List— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は自然ですが、文法の誤りや冗長な表現が見られます。例えば、「at least when I am shopping」は不自然で、「everything what I want」も誤りです。より簡潔で正確な表現を心がけ、文のつながりを明確にしましょう。

예시: Yes, I usually make a shopping list because it helps me remember everything I need. For example, having a list prevents me from forgetting important items, and I feel more organized and relaxed. This way, I can save time and avoid buying unnecessary things.

제안: 回答がやや不明瞭で、文法的な誤りや繰り返しが多いです。具体的な内容を明確にし、論理的なつながりを持たせるために接続詞を使いましょう。

예시: Yes, I usually make a list for work because it helps me remember my tasks. For example, when I have to do other things, the list ensures I don't forget anything important.

제안: 回答が不自然で繰り返しや言い淀みが多いです。理由を明確にし、簡潔で自然な表現を使うことが重要です。

예시: In my opinion, some people dislike making lists because writing everything down can be time-consuming and stressful.

제안: 回答は自然で内容も具体的ですが、さらに語彙の幅を広げ、接続詞を増やして論理的な流れを強化すると良いでしょう。

예시: I prefer making lists on my phone because it is more convenient and flexible. For instance, I can quickly add or delete tasks, and set reminders that help me stay organized and reduce stress. Therefore, using my phone simplifies managing my daily tasks significantly.

× Yes, I usually make at least when I am shopping because that makes the process easier and helps me remember everything what I want.

✓ Yes, I usually make a list at least when I am shopping because that makes the process easier and helps me remember everything I want.

The phrase 'everything what I want' is incorrect. The word 'what' is unnecessary here and should be omitted. The correct phrase is 'everything I want'. Also, the phrase 'make at least' is incomplete and should be 'make a list at least'.

× This way I can save time and avoid buying unnecessary.

✓ This way I can save time and avoid buying unnecessary items.

The word 'unnecessary' is an adjective and needs a noun to modify. Here, 'items' should be added after 'unnecessary' to complete the meaning.

× Yes, I usually make a list for work and I think it works because I can easily remember that I need to do in terms of work and for example when I have to go to have to do other things I can remember everything.

✓ Yes, I usually make a list for work and I think it works because I can easily remember what I need to do in terms of work, and for example, when I have to go to do other things, I can remember everything.

The phrase 'remember that I need to do' is incorrect; it should be 'remember what I need to do'. Also, the phrase 'go to have to do other things' is awkward and should be 'go to do other things'. Commas are added for clarity.

× In my opinion, I think making a list would be hassle to write it because they need to do they need they need to write umm, a lot of things on the paper, which is so stressful.

✓ In my opinion, I think making a list would be a hassle to write because they need to write a lot of things on paper, which is so stressful.

The phrase 'would be hassle to write it' is incorrect; it should be 'would be a hassle to write'. The repetition 'they need to do they need they need' is redundant and removed. Also, 'on the paper' should be 'on paper' for general statements.