Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 用词错误较多，句子结构和拼写需要改进。回答要更直接并避免重复，控制在最多五个句子内；把主题句放在前面，然后用一两句具体细节支持。注意将“seeing”改为“singing”，并用恰当的连词如“because”或“so”连接原因。

예시: Yes, I enjoy singing. I often sing for 10 to 15 minutes before bedtime because it helps me relax and improve my mood. Singing calms my thoughts and prepares me for sleep.

제안: 表达有多处拼写和语法错误（例如“say”应为“sing”），句子冗长且重复。应直接回答“是否学过”，然后说明原因并给出具体细节，使用连接词如“because”或“so”。避免重复词汇。

예시: No, I have never had formal singing lessons. I grew up in a small village surrounded by mountains, so there were no professional teachers or music schools nearby. As a result, I learned to sing by myself.

제안: 总体表达较好，有清晰的主题句和理由，但用词和语法需微调（例如“comfort and joyful”应为“comfortable and joyful”或“feel comforted and joyful”）。可以添加一两个具体例子说明歌曲类型或场合，保持不超过五句。

예시: I would like to sing for my mother because she makes me feel happy and supported. I usually sing gentle, familiar lullabies or folk songs to cheer her up after a long day. Seeing her smile makes me feel rewarded.

제안: 观点明确但存在词汇错误（“seeing”应为“singing”）和重复。回答可以更简洁并加入具体例子或原因，使用连接词如“for example”或“because”来增强逻辑性。

예시: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness. For example, singing helps people relax, express emotions, and relieve stress. Many communities use singing in celebrations or group activities to create a sense of belonging.

× Yes I do, seeing is one of my favorite things to do and I often sing before my bedtime because seeing can make me very relaxing and make me in a good mood. I often sing 10 to 15 minutes before bedtime.

✓ Yes, I do. Singing is one of my favorite things to do, and I often sing before bedtime because singing helps me relax and put me in a good mood. I often sing for 10 to 15 minutes before bed.

问题类型：8 动名词/动词+ -ing 以及13 形容词/副词使用不当。 解释：原句中多处把“singing”误写为“seeing”；此外短语“make me very relaxing”不正确，应该用“help me relax”或“make me relaxed”。“make me in a good mood”也应改为“put me in a good mood”。最后“10 to 15 minutes before bedtime”前需加介词“for”或改写为“for 10 to 15 minutes”。建议：注意区分动词doing形式及拼写，使用“help/ make sb + adj”表达使某人感到某种状态，表示持续时间用“for + 时长”。

× I never learned how to say even though I'm really love seeing. But in my hometown it's a village surrounded by mountains, so there is no no teacher or no professional teaching institution.

✓ I never learned how to sing, even though I really love singing. In my hometown it's a village surrounded by mountains, so there are no teachers or professional music schools.

问题类型：8 动名词/动词+ -ing、12 代词/结构使用、1 单复数问题及22 冠词/文章错误。 解释：原句多处错误：把“sing”误写为“say/seeing”；“I'm really love seeing”中动词形式错误，正确应为“I really love singing”或“I'm really fond of singing”。“there is a village”后续句子说明村里缺少复数名词，应该用“there are no teachers”而不是“no no teacher”，并且“professional teaching institution”在口语中更自然为“professional music schools”或“music teachers”。建议：检查拼写，动词与动名词搭配，注意可数名词的单复数及否定结构“there are no ...”。

× I would like to sing for my mom because I love her and she makes me feel happy and relaxed. I often sing gentle familiar songs to cheer her up and to show my love so that she feels comfort and joyful.

✓ I would like to sing for my mom because I love her and she makes me feel happy and relaxed. I often sing gentle, familiar songs to cheer her up and to show my love so that she feels comforted and joyful.

问题类型：13 形容词/副词使用不当、18 形容词顺序。 解释：原句中“gentle familiar songs”中间应加逗号或连词以分开形容词，形容词顺序在此可接受但需要标点。更重要的是“she feels comfort and joyful”搭配不当，应改为“she feels comforted and joyful”或“she feels comfort and joy”。"Comforted"是形容词（被安慰的感觉），更合适。建议：注意形容词间的逗号使用与适当的形容词形式（例如被动意义的 -ed 形式）。

× I think seeing can make people happy because around the world many people enjoy seeing and seeing can make them feel relaxed and express their emotions and release their stress. So seeing is a good way to obtain happiness.

✓ I think singing can make people happy because people all around the world enjoy singing. Singing can help them relax, express their emotions, and release stress. So singing is a good way to gain happiness.

问题类型：8 动名词/动词+ -ing、13 形容词/副词使用不当、20 副词位置。 解释：原句把“singing”误写为“seeing”多次；短语“make people happy”可以保留，但随后用“make them feel relaxed and express their emotions and release their stress”并列结构应更自然地使用“help them relax, express their emotions, and release stress”。“obtain happiness”在英语中不自然，改为“gain happiness”或更口语的“be happier”。建议：注意拼写，保持并列动词形式一致，使用更自然的动词短语表达“获得快乐”。