Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Correct grammar (use past/present forms and articles) and avoid repetition. Aim for 2–3 sentences, e.g. say who inspired you and how that influences your enjoyment.

예시: Yes, I enjoy singing. My neighbors and friends sing very well, and hearing them inspired me to sing for fun, though I am not a professional.

제안: Answer directly and use correct tense and vocabulary. Give a brief reason and one supporting detail. Avoid informal fillers like 'Bro' and repetitive phrases.

예시: No, I have never had formal singing lessons because I never intended to become a professional; I sing only as a hobby to relax.

제안: Organize the response: start with who you sing for, then explain why with specific details. Improve grammar (possessives, word order, prepositions) and reduce redundancy. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

예시: I like to sing for my girlfriend. She enjoys my voice, and singing in front of her makes me feel comfortable and peaceful.

제안: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with one or two specific reasons or examples. Use linking words (for example, because) and correct word choice (comfort, peace). Avoid hedging language like 'I don't know' in Part 1 answers.

예시: Yes, I think singing can make people happier because it helps relieve stress and improves mood. For example, singing a favorite song can lift your spirits when you feel frustrated.

× Ah yeah I love singing cause in my friends my neighbor there are singing song too good and I inspired for in spite of them.

✓ Ah yeah, I love singing because my friends and my neighbor sing very well and I am inspired by them.

Original sentence uses 'cause' informally and has incorrect word order and prepositions ('in my friends my neighbor there are singing song too good' and 'I inspired for in spite of them'). Use 'because' for reason, correct subject order ('my friends and my neighbor'), use 'sing' (not 'singing song'), use adverb 'very well', and passive/active structure 'I am inspired by them' to show influence.

× No, I never learn how to sing song 'cause my dream was not a professional singer.

✓ No, I never learned how to sing because my dream was not to be a professional singer.

The action of learning in the past requires past tense 'learned' (or 'have learned'). Also use 'to be a professional singer' to express the intended role; 'learn how to sing song' is redundant—use 'learn how to sing' or 'learn to sing'. Replace informal 'cause' with 'because'.

× I just sing, just my passion.

✓ I just sing; it is my passion.

The original lacks a clear verb link between clauses. Use a semicolon or 'it is' to connect the idea: 'it is my passion.' This fixes sentence fragment and clarifies meaning.

× I actually love a girl is she's my girlfriend I like to sing in her in her front.

✓ I actually love a girl; she is my girlfriend, and I like to sing in front of her.

Original mixes clauses and misuses pronouns ('a girl is she's my girlfriend'). Use proper clause structure: identify the girl, state relationship, and use correct preposition 'in front of her' instead of 'in her in her front'.

× She loves song too much in my voice and I too much comfortable to singing in her front it give me peace.

✓ She really loves songs when she hears my voice, and I feel very comfortable singing in front of her; it gives me peace.

Original uses 'too much' awkwardly and wrong structure ('in my voice'). Use adverb 'really' or 'very', 'songs when she hears my voice' clarifies meaning, 'I feel very comfortable' is correct adjective/adverb use, and 'it gives me peace' uses correct verb agreement and tense.

× Ah yeah, sometime when people are frustrated, depressed and at this time they sing song it give it, give them comfortable and mind pace.

✓ Ah yeah, sometimes when people are frustrated or depressed and they sing, it gives them comfort and peace of mind.

Use plural 'sometimes', join adjectives with 'or', remove redundant phrases ('at this time'), use correct verb form 'gives' for singular subject 'it', and use nouns 'comfort' and 'peace of mind' instead of 'comfortable and mind pace'.

× Uh, I don't know that give happiness or not, uh, at it.

✓ Uh, I am not sure whether it gives happiness or not; that's just my idea.

Original is ungrammatical ('I don't know that give happiness or not, at it'). Use 'I am not sure whether...' to express uncertainty, and 'that's just my idea' to close the thought clearly.