Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar, sentence structure and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence, use correct verb forms and fewer repetitions, and add one specific example. Use linking words (because, so, and) correctly. Keep to 2–4 sentences maximum.

예시: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relax when I am stressed. For example, after a long day at work I often sing my favorite song for ten minutes, which lifts my mood. Singing is also a useful skill that can help you perform in shows or competitions.

제안: Make a clear past-tense statement about learning, avoid filler words and repetition, and give a specific method or time frame. Use linking words such as when or so to connect ideas logically. Limit to 2–3 concise sentences.

예시: Yes, I learned to sing by listening to music when I was a child. I used to copy singers and practise every day, so over time my voice improved.

제안: Begin with a direct answer, avoid hesitations (um, uh) and redundant connectors. Give one clear reason or a short detail about when or why you sing for that person. Keep it to 2–3 smooth sentences.

예시: I want to sing for my husband because I enjoy sharing small romantic gestures. For instance, I often play a soft love song and sing along in the evenings to cheer him up.

제안: Answer directly and clearly, use correct vocabulary (distract, lift your mood) and reduce hesitation. Give a concise reason and a specific example or result. Use linking words such as because or for example.

예시: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because it distracts you from worries and lifts your mood. For example, when I feel stressed, singing a cheerful song for a few minutes usually makes me feel calmer and more positive.

× Yes, I like singing because it's give me a happiness like if I feel stressful so I just singing a song then I feel good.

✓ Yes, I like singing because it gives me happiness; for example, if I feel stressed, I just sing a song and then I feel good.

Errors: incorrect verb form 'it's give' (should be 'it gives' — third person singular present), incorrect adjective 'stressful' used instead of the condition 'stressed', and incorrect present participle 'singing' used instead of base verb 'sing' after 'just'. Suggestions: use correct third person singular verb 'gives', use 'stressed' as the adjective describing a feeling, and use base verb 'sing' after 'just'. Use punctuation to separate clauses for clarity.

× And also singing is also a skill and you can win a competition in.

✓ Also, singing is a skill and you can win a competition with it.

Error: awkward preposition and pronoun usage 'win a competition in' is incorrect and missing object reference for 'it'. Suggestion: use 'with it' to show the instrument/ability by which you can win, and remove repeated 'also' for conciseness.

× Gas in my childhood, I'm listening, I was listening music and I practice, practiced to learn to learn how to sing when like I'm listening.

✓ When I was a child, I used to listen to music and I practised to learn how to sing while I was listening.

Errors: 'Gas in my childhood' is unclear; should be 'When I was a child'. Mixed tenses and incorrect aspect: 'I'm listening' and 'I was listening' conflict. 'Listen to music' requires preposition 'to'. 'Practice' should be past tense 'practised' to match past timeframe. Suggestion: use consistent past tense expressions such as 'used to' or simple past for habitual actions, and include 'to' after 'listen'.

× So I'm just singing like continuously.

✓ So I just sang continuously.

Error: tense mismatch—speaker is describing past habit so past simple 'sang' or 'used to sing' is appropriate; 'singing like continuously' is informal and redundant. Suggestion: use 'sang continuously' or 'used to sing continuously' for clarity and correct tense.

× So it's the way of I learn.

✓ So that's how I learned.

Errors: word order and article use are incorrect ('the way of I learn'). Suggestion: use the fixed expression 'that's how I learned' or 'that's the way I learned' with past tense 'learned' to match the described past process.

× And as I'm married now, so I want to sing for my husband like some romantic song on daily basis.

✓ Now that I'm married, I want to sing romantic songs for my husband on a daily basis.

Errors: redundant conjunctions 'and' and 'so', incorrect phrasing 'like some romantic song', missing plural for general habit 'songs', and missing article 'a' before 'daily basis' or better 'on a daily basis'. Suggestion: streamline to 'Now that I'm married, I want to sing romantic songs for my husband on a daily basis.'

× So or otherwise I just play some music, umm at home, uh, and sing with that.

✓ Otherwise, I just play some music at home and sing along with it.

Errors: incorrect conjunction 'So or otherwise' and awkward phrase 'sing with that'. Suggestion: use 'Otherwise' alone and 'sing along with it' to indicate singing together with the music.

× Yes, definitely singing can bring happiness to people because when you sing a song or uh, sing a like any poem or other stuff, then it uh, distracted, uh, from other stuff and it's changing your mood.

✓ Yes, definitely singing can bring happiness to people because when you sing a song or recite a poem, it distracts you from other concerns and changes your mood.

Errors: awkward phrasing 'sing a like any poem', incorrect verb form 'distracted' (should be 'distracts' present simple), and incorrect progressive 'it's changing' better as simple present 'changes' for general truths. Suggestion: use 'recite a poem' or 'sing a poem', use present simple verbs 'distracts' and 'changes' for habitual or general effects, and remove filler words.

× Like if you feel stressful and then after singing you feel good.

✓ For example, if you feel stressed, after singing you feel better.

Errors: incorrect adjective 'stressful' (means causing stress) instead of 'stressed' (feeling stress), and 'feel good' is acceptable but 'feel better' is more natural in this comparative context. Suggestion: use 'stressed' for the emotional state and 'feel better' to show improvement after singing.