List— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is good but you need to avoid small grammar mistakes like 'its ensures' which should be 'it ensures'. Also, try to use linking words like 'so' or 'therefore' to make your answer more coherent. For example, you can say, 'I make a list whenever I go shopping because it helps me keep my expenses in check, so I do not spend more than I budget.'

예시: Yes, I make a list whenever I go shopping because it helps me keep my expenses in check, so I do not spend more than I budget. Therefore, it ensures that I get everything I need at that particular time.

제안: Your answer has some repetition and small errors like 'to to' and 'at works at work'. Try to be more concise and correct these mistakes. Use linking words like 'and' or 'which' to connect ideas smoothly. For example, 'I usually make a list for my work because it helps me allocate time for each task and work efficiently.'

예시: Yes, I usually make a list for my work because it helps me allocate time for each task and work efficiently. I have discovered that listing my tasks helps me save time and stay organized.

제안: Your answer is a bit unclear and incomplete at the end. Also, avoid redundancy like 'I really do not know why some people do not like making lists.' Instead, try to give a clear opinion with reasons. Use linking words like 'because' or 'however'. For example, 'Some people dislike making lists because it does not guarantee achieving goals, and it requires discipline to follow them strictly.'

예시: Some people dislike making lists because it does not guarantee achieving goals, and it requires discipline to follow them strictly. However, others find lists helpful for organizing their tasks.

제안: Your answer is understandable but has some grammar issues like 'Unlike my phone that it takes a lot of courage'. Try to use clearer sentences and linking words like 'because' or 'so'. For example, 'I prefer making a list on paper because it is handy and I can take it anywhere without worrying about losing it. I avoid using my phone because I fear being robbed.'

예시: I prefer making a list on paper because it is handy and I can take it anywhere without worrying about losing it. I avoid using my phone because I fear being robbed when I carry it around.

× I do not spend more than I budget and also its ensures that I get everything I need at that particular time.

✓ I do not spend more than I budget and also it ensures that I get everything I need at that particular time.

The pronoun 'its' is incorrect here; the correct pronoun is 'it' because it refers to the action of making a list, which is singular and requires the subject pronoun 'it'.

× I discovered that listing the things I need to do at works at work helps save time.

✓ I discovered that listing the things I need to do at work helps save time.

The phrase 'at works at work' is incorrect and redundant. The correct preposition is 'at work' to indicate the place where the tasks are done.

× It takes someone that is well disciplined to follow the list today latter to the letter, unlike some other people that.

✓ It takes someone who is well disciplined to follow the list later to the letter, unlike some other people.

The conjunction 'that' is incorrectly used to refer to people; 'who' is the correct relative pronoun for people. Also, 'latter' is misspelled and should be 'later'. The sentence was incomplete and has been corrected for clarity.

× Unlike my phone that it takes a lot of courage to take it around and I don't want to be robbed.

✓ Unlike my phone, it takes a lot of courage to take it around and I don't want to be robbed.

The phrase 'that it takes' is incorrect; 'that' is unnecessary and causes redundancy. The sentence is clearer and grammatically correct without 'that'.