Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn rõ ràng nhưng có lỗi ngữ pháp và cấu trúc, đồng thời hơi dài dòng và lặp ý. Hãy mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề trực tiếp, sửa ngữ pháp (ví dụ thì, danh từ/động từ), dùng từ liên kết ngắn gọn và tránh lặp. Cố gắng dùng tối đa 3-4 câu, kèm một chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ hoàn cảnh bạn thường hát) để tăng tính thuyết phục.

예시: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me express my emotions and relax. I usually sing with friends at small gatherings or alone in my room when I need to unwind. For example, I often sing while cooking or walking home from school.

제안: Câu trả lời ngắn nhưng có lỗi ngữ pháp (số ít/ nhiều, thì) và thiếu cụ thể. Nên trả lời trực tiếp rồi nêu thêm thông tin chi tiết liên quan (khi nào, học trong bao lâu, bạn học gì), sử dụng liên từ để mạch lạc.

예시: Yes, I took singing lessons when I was a child, although I don't remember many details now. I studied basic vocal techniques for about a year, focusing on breathing and pitch control.

제안: Ý tưởng tốt nhưng câu hơi lộn xộn và dài. Bạn nên mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, phân biệt đối tượng (bạn bè, gia đình, mình) và thêm ví dụ cụ thể. Dùng liên từ như 'and' hoặc 'because' để kết nối ý và tránh mâu thuẫn (sing for friends vs sing for family vs sing to myself).

예시: I usually sing for my friends at small gatherings, and sometimes I sing alone for my own benefit. For instance, when I'm stressed I sing quietly at home to calm myself, which feels like self-healing.

제안: Bạn trả lời không chắc chắn và dùng cấu trúc lủng củng. Hãy đưa ra quan điểm rõ ràng (Yes/No/It depends), giải thích lý do với ví dụ cụ thể, và dùng từ kết nối như 'however' hoặc 'on the other hand' để làm rõ hai mặt của vấn đề.

예시: I think it depends. On the one hand, singing can make people happy if the singer is expressive and has a pleasant voice; on the other hand, a poor performance might make listeners uncomfortable. For example, a passionate amateur singer can still lift the mood at a party, even without perfect technique.

× Yeah I like I enjoy singing because it helps me spread out emotions and relax.

✓ Yeah, I like and enjoy singing because it helps me express my emotions and relax.

Student used 'spread out emotions' incorrect collocation; 'express emotions' is correct. Also missing conjunction; add 'and'. Use commas for clarity.

× I especially singing with friends or just alone because maybe I have a little shy when seeing in front of my parents.

✓ I especially enjoy singing with friends or just alone because I feel a little shy when singing in front of my parents.

Missing main verb 'enjoy' before gerund; 'have a little shy' is incorrect—use 'feel a little shy'. 'Seeing in front of my parents' should be 'singing in front of my parents'.

× Yeah, I have taken a singing classes when I was young and that right now I didn't remember it.

✓ Yes, I took singing classes when I was young, but I don't remember them now.

Mixing present perfect with past time expression 'when I was young' is incorrect; use simple past 'took'. Article: 'a singing classes' wrong—use 'singing classes'. 'didn't remember it' should be 'don't remember them now' (present tense and plural pronoun).

× Just my friends and maybe if I sing for myself because sometime when alone I don't have anyone to share my stories with so I will sing for my family, hear my voices.

✓ I would sing for my friends or for myself, because sometimes when I'm alone I don't have anyone to share my stories with, so I sing for my family to hear my voice.

Sentence had pronoun and tense issues: 'Just my friends' fragment; 'sometime' should be 'sometimes'; 'when alone' needs subject 'I'm'; 'hear my voices' should be 'to hear my voice' (singular). Use conditional 'would' or simple 'I sing' for consistency.

× So it may be a self healing experience.

✓ So it may be a self-healing experience.

Compound adjective before noun should be hyphenated: 'self-healing'.

× I'm talking between yes and no because if you have a good voice everyone can love it and enjoy hearing your voice, but if you have a decent voice so maybe it can affect badly to other people.

✓ I'm torn between yes and no because if you have a good voice everyone will like it and enjoy hearing you, but if you have a bad voice it may negatively affect other people.

'I'm talking between' incorrect phrase—use 'I'm torn between'. Tense/modal: use 'will like' for general result. 'Decent voice' was misused; likely meant 'bad voice'. 'Affect badly to other people' should be 'negatively affect other people'. Also 'enjoy hearing your voice' can be simplified to 'enjoy hearing you'.