Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details linked with connectors. Avoid repetition and filler words. Also correct article use and word order (e.g., "I sing" not "I sing the song in my mouth").

예시: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relieve stress. For example, when I feel sad or during long bus or train journeys I often sing to myself, and I also perform at small family events. This always lifts my mood and makes the time pass quickly.

제안: Provide a clear direct answer then add a specific detail about when or what you learned using linking words. Correct tense and phrasing (e.g., "learned" instead of "learnt" is acceptable in IELTS). Avoid vague phrases like "singing song."

예시: Yes, I have. At school we had a music teacher and we used to attend weekly lessons where we learned songs and basic vocal techniques. Those lessons helped me build confidence in singing in front of others.

제안: Answer directly and use one or two specific reasons. Fix grammar and use more natural expressions (e.g., "people in every corner of the world" rather than "sitting in the nook and corner"). Mention current actions briefly to support your goal.

예시: I would like to sing for people all over the world, especially those who need comfort or joy. That's why I am taking weekly singing classes at the local music center to improve my voice and performance skills.

제안: Give a clear opinion then explain with a specific example and linking words. Avoid filler sounds and grammatical mistakes (e.g., "singing helps" and "it makes people happy"). Use one concise illustrative example to make your point stronger.

예시: Yes, I believe singing can make people happier because it reduces stress and lifts moods. For instance, at parties or community events, singing upbeat songs often cheers people up and brings them together, creating a more joyful atmosphere.

× Singing is very important to reduce our stress.

✓ Singing is very important for reducing our stress.

The original uses 'to reduce' which is grammatically acceptable but 'important for reducing' is more natural when referring to the purpose or effect of an activity. Use the gerund after 'important for' to show function or result. Suggestion: Use 'important for' + verb-ing when describing the function or benefit of something.

× Whenever I feel sad or traveling somewhere has a long by train or by bus, I usually sing the song in my mouth as well as a Whenever there is a small event in my home, I usually sing a song.

✓ Whenever I feel sad or when I am traveling somewhere for a long time by train or bus, I usually sing songs quietly to myself. Also, whenever there is a small event at my home, I usually sing a song.

This sentence mixes clauses and tenses and contains redundant or misordered phrases. Fix by adding 'when' for the traveling clause, using continuous tense 'am traveling' for ongoing action, replacing 'sing the song in my mouth' with 'sing songs quietly to myself', and separating the two ideas into clearer sentences. Suggestion: Break complex ideas into separate clauses, use 'when' for time clauses, and choose natural expressions (e.g., 'sing to myself').

× In my school there was 1 music teacher and we used to go there to learn a song, singing song.

✓ At my school there was one music teacher, and we used to go there to learn songs and how to sing.

Use 'at my school' (preposition) and spell out numbers in formal sentences. 'Used to' correctly indicates past habit; 'learn a song, singing song' is awkward and repetitive. Replace with 'learn songs and how to sing' for clarity. Suggestion: Use correct prepositions, avoid repeating words, and use clear noun phrases for activities.

× Who do you want to sing for? I want to sing the song for a people who are sitting in the nook and corner of the world.

✓ I want to sing for the people who are in the nooks and corners of the world.

'a people' is incorrect; use 'people' without an article. 'nook and corner' should be pluralized as 'nooks and corners' and preposition 'in' fits better. Also remove unnecessary 'the song' unless specifying a particular song. Suggestion: Use 'people' without 'a' and use plural idiomatic expressions like 'nooks and corners.'

× I want to become a great singer so I'm trying and taking a weekly classes in my Town Center in a music center.

✓ I want to become a great singer, so I'm trying and taking weekly classes at the town center music school.

'a weekly classes' mixes singular 'a' with plural 'classes'—remove the article and use 'weekly classes'. Use 'at' for location and 'town center' should not be capitalized unless a proper name. Also 'music center' can be 'music school' for natural English. Suggestion: Match article to noun number, use appropriate prepositions for location, and keep consistent noun forms.

× Yes, of course singing help us to reduce our stress and uh, somewhere when there is a event and people feeling sad or boring when we uh, used to sing any kind of, uh, grateful, enjoyable song, it's make people very happy.

✓ Yes, of course singing helps us reduce our stress, and when there is an event where people feel sad or bored, if we sing enjoyable songs, it makes people very happy.

Multiple errors: subject-verb agreement ('singing helps' not 'help'), incorrect article ('a event' -> 'an event'), incorrect verb forms ('people feeling' -> 'people feel', 'boring' -> 'bored'), incorrect use of 'used to' (not appropriate here), and wrong verb 'it's make' should be 'it makes'. Also 'grateful' is not a correct description of songs; 'enjoyable' is better. Suggestion: Ensure subject-verb agreement, use correct articles ('an' before vowel sound), use correct adjective forms for emotions (bored vs boring), and avoid 'used to' unless indicating past habitual actions.