Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (use 'really' not 'extremely' in this context or 'absolutely'), and avoid repetition. Use up to 3–4 short sentences: state whether you like singing, give one or two specific situations when you sing, and a brief reason. Pay attention to word order and verb forms (e.g., 'when I take a shower').

예시: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax. I often sing in the shower or when I’m hanging out with friends. Even though I’m not a professional, singing cheers me up.

제안: Give a direct answer first, then a clear reason with correct grammar. Avoid confusing phrases and repetition. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' to connect ideas. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and correct modal verbs (e.g., 'could' or 'would').

예시: No, I’ve never had formal singing lessons because they are quite expensive. Also, I don’t feel confident that I would improve much, so I haven’t tried.

제안: Answer directly naming the people, then give one clear reason. Fix grammar (use 'family' singular or 'my family members'), correct awkward phrases ('make me hard' unclear) and avoid repetition. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' to clarify purpose. Aim for 2–3 concise sentences.

예시: I’d like to sing for my family, friends and teachers. They’ve always been kind to me, so singing for them would be my way of showing appreciation and cheering them up.

제안: Give a clear opinion and support it with a specific reason or example. Use correct collocations ('a song with good lyrics') and avoid filler phrases like 'I don't know what to say'. Keep to 2–3 sentences and use linking words such as 'because' or 'for example.'

예시: Yes, definitely. A song with meaningful lyrics or a cheerful melody can lift people’s mood because it evokes memories and positive emotions.

× I extremely like singing, it makes my heart feel warmer and it makes me feel relaxed.

✓ I really like singing; it makes my heart feel warm and it makes me feel relaxed.

The adverb 'extremely' is awkward with 'like' here; native speakers use 'really' or 'love'. Also 'warmer' implies a comparison, but the intended meaning is a general state so 'warm' is better. Use a semicolon or separate sentences to avoid a comma splice. Suggested improvement: replace 'extremely' with 'really' or 'love', use 'warm' instead of 'warmer', and join clauses correctly.

× I usually sing when I I'm take.

✓ I usually sing when I take a shower.

The sentence has extra 'I'm' and incorrect word order. 'Take' needs its object 'a shower' to complete the meaning. Remove the unnecessary 'I'm' and place 'take a shower' correctly. Suggested improvement: say 'I usually sing when I take a shower.'

× I take a shower or sing with my friends even though I'm not a really good singer.

✓ I sing in the shower or with my friends, even though I'm not a very good singer.

'I take a shower' is fine but 'sing in the shower' is the common expression. 'a really good' should be 'a very good' for naturalness; also add commas for clarity. Suggested improvement: use idiomatic expression 'sing in the shower' and 'very' instead of 'really' before 'good'.

× Nope, I never learned how to think it is because that the the price is the price cost an arm and a leg.

✓ No, I never learned how to sing because the price is very high.

Wrong verbs and word order: 'learned how to think' is incorrect; the intended verb is 'learned how to sing'. The phrase 'cost an arm and a leg' is idiomatic but was duplicated and awkwardly inserted. Use a clear clause: 'because the price is very high' or 'because it costs an arm and a leg.' Suggested improvement: 'No, I never learned how to sing because it costs an arm and a leg.'

× It doesn't work for me because I'm not good at singing.

✓ It doesn't work for me because I'm not good at singing.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable; keep as is. No change needed.

× Yeah, I'm not really good. I don't think if I learn, I would can do.

✓ Yeah, I'm not really good. I don't think if I learn, I would be able to do it.

'Would can' is an impossible combination; use 'would be able to' to express ability in a hypothetical. Also add 'do it' to clarify the action. Alternatively use 'I don't think I could' for brevity. Suggested improvement: 'I don't think I could, even if I learned.'

× I would like to sing to my favorite people like my families, my friends and my teachers.

✓ I would like to sing for my favorite people, like my family, my friends, and my teachers.

'Families' is incorrect when referring to one's family; use singular 'family'. Also 'sing for' is more idiomatic than 'sing to' in this context. Add commas for clarity. Suggested improvement: use 'family' (singular collective noun) and 'sing for.'

× It is because that they are really kind to me and they make me hard, feel warm and I also want and I also want to sing for them to make them comfort.

✓ It's because they are really kind to me and make me feel warm. I also want to sing for them to comfort them.

Several problems: 'It is because that' is ungrammatical; use 'It's because' or 'This is because.' 'Make me hard' is incorrect word choice; likely 'make me happy' or 'make my heart warm.' 'Make them comfort' is incorrect; use 'comfort them.' Remove repetition 'I also want and I also want.' Suggested improvement: simplify into two sentences: 'They are really kind and make me feel warm. I also want to sing for them to comfort them.'

× I think that singing song that contains a good relics contain a good lyrics will help them feel feel better.

✓ I think that songs with good lyrics will help people feel better.

Redundant and incorrect words: 'singing song' should be 'songs' or 'singing' alone. 'Relics' is the wrong word; use 'lyrics'. 'Contain a good lyrics' mixes singular/plural; use 'good lyrics' or 'a good lyric' (rare). Remove duplicate 'feel'. Suggested improvement: 'I think songs with good lyrics will help people feel better.'

× Sorry, I don't know what to say.

✓ Sorry, I don't know what to say.

This sentence is correct as written; no grammatical correction needed.