Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more concise and grammatically correct. Avoid redundancy and unclear phrases. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then explain why you like singing with specific details.

예시: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relieve stress. Moreover, my friends often encourage me to sing with them at KTV, which makes the experience enjoyable and memorable.

제안: Focus on clear sentence structure and avoid filler words like 'umm'. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. Provide specific details about your experience with singing at home.

예시: No, I have never formally learned how to sing. However, my dad used to sing a lot at home, and we often sang songs together after listening to them, which made me feel comfortable singing anywhere.

제안: Your answer is quite good but could be improved by correcting minor grammar errors and making the sentences more natural. Use linking words to enhance coherence.

예시: I would love to sing for my lover because music is a powerful way to express emotions and show affection. Therefore, I am preparing a special song to perform for them one day, which will be a meaningful way to communicate my feelings.

제안: Avoid repetition and improve sentence clarity. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically. Provide specific reasons why singing brings happiness to both singers and listeners.

예시: Yes, definitely. Singing allows people to express their feelings and relieve stress. As a result, it brings happiness not only to the singer but also to the listeners, who can connect with the emotions conveyed.

× Yes, I like singing because singing can help me to release my stress.

✓ Yes, I like singing because singing can help me release my stress.

The verb 'help' is followed by the base form of the verb without 'to' in this context. Using 'to release' is unnecessary and less natural here.

× And actually I didn't seem too well, but all of my friends encouraged me to sing and we can enjoy to sing together and we often goes to KTV together.

✓ And actually I didn't seem too well, but all of my friends encouraged me to sing and we can enjoy singing together and we often go to KTV together.

The phrase 'enjoy to sing' is incorrect; 'enjoy' should be followed by the gerund form 'singing'. Also, 'we often goes' is incorrect subject-verb agreement; it should be 'we often go'.

× That's pretty good activity, like out of the world.

✓ That's a pretty good activity, like out of this world.

The noun 'activity' is singular and requires the article 'a'. Also, the idiom is 'out of this world', not 'out of the world'.

× No, I never learned how to sing.

✓ No, I have never learned how to sing.

Since the action relates to experience up to now, the present perfect tense 'have never learned' is more appropriate than simple past 'never learned'.

× No one's really teach me that before.

✓ No one's really taught me that before.

The verb 'teach' should be in the past participle form 'taught' to agree with the auxiliary 'has' implied in 'No one's' (No one has). Also, 'No one's' is a contraction of 'No one has' here.

× But umm, when I was umm later my dad used to sing a lot.

✓ But umm, later when I was young, my dad used to sing a lot.

The sentence structure is confusing; rearranging to 'later when I was young' clarifies the time reference.

× So in my house we after we listen a song, we can sing that song and it's I like I feel free to sing at every place.

✓ So in my house, after we listen to a song, we can sing that song and I feel free to sing anywhere.

The phrase 'we after we listen a song' is incorrect; it should be 'after we listen to a song'. Also, 'it's I like I feel free' is ungrammatical and should be simplified to 'I feel free'. 'At every place' is better expressed as 'anywhere'.

× Who do you want to sing for?

✓ Who do you want to sing for?

This sentence is grammatically correct; no correction needed.

× I would love to sing for my lover because I believe music is a powerful way to express emotions and show affections.

✓ I would love to sing for my lover because I believe music is a powerful way to express emotions and show affection.

The word 'affection' is an uncountable noun here and should not be pluralized as 'affections'.

× Singing a special song for them will be a meaningful way to communicate my feelings and I'm actually preparing a song to perform them one day.

✓ Singing a special song for them will be a meaningful way to communicate my feelings and I'm actually preparing a song to perform for them one day.

The verb 'perform' requires the preposition 'for' when indicating the audience. 'Perform them' is incorrect.

× Yes, definitely, because like I say, singing can express express our feelings and also can release our pressure.

✓ Yes, definitely, because like I say, singing can express our feelings and also can relieve our stress.

The phrase 'release our pressure' is unnatural; 'relieve our stress' is the correct collocation. Also, the repeated word 'express' is a typo.

× So for me, singing is really can bring happiness to people and either the singer one and the listen one listener can feel the the thing they wanna show too.

✓ So for me, singing can really bring happiness to people, and both the singer and the listener can feel the things they want to express too.

The sentence has redundant and incorrect phrases: 'is really can' should be 'can really'; 'either the singer one and the listen one listener' should be 'both the singer and the listener'; 'the the thing they wanna show' should be 'the things they want to express'. Also, 'wanna' is informal and should be 'want to' in formal speech.