Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Отвечайте прямо и связно: начните с краткого утверждения, затем дайте 1–2 конкретные причины с логическими связками. Избегайте повторов и бессмысленных фраз (например, «because of illusion»). Уменьшите количество слов-дублей и завершите мысль чётким заключением.

예시: I don't really like singing. I prefer activities like reading because I find them more useful for self-improvement, and they help me learn vocabulary and grammar more effectively.

제안: Сформулируйте ответ с ясным начальным предложением, затем объясните причину и приведите конкретный пример. Используйте связки (however, so, therefore) и избегайте колебаний («uh», повторы). Укажите конкретное действие или опыт.

예시: Yes, I tried singing because I believed it might improve my English speaking. However, I found it less effective than studying grammar books and doing speaking practice, so I now focus on reading and conversation exercises.

제안: Начните с короткого ответа, затем приведите конкретный воспоминание с деталями (когда, где, как вы пели). Избегайте ненужных повторов и неформальных сокращений («wanna»). Постройте ответ из 2–3 предложений для ясности.

예시: I wouldn't choose to sing for anyone now. When I was a child I used to sing for my mother at her birthday parties with my sister, and those performances were memorable and made her very happy.

제안: Дайте прямой ответ, затем приведите одну-две конкретные причины и пример из личного опыта. Используйте связки (for example, because, therefore) и избегайте повторов («bad days», «I I"). Это сделает ответ более естественным и структурированным.

예시: Yes, singing can lift people's mood because music releases tension and improves emotions. For example, when I'm stressed I often sing quietly at home to relax, and it usually helps me feel calmer and more positive.

× But I think that is singing is not useful.

✓ But I think that singing is not useful.

The sentence has an extra dummy 'is' creating a redundancy and confusion. Remove the extra 'is' so the noun 'singing' correctly functions as the subject. Suggestion: read the sentence aloud to detect extra verbs and ensure only one linking verb connects subject and complement.

× Instead of that I can I can work on myself by reading or.

✓ Instead of that, I can work on myself by reading.

The sentence repeats 'I can' and ends with an incomplete phrase 'or'. Remove the duplicate modal and finish the thought. Suggestion: avoid repetition and complete alternatives (e.g., 'by reading or practicing').

× Yes, when I heard about that singing helps you to improve your English speaking skills, I started to sing uh songs but I think it's not a good idea for learning English.

✓ Yes, when I heard that singing helps you improve your English speaking skills, I started to sing songs, but I think it's not a good way to learn English.

The phrase 'heard about that' is awkward; use 'heard that'. 'Helps you to improve' is acceptable but 'helps you improve' is more natural. 'A good idea for learning English' should be 'a good way to learn English' for idiomatic expression. Suggestion: simplify 'heard that' and use 'way to learn' instead of 'idea for learning'.

× Instead of I will I would read books about English grammar or speaking.

✓ Instead, I would read books about English grammar or speaking.

The sentence incorrectly mixes 'will' and 'would' and has a misplaced 'Instead of'. Use 'Instead' and one modal 'would' to express preference. Suggestion: choose the correct modal for hypothetical or preferred actions ('would' for preference).

× I don't wanna sing for for someone, but I sang for my mother in in my childhood, at her birthdays or in at some events.

✓ I don't want to sing for someone, but I sang for my mother in my childhood at her birthdays and at some events.

Avoid informal contraction 'wanna' in formal speech; remove duplicate words 'for for' and 'in in', and correct 'in at some events' to 'at some events'. Suggestion: use 'want to' in formal contexts and proofread to remove duplicated words.

× I always used to hang to her with my sister.

✓ I always used to sing for her with my sister.

'Hang to her' is incorrect; likely intended 'sing for her' or 'go to her'. Use appropriate verb and preposition: 'sing for her' is correct for performing. Suggestion: choose verbs that collocate with prepositions correctly (e.g., 'sing for', 'go to').

× Yes, I think it helps people to improve their mood in different periods.

✓ Yes, I think it helps people improve their mood at different times.

'In different periods' is unnatural; 'at different times' is idiomatic. 'Helps people to improve' can omit 'to'. Suggestion: prefer natural collocations like 'at different times' and drop unnecessary 'to'.

× And I also used to sing in my bad days on my bad days because when I am stressed I I prefer to sing because it's a good way to be relaxed.

✓ I also used to sing on my bad days because when I am stressed I prefer to sing; it's a good way to relax.

Remove duplication 'in my bad days on my bad days' and duplicate 'I I'. Use 'on my bad days' and 'a good way to relax' instead of 'to be relaxed'. Suggestion: proofread to remove repeated fragments and use active verbs ('relax') rather than passive ('be relaxed').