Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your response slightly more concise and natural, use one clear topic sentence and one or two specific supporting details with a linking word. Avoid minor awkward phrasing (e.g., "one day" is unnecessary) and use a richer verb or adjective to show feeling.

예시: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me release emotions. For example, when I'm feeling down I often go to a KTV and sing for an hour, and afterwards my mood always brightens.

제안: Answer directly and clearly; avoid confusing conditional phrasing. Use a topic sentence stating whether you have learned, then add one or two concise reasons or plans using linking words (because, so). Clarify your intentions about future learning.

예시: No, I haven't had any formal singing lessons because I couldn't afford a teacher. However, I might try online tutorials in the future since they are more affordable and convenient.

제안: Begin with a clear, natural topic sentence and avoid unclear words (e.g., "Four"). Give one or two specific examples of who you would sing for and why, using a linking word to connect ideas.

예시: I would sing for myself and close family members, such as my parents and friends, because my singing makes them happy and can comfort them when they are stressed.

제안: Start with a clear opinion sentence, then support it with a specific example using linking words. Check small grammar issues (e.g., plural agreement) and name the singer correctly. Be concise and connect the example to the general point about happiness.

예시: Yes, I think singing brings happiness. For example, listening to my favorite singer, Wang Leehom, lifts my mood whenever I am stressed, so I often feel much calmer after listening.

× I think singing is a great way to vent my emotions.

✓ I think singing is a great way to vent my emotions.

No change needed. The gerund 'singing' correctly functions as a noun (subject) and 'vent' with object 'my emotions' is correct.

× For instance, when I'm in a bad mood one day I'll go to a KTV to sing, then my mood will improve.

✓ For instance, when I'm in a bad mood, I go to a KTV to sing, and then my mood improves.

The original mixes future 'I'll' with a general habitual situation; the speaker describes a habitual response, so simple present is appropriate. Remove 'one day' which implies a specific future time; add commas and use 'and then' for clarity.

× In fact, I haven't.

✓ In fact, I haven't.

No change needed. The contraction 'haven't' (have not) correctly responds to 'Have you ever learnt...' indicating no experience up to now.

× Although I enjoy singing, I haven't had any systematic training.

✓ Although I enjoy singing, I haven't had any systematic training.

No change needed. Present perfect 'haven't had' is correct to indicate lack of experience up to now.

× If I were to teach myself, I would let the guidance of a teacher, but if I were to learn from a teacher, it would be a considerable expense.

✓ If I were to teach myself, I would do it without a teacher's guidance, but learning from a teacher would be a considerable expense.

The original sentence has unnatural structure: 'I would let the guidance of a teacher' is incorrect collocation. Clarify meaning by stating 'do it without a teacher's guidance' and rephrase second clause to 'learning from a teacher would be a considerable expense.' Maintain hypothetical conditional form.

× Four, I want to sing for myself and my loved ones.

✓ Firstly, I want to sing for myself and for my loved ones.

'Four' is clearly incorrect (likely a misrecognition). Replace with a discourse marker like 'Firstly' or simply remove. Also add 'for' before 'my loved ones' for parallel structure.

× Just as I mentioned earlier, singing not only heals one's own emotions but also can heal others with its beautiful melody.

✓ Just as I mentioned earlier, singing not only heals one's own emotions but can also heal others with its beautiful melody.

Word order 'not only ... but also' prefers 'not only X but also Y' with parallel structure. Move 'also' after 'can' to preserve natural word order: 'but can also heal.' No other grammatical errors.

× Of course, to give an example, my favorite singer is Wang Liham.

✓ Of course. For example, my favorite singer is Wang Liham.

'To give an example' is wordy; 'for example' is more natural. Split into two sentences or use a comma; both are acceptable. This is stylistic rather than strictly grammatical, but clearer.

× Whenever I am under a lot of stress, I listen to this songs.

✓ Whenever I am under a lot of stress, I listen to these songs.

'This' is singular demonstrative, while 'songs' is plural. Use the plural demonstrative 'these' with plural noun. Alternatively, change 'this song' to singular.

× Every time I finish listening, I feel an incredible sense of relief.

✓ Every time I finish listening, I feel an incredible sense of relief.

No change needed. Present simple 'finish' and 'feel' correctly express habitual reaction.