Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer shows enthusiasm but lacks clarity and coherence. Try to organize your ideas more clearly and avoid filler words like 'uh'. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific reasons why you enjoy singing.

예시: Yes, I like singing because it allows me to express my feelings and thoughts. Moreover, singing helps me feel confident and relaxed. For example, when I sing happy songs, I feel joyful and energized.

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Focus on directly answering the question with clear sentences. Explain your reasons with specific details and use linking words to improve coherence.

예시: No, I have never taken singing lessons because I don't believe I have the talent to become a professional singer. However, I enjoy singing freely as it allows me to express myself creatively.

제안: Your answer is confusing and contains many hesitations. Try to speak more clearly and organize your thoughts logically. Use simple sentences to explain who you sing for and why, providing specific reasons.

예시: I usually sing for myself because I find it a good way to motivate my emotions. Singing helps me understand my feelings better, even if I don't perform for others.

제안: Your answer is relevant but could be more fluent and detailed. Avoid repetition and filler words. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific examples to support your opinion.

예시: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness to people. For instance, at concerts like Taylor Swift's, many fans feel motivated and joyful because of the music and atmosphere.

× I like singing because I can use it to, uh, express myself, like my mind and uh, it's also I can feel very confidence or, uh, relax when I sing a song is very happy and very hard.

✓ I like singing because I can use it to express myself, like my thoughts, and I can also feel very confident or relaxed when I sing a song that is very happy or very hard.

The word 'confidence' is a noun but should be the adjective 'confident' to describe the feeling. Also, 'relax' should be the adjective 'relaxed' to describe the state. The sentence structure was unclear and needed rephrasing for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I didn't learn how to sing because I don't think I have the talents to become professional.

✓ I haven't learned how to sing because I don't think I have the talent to become a professional.

The present perfect tense 'haven't learned' is more appropriate here to indicate experience up to now. 'Talents' should be singular 'talent' when referring to ability in general. Also, 'a professional' needs the article 'a' before it.

× But I think thinking is very free.

✓ But I think singing is very freeing.

The original sentence uses 'thinking' incorrectly; the intended meaning is about singing. Also, 'very free' is awkward; 'very freeing' or 'liberating' is more appropriate to express the feeling.

× I can think anything I want to sing and I also can present myself.

✓ I can sing anything I want and I can also express myself.

The phrase 'think anything I want to sing' is incorrect; it should be 'sing anything I want.' Also, 'present myself' is better expressed as 'express myself' in this context.

× I want to things for myself actually, I don't like to, uh, express myself to other people.

✓ I want to sing for myself actually; I don't like to express myself to other people.

The phrase 'want to things' is incorrect; it should be 'want to sing.' The sentence also needed punctuation for clarity.

× I want to let myself know, uh, to, to motivate my, uh, emotions or to notes, uh, my minds of that I want to present.

✓ I want to understand myself better, to motivate my emotions, or to note the thoughts I want to express.

The original sentence is unclear and uses incorrect phrases like 'let myself know' and 'notes my minds.' The correction clarifies the intended meaning with proper expressions.

× Yes, I, I think it's bringing the happiness to people 'cause just like the concert, like the Taylor Swift concerts, many people will go to the concert and then they can, uh, can be motivated by this, uh, singing.

✓ Yes, I think it brings happiness to people because, just like at concerts, such as Taylor Swift's, many people go and can be motivated by the singing.

The phrase 'it's bringing the happiness' is awkward; 'it brings happiness' is more natural. Also, 'the concert' should be pluralized or generalized as 'concerts.' The sentence was restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.