Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Старайтесь давать более связный и грамматически корректный ответ: начните с простого утверждения, затем добавьте конкретное объяснение. Избегайте лишних пауз и слов-паразитов ("uh"). Исправьте грамматику: используйте правильные времена и формы (например, "when I was a child", "it cheered me up"). Ограничьте ответ до 3–4 предложений и используйте связующие слова для естественного течения речи.

예시: Yes, I really enjoy singing. I used to sing when I was a child because it cheered me up and made me feel more confident. Nowadays I sing at home for fun, especially when I need to relax.

제안: Говорите яснее о времени и процессе обучения: используйте правильные времена и формы глаголов (например, "I have been watching" или "I started watching"). Убирайте повторы и слова-паразиты, добавьте связку, объясняющую, почему вы выбрали этот способ обучения. Дайте конкретный пример платформы или техники, чтобы обогатить ответ.

예시: Recently I started learning from YouTube. I have been watching videos where vocal coaches explain techniques and give practical exercises, so I can practise singing at home by myself.

제안: Отвечайте прямо и грамотно: скажите, для кого вы хотите петь, и объясните причину. Используйте корректную лексику ("audience", "perform") и правильные формы времен. Избегайте неуклюжих конструкций и уточните планы (например, сначала для себя или друзей, затем для публики).

예시: At the moment I prefer to sing for myself and close friends because I’m not confident yet. However, if I gain more experience and confidence, I would like to perform in front of a larger audience.

제안: Формулируйте мысль проще и точнее: начните с прямого мнения, затем приведите краткое научное обоснование. Используйте корректную грамматику и термины (например, "scientists" и "research"). Убирайте лишние слова и стройте предложения логично с помощью связок ("because", "for example").

예시: Yes, I believe singing can make people happier. Research shows that singing releases endorphins and can improve mood, and it’s even used in therapy to help patients with mental health issues.

× I used to sing when I was child because it uh, upper my mood.

✓ I used to sing when I was a child because it lifted my mood.

The sentence needs a past reference with correct article and verb. 'When I was child' requires the article 'a'. 'Upper' is not the correct verb; use 'lifted' to indicate past action improving mood. Use consistent past tense 'used to sing' and 'lifted' to describe habitual past action and its effect.

× It has happened recently. I watch on YouTube videos when teachers uh, share with their experience and uh, give advices how to sing on yourself at home.

✓ It happened recently. I watch YouTube videos where teachers share their experiences and give advice on how to sing by yourself at home.

Mix of tenses and incorrect word forms. 'It has happened recently' should be 'It happened recently' to match simple past reference, or keep present perfect but then other verbs must align; simpler to use past. 'Watch on YouTube videos' should be 'watch YouTube videos'. 'Where' or 'in which' is better than 'when' for videos. 'Share with their experience' should be 'share their experiences'. 'Give advices' is incorrect plural; 'advice' is uncountable. 'How to sing on yourself' should be 'how to sing by yourself' or 'on your own'.

× Well, I seen for myself because I am sure that I, it isn't enough to stand and, uh, take a performance for a large auditory.

✓ Well, I have seen for myself because I am sure that it isn't enough to just stand and perform for a large audience.

'Seen' requires auxiliary 'have' to form present perfect ('I have seen'). 'Take a performance' is not idiomatic; use 'perform'. 'Large auditory' is incorrect; 'audience' is the correct noun. Add 'just' for clarity and maintain present perfect to express experience relevant now.

× But of course when I gain a lot of experience, I will perform one.

✓ But of course when I gain a lot of experience, I will perform.

Unnecessary word 'one' at the end is ungrammatical here. 'Perform' alone correctly conveys the future action. The conditional time clause 'when I gain a lot of experience' with 'will' in the main clause is acceptable for a planned future event.

× To be honest, according to the scientists and biologists, singing is helping to our mood and it is proved in medicine even in psychiatric clinic patients since to improve their mood and psychological state.

✓ To be honest, according to scientists and biologists, singing helps our mood, and this has been proven in medicine, even for psychiatric clinic patients, as it improves their mood and psychological state.

'Is helping to our mood' is incorrect; use 'helps our mood'. Use present simple for general truth. 'It is proved in medicine' should be 'this has been proven in medicine' for clarity and correct tense. 'Since to improve' is ungrammatical; use 'as it improves' or 'since it improves'. 'Psychiatric clinic patients' is better phrased 'patients in psychiatric clinics' or 'psychiatric clinic patients'; adjusted for clarity.