Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer lacks clarity and coherence. Try to give a clear opinion first, then support it with reasons. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and redundant phrases. Also, ensure your sentences are grammatically correct and relevant to the question.

예시: No, I don't like singing because I think my voice is not very good. Even if I had a good voice, I wouldn't want to sing because it's not my interest.

제안: Your answer is understandable but needs better structure and grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences.

예시: No, I have never learnt how to sing because I am not interested in it. For example, once my friend suggested that I learn singing, but I refused because I don't enjoy it.

제안: Your answer shows some emotion but is incomplete and lacks coherence. Use complete sentences and linking words to explain your ideas clearly. Avoid trailing off at the end.

예시: If I ever sing, I would like to sing for my loved one because singing should be full of emotion and love.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains irrelevant information. Focus on answering the question directly with clear reasons. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

예시: Yes, I think singing and music can bring happiness to people because they help us relax and express our feelings.

× Actually need not because I think that, uh, my voice voice is not very good, uh, for, uh, singing And uh, also, uh, if I, uh, voice, uh, was very good, I don't want to, uh, singing because I think, uh, the, I don't like the puppy.

✓ Actually, I don't need to because I think that my voice is not very good for singing. Also, even if my voice was very good, I wouldn't want to sing because I think I don't like the public.

The original sentence lacks the modal verb 'don't' before 'need' which is necessary to express negation in this context (Modal verb usage). Also, 'singing' should be preceded by 'to' when used after 'want to'. The phrase 'I don't like the puppy' seems incorrect in context and likely meant 'public'. The sentence also needs proper sentence boundaries and removal of filler words for clarity.

× Actually not because I'm not interested in singing and for example one day my friend suggested me to learn singing but I I refused because I don't like singing, I just enjoyed.

✓ Actually, no, because I'm not interested in singing. For example, one day my friend suggested that I learn singing, but I refused because I don't like singing; I just enjoy it.

The modal verb 'suggested me to learn' is incorrect; the correct form is 'suggested that I learn' (Modal verb usage). Also, 'I just enjoyed' is incomplete and should be 'I just enjoy it' to match present tense and meaning.

× If one day I want to sing, I really want to sing for my love, because I think that this thing should be full of emotion and love, and I think that.

✓ If one day I want to sing, I would really want to sing for my love because I think that singing should be full of emotion and love.

The sentence uses present tense 'want' in a conditional clause that implies a hypothetical future event; it should use 'would want' to express this (Future tense issue). Also, the sentence is incomplete and needs to be finished properly for clarity.

× Actually, yes, the singing and music at all, I think they bring happiness for uh, people. And I think it's thinking is one of the biggest important things in nature and always people and human enjoy from nature and think is a part.

✓ Actually, yes, singing and music in general, I think they bring happiness to people. And I think thinking is one of the most important things in nature, and people always enjoy nature, and thinking is a part of it.

The phrase 'bring happiness for people' should be 'bring happiness to people' (Incorrect use of prepositions). Also, 'enjoy from nature' should be 'enjoy nature'. The sentence structure is awkward and needs rephrasing for clarity.