is unclear; it should be 'like those of artists and celebrities' to specify songs belonging to them.

× Yes for sure. Generally singing is the best thing for concentrating and relaxing your body and brain and while singing and listening a song people can dance and.

✓ Yes, for sure. Generally, singing is the best thing for concentrating and relaxing your body and brain, and while singing and listening to a song, people can dance.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks proper punctuation. 'Listening a song' should be 'listening to a song'. The final 'and' is unnecessary and should be removed to complete the sentence properly.