Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Use natural expressions, correct word choice and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Replace incorrect words (e.g., 'exploit myself', 'relax emotions', 'in a core', 'updating') with appropriate phrases and avoid saying 'relaxed' twice.

예시: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me express myself and relieve stress. Also, I like singing with others—for example, at karaoke nights or in a choir—because it's a social activity that helps me meet people and have fun.

제안: Keep the direct answer, then give specific supporting details with a linking phrase. Correct tense and phrasing: use 'taken' instead of 'take' for past classes, and clarify frequency with concise adverbs.

예시: No, I haven't had formal singing lessons. However, I took music classes in primary and high school, and now I usually sing casually with friends for fun.

제안: Begin with a clear topic sentence answering 'who', then give concrete details about what you would perform. Fix wrong phrase 'thank for' and grammar issues like 'as well singing'. Use linking words to connect ideas.

예시: I'd like to sing for students and other audience members at my university. For example, I hope to perform at a university concert where I can play the keyboard and sing some of my favourite songs, which would be exciting and good practice.

제안: Answer directly and use correct vocabulary and grammar: 'singing' not 'saying'; 'express and release emotions' not 'relax motion'. Use linking words and a precise example. Ensure subject-verb agreement.

예시: Yes, I think singing can make people happier because it helps them express and release emotions instead of keeping them inside. For example, singing with friends or listening to favourite songs can reduce stress and make people feel more connected and joyful.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence then add specific details. Correct word choices like 'live roots' (probably 'live sets' or 'routines') and fix tense consistency. Use linking words ('for example', 'also') to connect points and avoid awkward phrasing.

예시: Yes, I enjoy listening to other singers, especially hip hop artists, because their performances are energetic and their live sets are exciting. For example, I often watch videos of their concerts and sometimes sing along with friends, which I find really enjoyable.

제안: Give a clear direct answer, then provide specific, grammatically correct details. Fix many errors: 'saying' -> 'singing', 'vocal coach' -> 'vocal coaches', 'teeth' is irrelevant, 'pH' is incorrect. State concrete improvements and use linking words like 'but' and 'as a result'.

예시: No, I haven't taken formal singing classes, but I often watch vocal tutorials on YouTube. Vocal coaches explain techniques for breathing and hitting high notes, and as a result my pitch and confidence have improved through regular practice.

× Yes, I like singing because it lets me exploit myself and relax emotions which makes me feel more relaxed.

✓ Yes, I like singing because it lets me express myself and relax my emotions, which makes me feel more relaxed.

The verb 'exploit' is incorrect in this context; the correct verb is 'express' (verb + -ing 'singing' is fine). Also add possessive 'my' before 'emotions' and a comma before the relative clause for clarity. Suggestion: use 'express myself' and include 'my' for correct meaning and grammar.

× I also enjoy singing with other people, for example as karaoke or in a core because it's social and updating.

✓ I also enjoy singing with other people, for example at karaoke or in a choir because it's social and uplifting.

Use preposition 'at' with 'karaoke' (not 'as'). 'Core' is a misspelling of 'choir'. 'Updating' is incorrect here; the intended adjective is 'uplifting'. Suggestion: use 'at karaoke' and 'choir', and 'uplifting' to describe a positive emotional effect.

× No, I haven't had formal singing lessons.

✓ No, I haven't had formal singing lessons.

This sentence is already correct: present perfect 'haven't had' correctly expresses lack of past experience up to now. No change needed.

× I often take some music classes at primary and high school, and now I usually sing casually with friends for fun.

✓ I often took some music classes in primary and high school, and now I usually sing casually with friends for fun.

When referring to past regular attendance in school, simple past 'took' is more appropriate than present 'take'. Use preposition 'in' with 'primary and high school'. Suggestion: change tense to past and use 'in' for schools.

× I would like to thank for the students and audience at my university because I love performing and I play the keyboard.

