Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is relevant but could be more natural and concise. Avoid awkward phrasing like "as my personality" and try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. Also, try to be more specific about how singing changes the atmosphere.

예시: Yes, I enjoy singing because it allows me to entertain people and create a positive atmosphere. For example, when I sing at gatherings, it often lifts everyone's mood and makes the event more enjoyable.

제안: Your answer is clear but could be improved by using more natural expressions and linking words. Also, specify who "their favorite singer" refers to for clarity.

예시: I have never formally learned how to sing, but I enjoy imitating my favourite singers and often sing along when I listen to music, which helps me improve my skills.

제안: This answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Be sure to directly answer the question with a clear subject and use linking words to explain your reasons. Avoid confusing phrases like "I've made a risk for my friends with the music."

예시: I would like to sing for my friend UMM at their wedding because it would be a special way to celebrate their big day and show my support.

제안: Your answer has good ideas but needs clearer grammar and more natural phrasing. Use linking words to connect your points and be specific about how singing affects emotions.

예시: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people. For instance, during ceremonies, singing can comfort those who are sad and enhance the joy of happy occasions, helping everyone feel grateful.

× I do like singing because as my personality, I love to entertain the people around me.

✓ I do like singing because, as part of my personality, I love to entertain the people around me.

The phrase 'as my personality' is incorrect; the correct prepositional phrase is 'as part of my personality' to express that entertaining others is an aspect of the speaker's personality.

× Yes, when we singing in the ceremony, it can bring the happiness to the people.

✓ Yes, when we sing in the ceremony, it can bring happiness to the people.

The verb 'singing' is incorrectly used without an auxiliary verb. The correct form is the base verb 'sing' after 'when we' to indicate habitual action. Also, 'the happiness' should be 'happiness' as it is an uncountable noun here.

× Even in a sadness or in a joyful event, the singing is comfortable our feeling to be grateful.

✓ Even in sadness or in a joyful event, singing comforts our feelings and helps us to be grateful.

The phrase 'in a sadness' is incorrect; 'in sadness' is the correct form as 'sadness' is uncountable. Also, 'the singing is comfortable our feeling' is ungrammatical; it should be 'singing comforts our feelings'. The sentence structure is improved for clarity and correctness.