Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Pronunciation and word choice need correction (use "singing" not "seeing/senior"). Make your response more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence, then offer one specific reason with one brief example. Use linking words (for example, when, so) and avoid repetition. Also correct tense and article use (e.g., "a bad mood").

예시: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me release emotions. For example, when I am in a bad mood, I sing my favorite songs at home and I usually feel calmer afterwards.

제안: Be direct and avoid hypothetical confusion. Begin with a clear topic sentence stating you have not had formal training, then briefly explain why and mention future preference using simple conditional form. Reduce redundancy and correct word choice ("learned" or "learnt", "singing").

예시: No, I haven't received formal singing lessons. I enjoy singing casually, but I never had systematic training. If I wanted to improve, I would prefer a few lessons from a good teacher, although private lessons can be expensive.

제안: Clarify meaning and correct vocabulary mistakes (use "song" or "singing" instead of "senior"). Start with a clear statement, then give a specific example of who and why. Use linking words such as "because" or "for example" to connect ideas and avoid vague phrasing.

예시: I like to sing for myself and for my family because my singing cheers them up. For example, I often sing for my parents when they are tired and they say it makes them feel more relaxed.

제안: Answer directly then support with a concise, specific example. Fix vocabulary and pronunciation errors ("listen to his songs" and "finish listening"). Avoid filler words and ensure sentences are grammatically correct. Use linking words like "for example" and keep to two or three sentences.

예시: Yes, I think singing and music can make people happier. For example, when I feel stressed, I listen to my favorite singer, Wang Leehom, and after listening to his songs I feel relaxed and in a much better mood.

× Uh yes, I really enjoy seeing.

✓ Uh yes, I really enjoy singing.

The word 'seeing' is incorrect; the intended verb is 'singing' (a gerund acting as a noun). This is a word choice error (adjective/adverb category in the provided list). Suggestion: replace 'seeing' with 'singing' and read the sentence aloud to confirm meaning.

× I think seeing is a great way to vent my emotions.

✓ I think singing is a great way to vent my emotions.

Again 'seeing' is a wrong word choice; it should be the gerund 'singing'. Ensure the verb matches the topic and use the gerund form to name the activity.

× For instance, when when I'm in a bad mood one day I'll go to a cultivate scene, see my mood will improve.

✓ For instance, when I'm in a bad mood, I'll go sing for a while and my mood will improve.

This sentence has multiple problems: repeated word 'when when', awkward phrase 'go to a cultivate scene', and missing conjunction punctuation. The original is ungrammatical (sentence structure error). I corrected to a clear structure: subordinate time clause 'when I'm in a bad mood,' main clause 'I'll go sing for a while' and result 'and my mood will improve.' Suggestion: avoid repetition, use natural collocations ('go sing' or 'sing somewhere'), and add commas to separate clauses.

× Have you ever learnt how to sing?

✓ Have you ever learned how to sing?

'Learnt' is a valid British past participle but in many contexts 'learned' is preferred (American English). This is a past tense/past participle choice issue. Suggestion: choose 'learned' for wider comprehension or keep 'learnt' if using British English consistently.

× In fact, I haven't, although I enjoy seeing I haven't had any systematic training.

✓ In fact, I haven't; although I enjoy singing, I haven't had any systematic training.

Problems: 'seeing' should be 'singing' (word choice) and the sentence run-on needs punctuation. I added a semicolon and comma to separate clauses and corrected the gerund. Suggestion: use punctuation to separate contrasting clauses and correct activity word.

× If I were to teach myself, I would like the guidance of the teacher, but if I were to learn from a teacher it would be a considerable expense.

✓ If I were to teach myself, I would like the guidance of a teacher, but if I were to learn from a teacher it would be a considerable expense.

Main problem: article use before 'teacher'—should be 'a teacher' not 'the teacher' because it's indefinite. This fits article errors/ sentence structure; listed as conditional but change is article. Suggestion: use 'a' for non-specific nouns.

× I want to sing for myself and my loved ones.

✓ I want to sing for myself and my loved ones.

Sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. Included to show it was checked.

× Just as I mentioned earlier, a senior not only heals one's own emotions but also can heal others with its beautiful melody.

✓ Just as I mentioned earlier, singing not only heals one's own emotions but can also heal others with its beautiful melodies.

'a senior' is incorrect word choice; the intended noun is 'singing'. Also 'its beautiful melody' should agree with plural 'melodies' or stay singular—'singing' fits with 'its' but is better with 'melodies'. This is a word choice/adjective use problem. Suggestion: replace incorrect noun with 'singing' and ensure noun-pronoun agreement.

× Of course, for example, my favorite singer is Wang Li Hong. What? Whenever I feel stressed, I listen to his songs, and every time I finish senior, I feel extremely relaxed and happy.

✓ Of course. For example, my favorite singer is Wang Li Hong. Whenever I feel stressed, I listen to his songs, and every time I finish listening to a song, I feel extremely relaxed and happy.

Multiple issues: 'What?' is out of place; 'finish senior' is incorrect—should be 'finish listening to a song' or 'finish a song'. These are word choice and sentence structure errors. I corrected punctuation and replaced 'finish senior' with 'finish listening to a song.' Suggestion: remove extraneous interjection and use correct verbs for listening activities.