Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear and shows enthusiasm, but there are some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use correct verb tenses and more natural expressions. Also, avoid redundancy by combining ideas more smoothly.

예시: Yes, I love singing. I started taking music lessons when I was three years old, and it brings me immense pleasure and peace.

제안: Your answer provides relevant details but has grammatical mistakes and some unclear phrasing. Use past tense consistently and improve sentence structure. Also, use linking words to connect ideas logically.

예시: Yes, I learned to sing when I was three years old. My music teacher, Revathi, taught me classical music, and I used to go to her house for lessons.

제안: Your answer expresses your feelings well but is fragmented and has punctuation issues. Try to combine sentences using linking words and correct punctuation to make your answer more coherent and natural.

예시: I would love to sing for the church choir because it gives me a calm sense of fulfillment. Singing in the presence of the Lord is very relaxing for me.

제안: Your answer is relevant and clear but could be improved by using smoother linking words and more natural phrasing. Avoid repetition and use varied vocabulary to express your ideas.

예시: Definitely, singing helps people relax their minds and relieve stress. Therefore, I believe singing can bring happiness into people's lives.

× I learn the music lessons when I am 3 year old.

✓ I learned music lessons when I was 3 years old.

The phrase '3 year old' should be plural '3 years old' because it refers to age in years. Also, 'learn' should be in past tense 'learned' to match the time reference, and 'the music lessons' is better as 'music lessons' without 'the' here.

× I learn the music lessons when I am 3 year old.

✓ I learned music lessons when I was 3 years old.

The action happened in the past, so the verb 'learn' should be in past tense 'learned'. Also, 'am' should be 'was' to match past tense.

× I learned singing when I was 3 year old.

✓ I learned singing when I was 3 years old.

The phrase '3 year old' should be plural '3 years old' when referring to age.

× My music teacher name was Revathi and I go to, I used to go to her house to learn the classical music.

✓ My music teacher's name was Revathi and I used to go to her house to learn classical music.

The phrase 'music teacher name' needs a possessive form 'music teacher's name'. Also, 'the classical music' is better as 'classical music' without 'the' because it refers to a general type of music. The phrase 'I go to, I used to go' is redundant; 'I used to go' is correct for past habitual action.

× Who do you want to sing for?

✓ Who do you want to sing for?

This sentence is grammatically correct; no correction needed.

× I would love to sing for the church choir it gives me. Calm fulfillment in my life.

✓ I would love to sing for the church choir; it gives me calm fulfillment in my life.

The original sentence is a run-on sentence. It should be separated properly with a semicolon or period to connect two independent clauses. Also, 'Calm' should not be capitalized in the middle of the sentence.

× I would love to sing for the church choir it gives me. Calm fulfillment in my life.

✓ I would love to sing for the church choir; it gives me calm fulfillment in my life.

The use of 'the' before 'church choir' is correct if referring to a specific choir. The main issue is sentence structure, not the article.

× It is so much relaxing to sing in the presence of the Lord.

✓ It is so relaxing to sing in the presence of the Lord.

The phrase 'so much relaxing' is incorrect; 'so relaxing' is the correct form. The definite article 'the' before 'Lord' is correct.

× Definitely while singing, people can relax their mind, they can ease the stress which they're going through.

✓ Definitely, while singing, people can relax their minds and ease the stress they are going through.

'Relax their mind' should be plural 'relax their minds' because 'people' is plural. Also, 'which they're going through' is better as 'they are going through' for clarity and correctness.

× So I definitely vouch for singing that can create happiness to people's life.

✓ So I definitely vouch for singing that can create happiness in people's lives.

The phrase 'happiness to people's life' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'in' and 'life' should be plural 'lives' to agree with 'people's'.