Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then give one or two specific supporting details. Reduce hesitations and awkward phrases (e.g. "that nicer voice", "love enjoying a lot of wide range"). Use linking words to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I enjoy singing, but I prefer listening to music because I don't have a strong singing voice. For example, I like a wide range of music, from traditional folk songs to modern pop, and I often listen while commuting or cooking.

제안: Give a clear, structured response: state whether you learned singing, then add concise supporting details. Avoid repetition and improve grammar (use past tense consistently: "when I was a kid"). Use linking words like "however" or "but" to show contrast.

예시: Yes, I took singing lessons when I was a child. However, I didn't do very well and often received low marks in class, so my classmates sometimes teased me. Despite that, the lessons helped me appreciate music more.

제안: Answer directly and clearly: say who you'd like to sing for now, then give one specific reason. Avoid pronoun errors and hesitations ("her" vs "him"). Keep it to two or three sentences and use linking words such as "now" or "also".

예시: When I was young I wanted to sing for my mother because she is very important to me. Now I would like to sing for my boyfriend to surprise him, but I feel nervous because I don't have much confidence in my singing ability.

제안: Start with a direct opinion, then provide specific supporting reasons or an example. Avoid vague or repetitive phrases ("that words, that singing words"). Use linking words such as "for example" and correct grammar ("when someone sings for me").

예시: Yes, I believe singing can make people happy because it expresses emotions and creates a shared moment. For example, my boyfriend often sings to me and his performances make me feel loved and moved by the lyrics.

× I don't have that nicer voice for singing, but I definitely love listening to songs.

✓ I don't have a very nice voice for singing, but I definitely love listening to songs.

The original uses 'that nicer' which is incorrect adjective usage and comparative form. Use 'a very nice voice' to describe degree. Also 'nicer' implies comparison without a reference. Suggestion: use 'very nice' or 'a nicer voice' with a comparison context.

× I love enjoying a lot of wide range of songs from like very traditional songs to the modern ones.

✓ I enjoy a wide range of songs, from very traditional ones to modern ones.

Original misuses 'a lot of wide range' and redundancy 'songs' repeated. Use quantifier 'a wide range of songs' or 'a lot of songs'. Also avoid filler 'like'. Suggestion: 'I enjoy a wide range of songs, from very traditional to modern.'

× So when I was kid, there was a singing teacher tutor who teaches us how to sing songs.

✓ So when I was a kid, there was a singing teacher who taught us how to sing.

Tense inconsistency: 'was' (past) requires past 'taught' not present 'teaches'. Also missing article 'a' before 'kid' and 'teacher tutor' is redundant. Suggestion: use past tense 'taught' and simplify to 'singing teacher'.

× But I was very bad at singing.

✓ But I was very bad at singing.

Sentence is grammatically correct in tense; no change needed. (Included for completeness.)

× I was the one who got like very few marks in singing class because I am very bad at it and a lot of my friends also tease me for that, for my singing.

✓ I was the one who got very few marks in singing class because I was very bad at it, and a lot of my friends also teased me about my singing.

Mixes past and present: 'am' and 'tease' should be past 'was' and 'teased' to match 'was the one'. Remove filler 'like' and use 'teased me about' rather than 'for'. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense when referring to past events.

× When I was young, I wanted to sing for my mom, uh, especially she's very special to me.

✓ When I was young, I wanted to sing for my mom; she was especially special to me.

Pronoun and tense mismatch: 'she's' (she is) is present; when describing past desire, use past 'she was'. Also 'especially she's very special' is redundant. Suggest: 'she was especially special to me' or better 'she was very special to me.'

× And as I grown up, I have my boyfriend and I wanted to sing for her, for him, but I'm bad at singing.

✓ And as I grew up, I had a boyfriend and I wanted to sing for him, but I'm bad at singing.

Incorrect verb form 'grown' should be past 'grew' or 'have grown'; tense inconsistency with 'have my boyfriend' and gender pronoun confusion 'her, for him'. Use past simple 'grew up' and 'had' when speaking of past; keep pronouns consistent 'him'. If describing current situation, use present perfect: 'as I have grown up, I have a boyfriend'.

× That's why. Like I really wanted to surprise him by singing, but I don't know, it's not helping me out.

✓ That's why I really wanted to surprise him by singing, but I don't know; it's not helping me.

Fragmented 'That's why.' and filler 'Like' should be removed. 'Helping me out' is informal but acceptable; 'helping me' is cleaner. No major tense issues; combine sentences for clarity.

× Absolutely, singing can bring really happiness to people.

✓ Absolutely, singing can really bring happiness to people.

Adverb placement error: 'really' should modify 'bring' not 'happiness'. Place adverb before verb: 'really bring happiness'.

× My boyfriend is also a singer, he sings for me.

✓ My boyfriend is also a singer; he sings for me.

Comma splice: two independent clauses joined by comma. Use semicolon or separate sentences. Tense is fine.

× It feels extra special, like hearing that words, that singing words from the lyrics hits me hard.

✓ It feels extra special; hearing the words, the sung lyrics, hits me hard.

'That words' is ungrammatical ('that' with plural). Better: 'the words' or 'the sung lyrics'. Also restructure to avoid repetition 'that singing words'. Use semicolon to connect ideas.

× Like I am very much.

✓ I am very moved.

Incomplete and unnatural phrase 'I am very much' lacks object. Use 'I am very moved' or 'I feel very moved' or 'I appreciate it very much.' Suggestion: provide the emotion explicitly.

× I appreciate when someone sings for me and I get really happy when someone sing for me.

✓ I appreciate it when someone sings for me, and I get really happy when someone sings for me.

Subject-verb agreement: 'someone sing' should be 'someone sings'. Also add 'it' after 'appreciate' for natural phrasing. Ensure 'sings' used consistently.