Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は直接的でわかりやすいですが、表現がやや冗長で文法の自然さが欠けます。より流暢で自然に聞こえるように、簡潔なトピック文（理由）を述べ、その後に短い詳細（例や背景）を付けるとよいです。例えば「歌は得意ではないが、ピアノが弾ける」という対比を明確にし、接続詞（however, but, soなど）や時制を正しく使いましょう。また“instead of that”は不自然なので“instead”や“rather”に替えます。

예시: I don't really enjoy singing because I'm not very good at it. However, I can play the piano — my mother taught me when I was a child, and I usually prefer accompanying myself on the piano rather than singing.

제안: 答えは簡潔ですが、文法と語順のミスがあり、語句の重複（"in when they when"）や不自然な表現があります。まずは直接に"No, I haven't"と答え、続けて兄の経験を具体的に正しい文で述べましょう。接続詞（but, however）を使って関連情報をつなぎ、時制と語順を整えてください。

예시: No, I haven't learned formal singing lessons. However, my brother joined the university chorus when he was at college, so he learned a lot of vocal techniques there.

제안: 質問に対する答えは不明瞭で、文法や語順が乱れています。まず質問の主語を明確にし（"I would like to sing for..."）、理由を一文で述べ、その後に具体例や効果を短く付け加えましょう。接続詞（because, so）を使い、"more active or energetic"のような断片を完成した文に直してください。

예시: I'd like to sing for my friends because music lifts their mood. Singing together makes parties more lively and energetic, so I enjoy performing for close friends.

제안: 肯定はあるものの、理由の提示が断片的で不自然です。効果を説明する際は具体的な語彙（cheer, uplift, relax, bring people togetherなど）を使い、つながりのある文を作ってください。例や結果を一つ加えると説得力が増します。また"activate"はここでは不自然なので"energize"や"lift"に置き換えましょう。

예시: Yes, I do. Singing and music can cheer people up and energize them. For example, a happy song can lift someone's mood after a stressful day and bring people together at social gatherings.

× No, I don't like singing because I'm not good at singing. But instead of that, I can play the piano.

✓ No, I don't like singing because I'm not good at it. Instead, I can play the piano.

The repetition 'singing' is awkward; use the pronoun 'it' to replace the gerund phrase. 'But instead of that' is wordy and unnatural; use 'Instead' to contrast. Maintain present simple tense for habits and abilities: 'don't like', 'am not', 'can play'. Suggestion: Replace repeated nouns with appropriate pronouns and use concise contrastive adverbs.

× No, I have not, but my brother belonged to the chorus club in when they when he was in university.

✓ No, I have not, but my brother belonged to the chorus club when he was at university.

Extraneous words 'in' and repeated 'when' create a grammatical and clarity problem. Use past simple 'belonged' to describe a past state. Use 'at university' or 'in university' (British English uses 'at university'); remove duplicate words. Suggestion: Remove redundant words and keep correct preposition 'at' or 'in' consistently.

× Who do you want to sing for?

✓ Who do you want to sing for?

This sentence as asked by the examiner is fine. No correction needed. Note: If rephrasing, 'Who would you like to sing for?' is slightly more polite.

× Where I want to sing for my friends because songs can make them. More active or energetic?

✓ I want to sing for my friends because songs can make them more active and energetic.

The original has incorrect word order 'Where I want to sing for' and a stray sentence fragment 'More active or energetic?'. Combine into one complete sentence. Use 'make them more active and energetic' to express the effect. Suggestion: Put subject before verb and avoid sentence fragments.

× Yes, I do. Songs can cheer people, activate people, and people can. Get.

✓ Yes, I do. Songs can cheer people, energize them, and make them feel happier.

The original contains sentence fragments and awkward verb choice 'activate people' and 'people can. Get.' Replace 'activate' with 'energize' and 'make them feel happier' to convey 'bring happiness.' Ensure verbs are followed by objects, not fragments. Suggestion: Use complete clauses and appropriate verbs like 'cheer', 'energize', 'make (someone) feel (adjective)'.