Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Reduce fillers (e.g., "umm"), start with a clear topic sentence, and avoid slight redundancy. Use one linking phrase to add the example and be specific about emotions or situations to show range. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me express my feelings. It also relaxes me when I feel stressed or bored. For example, while doing household chores I often play an upbeat song and sing along, which immediately lifts my mood.

제안: Begin with a direct topic sentence, then give specific details and use a linking word to explain the reason for stopping. Mention what you learned briefly to show progress. Avoid vague time expressions without context.

예시: Yes, I have. I joined my church choir two months ago and attended regular rehearsals to improve breathing and pitch control. However, I had to stop because I couldn't balance rehearsals with my university schedule.

제안: Avoid hesitation phrases and start with a clear statement. Use linking words to organise reasons and be more concise—mention one or two specific reasons or an occasion. Keep sentences natural and not overly long.

예시: If I had the chance, I would sing for my parents to thank them for their constant support and sacrifices. I would probably perform at a family gathering or on their anniversary to make the moment special.

제안: Combine short points into a smooth, coherent answer using linking words and correct grammar. Be specific about mechanisms (e.g., mood, social connection) and correct small errors (article use, verb forms).

예시: Yes, I believe singing can make people happier because it is therapeutic and reduces stress. For example, when someone feels down, listening to or singing an uplifting song can improve their mood and help them feel more cheerful.

× I enjoy singing because it helps me express my emotions through umm song lyrics.

✓ I enjoy singing because it helps me express my emotions through song lyrics.

Remove redundant filler 'umm' and keep 'singing' as the correct verb+ing form; the phrase 'through song lyrics' is natural. Suggestion: avoid fillers in speech and use concise phrasing.

× It also helps me relax when I'm stressed or bored.

✓ It also helps me relax when I'm stressed or bored.

No grammatical correction needed; 'helps me relax' with 'when I'm stressed or bored' correctly uses present continuous for current states.

× For example, when I'm at home doing chores, I play my favorite song and sing along to.

✓ For example, when I'm at home doing chores, I play my favorite song and sing along.

The phrasal verb 'sing along' does not require the preposition 'to' at the end; ending with 'to' is incorrect here. Suggestion: use 'sing along' or 'sing along to the song' with an object.

× Have you ever learnt how to sing?

✓ Have you ever learned how to sing?

Both 'learnt' and 'learned' are acceptable; in many varieties (especially American English) 'learned' is preferred. Use one form consistently. The present perfect 'Have you ever learned' correctly asks about experience.

× I was introduced to a choir group in church about two months ago, so I started attending rehearsals regularly to improve my vocal techniques.

✓ I was introduced to a choir group at church about two months ago, so I started attending rehearsals regularly to improve my vocal technique.

Use preposition 'at church' rather than 'in church' when referring to attending as a location; 'vocal technique' is usually uncountable and better than plural 'techniques' here. Suggestion: prefer 'vocal technique' for general skill improvement.

× However, I lost interest at some point because I couldn't balance it with my busy schedule.

✓ However, I lost interest at some point because I couldn't balance it with my busy schedule.

Sentence is grammatically correct; past tense 'lost' and modal 'couldn't' correctly describe past inability. No change required.

× I have never really thought about it, but if I were given the chance, I would love to sing for my mom and dad to praise them on how wonderful they've been and how they've been supportive through thick and thin.

✓ I have never really thought about it, but if I were given the chance, I would love to sing for my mom and dad to praise them for how wonderful they've been and how they've supported me through thick and thin.

Use 'praise them for' instead of 'praise them on'; 'supportive through thick and thin' is fine but clarifying the object with 'supported me' makes the meaning clearer and avoids awkward pronoun reference. Suggestion: use 'praise them for' when giving a reason for praise.

× I also love to sing for my siblings.

✓ I also love singing for my siblings.

Both forms are acceptable; changing to 'love singing' matches earlier use of gerund 'singing' for consistency. Suggestion: maintain consistent verb patterns.

× Yes, I absolutely think singing can bring happiness because it is therapeutic.

✓ Yes, I absolutely think singing can bring people happiness because it is therapeutic.

Adding 'people' clarifies the object affected by 'bring happiness'. While not strictly necessary, it improves clarity. Suggestion: include the affected group when talking about general effects.

× It helps the mind relax.

✓ It helps the mind relax.

This sentence is acceptable; 'the mind' is an idiomatic general reference. No change required.

× For example, when a person is sad or depressed and they play uplifting song, the could feel more cheerful again.

✓ For example, when a person is sad or depressed and they play an uplifting song, they could feel more cheerful again.

Missing article 'an' before 'uplifting song' is required; subject-pronoun agreement error 'the' should be 'they'. Correction: 'they could' restores proper pronoun and modal usage. Suggestion: use 'an uplifting song' and ensure pronouns match the subject.