Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Begin with a clear topic sentence, correct tense and avoid repetition. Keep it concise (max 3–4 sentences). Add a specific detail about when or what you sing and use a linking word to connect reasons and example. Also correct grammar (e.g., "I like to sing" not "I would like to sing when I was having a shower").

예시: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relax after a busy day. For example, I often sing in the shower where the warm water and privacy make me feel calm. This small routine helps me relieve stress and start the day positively.

제안: Answer directly and use correct tense and word forms. Avoid filler words and repetition. Add one specific supporting detail about the karaoke experience using a linking phrase (e.g., "However" or "But").

예시: No, I have never taken singing lessons. However, I sang at a karaoke night with friends last week, and it was great fun — we sang pop songs and laughed a lot, which made the evening memorable.

제안: Start with a clear, direct answer and use consistent tense. Provide one concise, specific example that supports your point and finish the sentence. Use a linking word like "because" or "so" to connect idea and example.

예시: I would prefer to sing for myself because it helps me express emotions. For instance, after singing a cheerful song I usually feel happier and more energetic, so it lifts my mood.

제안: Use correct grammar and complete your supporting idea. State your opinion clearly, then give a specific, concrete example with a linking word like "because" or "for example." Avoid vague phrases like "your body will start."

예시: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because an upbeat melody can lift people's spirits. For example, when I hear an energetic song I often want to clap or dance, which immediately makes me feel more cheerful.

× I love singing because I feel quite relaxed after that and for example I would like to sing when I was having a shower because I feel so relaxed and relieved.

✓ I love singing because I feel quite relaxed afterward, and for example I like to sing when I am having a shower because I feel so relaxed and relieved.

Tense consistency and choice: 'would like to sing when I was having a shower' mixes conditional/modal and past tense. Use simple present 'like to sing' and present progressive 'am having a shower' to describe habitual actions. Also use 'afterward' instead of 'after that' for smoother flow.

× No, I have never learned how to sing. I just saying it when I went to karaoke with my friends last week and it was very fun and and I enjoyed it very much.

✓ No, I have never learned how to sing. I was just singing when I went to karaoke with my friends last week, and it was very fun and I enjoyed it very much.

Incorrect verb form: 'I just saying' is missing the auxiliary 'was' for past continuous. Use 'I was just singing' to describe an action in progress in the past. Also remove duplicate 'and'.

× I want to sing for myself because singing helps to express my emotions. For example, I feel I felt quite happy after I sing the song and.

✓ I want to sing for myself because singing helps me express my emotions. For example, I feel quite happy after I sing a song.

Tense and redundancy: 'I feel I felt' mixes present and past; keep present 'I feel'. Use 'helps me express' (no 'to') for natural English. 'After I sing a song' keeps present tense for habitual experience. Remove trailing 'and'.

× Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because the melody was lifting cheer peoples up. For example, when you hear some happy songs, your body will start.

✓ Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because the melody is uplifting and cheers people up. For example, when you hear happy songs, your body will start to feel better.

Word choice and grammar: 'was lifting cheer peoples up' uses wrong verb forms and word order. Use 'is uplifting' (present) and 'cheers people up' (correct verb + object). 'Some happy songs' -> 'happy songs' is simpler. 'Your body will start' is incomplete; add 'to feel better' to complete the idea.