✓ I would like to perform for the students and audience at my university because I love performing and I play the keyboard.

The verb 'thank for' is incorrect and missing an object; likely intended verb is 'perform for'. Replace 'thank for' with 'perform for'. Also 'students and audience' is fine but could be 'the students and audience'. Suggestion: use 'perform for' to match context.

× I hope to take the stage at a university concert and play some of my favorite keyboard pieces as well singing, which is both exciting and good practice.

✓ I hope to take the stage at a university concert and play some of my favorite keyboard pieces as well as sing, which would be both exciting and good practice.

Use the correlative conjunction 'as well as' and change 'singing' to base verb 'sing' to parallel 'play'. Also use 'would be' to express a hoped-for outcome. Suggestion: use 'as well as sing' and consider modal 'would' for hypothetical excitement.

× Yes, I think saying can bring happiness to people because it help them express and relax motion instead of keeping them inside.

✓ Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because it helps them express and relax emotions instead of keeping them inside.

'Saying' is wrong; should be 'singing'. Subject-verb agreement: 'it helps' (third-person singular). 'Motion' is incorrect word; should be 'emotions'. Suggestion: use 'singing', 'helps', and 'emotions'.

× It can also calm stress and lift moods.

✓ It can also reduce stress and lift moods.

'Calm stress' is uncommon; 'reduce stress' or 'alleviate stress' is preferred. The sentence is otherwise fine. Suggestion: use more natural collocation 'reduce stress'.

× For example, singing with friends or listening to favorite music often make people feel more connected and joyful.

✓ For example, singing with friends or listening to favorite music often makes people feel more connected and joyful.

Subject is singular/compound acting as a single activity, so verb should be 'makes' (subject-verb agreement). Suggestion: use 'makes' to agree with singular activity or use 'these activities make' if plural.

× Yes, I like listening to artists singing, especially hip hop idols because their performances are energetic and their live roots are catchy.

✓ Yes, I like listening to artists sing, especially hip-hop idols, because their performances are energetic and their live routines are catchy.

Use base verb 'sing' after 'listening to' in this context or 'listening to artists singing' is acceptable but 'sing' is more natural. 'Hip hop' should be hyphenated as 'hip-hop' when used as an adjective. 'Live roots' is incorrect; intended word is 'routs' is wrong—'routines' fits meaning. Suggestion: use 'artists sing' or 'artists singing' consistently and 'live routines'.

× I often watch videos of their live shows and sometimes sing along with my friends who said I sing well, so I really enjoy both listening or joining in.

✓ I often watch videos of their live shows and sometimes sing along with my friends who say I sing well, so I really enjoy both listening and joining in.

Sequence of tenses: 'who said' should be 'who say' for a general statement. Use correlative conjunction 'both...and' (not 'both...or'). Suggestion: change to 'who say' and 'both listening and joining in'.

× No I haven't taken a formal saying classes but I often watch tutorials on YouTube.

✓ No, I haven't taken formal singing classes but I often watch tutorials on YouTube.

'Saying' should be 'singing'. Remove 'a' before plural 'classes' and add comma after 'No'. Suggestion: use 'formal singing classes'.

× Many vocal coach explain techniques for breathing control and hitting high notes and I find them teeth really useful.

✓ Many vocal coaches explain techniques for breath control and hitting high notes, and I find them really useful.

Pluralize 'coach' to 'coaches' to match 'many'. 'Breathing control' is more commonly 'breath control'. Remove misplaced word 'teeth'. Add comma before conjunction. Suggestion: use 'many vocal coaches' and 'breath control'.

× I have already improved my pH and confidence in by practicing regularly.

✓ I have already improved my pitch and confidence by practicing regularly.

'pH' is wrong word; intended 'pitch'. Remove incorrect preposition 'in' after 'confidence'. Use 'by practicing' to indicate method. Suggestion: write 'pitch and confidence' and 'by practicing regularly'.