Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 你的回答表达了喜欢唱歌并给出原因，但有语法错误、用词不准和句子结构不够自然。建议： 1) 修正语法和词汇（e.g. relaxed -> relax, strides -> stresses）。 2) 用一句主题句直接回答，再用1–2句具体原因支持，注意使用连接词（because, so, when）。 3) 将情感表达更具体（如减轻压力、放松心情）。 示例要点：开门见山回答，随后解释何时、如何让你放松并举例。

예시: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relax after a busy day. When I'm stressed from studying or work, singing my favorite songs calms me down and lifts my mood.

제안: 回答包含相关经历但表达混乱且有语法错误，信息不够清楚。建议： 1) 用过去时表达过去的经历并保持句子简洁。 2) 说明学唱歌的具体时间、地点或频率（e.g. once a week）和你的表现或感受，避免含糊不清的短语。 3) 若想表达自己不是最优秀，可用礼貌且清晰的方式（e.g. I was not the best singer in the class）。

예시: Yes, I learned singing when I was in primary school because our school offered a weekly music class. I enjoyed it, although I wasn't the best singer in the class and sometimes found it challenging.

제안: 回答明确且有情感，但语法与表达不够自然。建议： 1) 先直接回答“who”再说明场合或原因。 2) 用更自然的短语描述唱歌带来的感受（e.g. make her happy, hear my singing）。 3) 注意语法和词序（e.g. 'on her birthday', 'I hope she will be very happy'）。

예시: I'd like to sing for my mother on her birthday. I hope my singing will make her happy and show how much I appreciate her.

제안: 回答观点明确但缺少连贯性和具体细节，句子重复且有语法错误。建议： 1) 给出一条主题句并用1–2条具体例子支持（e.g. group singing at parties, singing relieves stress）。 2) 使用连接词使逻辑清晰（for example, because, when）。 3) 注意单复数和动词形式（people sing, it brings happiness）。

예시: Yes, I believe singing can make people happy. For example, at parties people often sing together, which creates a joyful atmosphere, and singing can also relieve stress and lift someone's mood.

× I think singing is a way to relaxed because we have many strides for about study and work.

✓ I think singing is a way to relax because we have many stresses about studying and work.

原句中“to relaxed”是不正确的动词不定式形式。动词不定式结构是“to + 动词原形”，此处应使用“to relax”。另外“strides for about study and work”表达不自然，意图应为“因为我们在学习和工作上有很多压力”，因此改为“stresses about studying and work”。建议记住不定式必须用动词原形，并使用更准确的名词表达压力（stress）。

× So I think singing could unwind our emotion.

✓ So I think singing can unwind our emotions.

原句中“could”虽然能表示可能性，但在一般陈述事实或能力时更常用“can”。另外“emotion”应为可数复数“emotions”或用抽象名词“emotion”配合上下文更自然为复数形式。建议在表达一般能力或效果时用“can”，并注意名词单复数一致。

× When I was a primary school student I learned how to sing because our school has a singing class.

✓ When I was a primary school student, I learned how to sing because our school had a singing class.

句子描述过去发生的事情，所以主句和从句都应使用过去时。原句中“has”用的是现在时，应改为过去时“had”。另外在“When I was a primary school student”和主句之间加逗号更符合书面习惯。建议叙述过去经历时保持时态一致，主要使用过去式。

× But in the class I'm always the last one because the teacher said but things is more crazy.

✓ But in the class I was always the last one because the teacher said things were very chaotic.

原句时态混乱，前半句描述过去经历应使用过去时“was”。后半句“the teacher said but things is more crazy”结构不通顺，存在多余连词“but”和错误时态及形容词比较级使用。把“but”去掉，改为“the teacher said”后接陈述，并将“is”改为过去时“were”，把“more crazy”改为更恰当的“very chaotic”。建议保持句子结构清晰，避免多余连词，确保时态和词汇恰当。

× I want to sing for my mother, it's a birthday song in her birthday.

✓ I want to sing for my mother; it's a birthday song for her.

原句“in her birthday”是不正确的介词搭配，正确应该是“on her birthday”或更简练地“for her”。另外句子用逗号连接并列分句容易成为逗号拼接句，改用分号或分句更好。建议注意介词搭配（on her birthday）或改用“for her”表示目的/对象。

× I hope she will very happy to hear my sounds.

✓ I hope she will be very happy to hear my singing.

原句缺少系动词“be”，且“very happy”前需要“be”。“my sounds”表达不自然，应改为“my singing”或“my voice”。因此改为“I hope she will be very happy to hear my singing.” 建议注意情态动词或将来时后要有系动词，以及选择自然的名词搭配（singing/voice）。

× I know some parties people sings together to sing some happy songs, so it's happiness.

✓ I know at some parties people sing together to sing happy songs, so it's joyful.

原句“people sings”主语为复数“people”，谓语应使用动词原形“sing”，不能加第三人称单数-s。另“some parties people”应加介词“at”来表示在聚会中，且“happy songs”前无需“some”。最后“so it's happiness”表达不自然，改为“so it's joyful”或“so they feel happy”。建议注意主谓一致（people + base verb），介词短语位置，以及使用更自然的名词或形容词。