Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Give a clear topic sentence, be concise, and organize reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition and correct grammar (e.g. "I can't breathe deeply" or "I have a small lung capacity"). Limit to 2–3 short sentences with specific reasons and one brief example. Use linking words like "because" and "so".

예시: No, I don't enjoy singing because I have a weak singing voice and limited lung capacity. For example, when I try to sing long notes I run out of breath quickly, so I prefer sports and other hobbies instead.

제안: Start with a direct response and then give a concise supporting detail. Correct tense and remove filler words. Mention when and why you lacked interest or what you did learn to make it more specific.

예시: Yes, I learned basic singing as a child at school, but I wasn't very interested. I took a few lessons and practiced simple songs, yet I preferred other activities like sports.

제안: Answer directly who you would sing for, then briefly explain why using specific details. Avoid hesitations and informal fillers like "uh" and unclear phrases like "about 1 pleasant song."

예시: I would sing for my mother because I know a sweet song about mothers that she finds touching. It would be a small, personal way to thank her for her support.

제안: Begin with a clear opinion, then give 1–2 specific reasons with linking words. Correct word choice (use "singing", not "thinking") and grammar ("someone who does not like singing"). Avoid excessive hedging and fillers.

예시: I think singing can sometimes bring happiness because it helps people express emotions and bond socially. However, it can also annoy others if it's noisy or if someone doesn't enjoy that style of music.

× No, I don't like singing, I prefer the sport, I prefer other hobbies and that I think I have not pleasant voice and it is so hard for me to think and also I have small lungs and I can breath deeply.

✓ No, I don't like singing. I prefer sports and other hobbies, and I don't think I have a pleasant voice. It is also hard for me, and I have small lungs so I cannot breathe deeply.

Problems: incorrect pronoun/word choice ('the sport' -> 'sports'), awkward pronoun use ('that I think' unnecessary), incorrect negation and adjective order ('have not pleasant voice' -> 'don't think I have a pleasant voice'), wrong modal/ability verb for ability in present ('can breath' should be 'cannot breathe deeply'). Suggestions: split into shorter sentences; use plural 'sports' for general activities; use 'don't think' to express opinion; use 'cannot' + base verb 'breathe' for inability; place adjectives correctly before nouns. Grammar problem type ID:12

× Yes, I had when I was a child and I was studying at school and I I was not interested in that to be honest.

✓ Yes, I did when I was a child and I was studying at school, but I was not interested in it, to be honest.

Problems: incorrect auxiliary for past experience ('I had' -> 'I did' to answer 'Have you ever learnt'); repeated 'I'; vague pronoun ('that' -> 'it'). Suggestions: use 'did' as short answer to 'Have you ever...'; remove repetition; use 'but' to contrast and 'it' for the activity. Grammar problem type ID:5

× I want to thank for my mom 'cause I know about 1 pleasant song. About mothers and she will find this uh song so cute and cozy.

✓ I want to sing for my mom because I know one pleasant song about mothers, and she will find the song very cute and cozy.

Problems: wrong verb 'thank for' (should be 'sing for'); incorrect numeral format ('1' -> 'one'); awkward clause ordering and pronoun reference. Suggestions: use 'sing for' to express whom you will sing to; write numbers as words in speech transcription; combine clauses for clarity and place adjectives ('cute and cozy') after noun. Grammar problem type ID:12

× Sometimes thinking can bring happiness to people, but in my opinion, not always, uh, sometimes it can be noisy, it can be not pleasant, it can be so, umm, anxious for somebody which do not like thinking.

✓ Sometimes singing can bring happiness to people, but in my opinion not always. Sometimes it can be noisy or unpleasant, and it can make someone anxious if they do not like singing.

Problems: wrong word 'thinking' instead of 'singing'; incorrect relative pronoun and verb agreement ('somebody which do not like' -> 'someone who does not like'); awkward repetition. Suggestions: use the correct topic word 'singing'; use 'who' for people and ensure subject-verb agreement ('does not like'); vary sentence structure and use 'or' for alternatives. Grammar problem type ID:12