List— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 整体回答自然，内容有两个明确理由，结构清晰。但存在语法小错误（如“previously”用法不当）、重复表达和少许口语填充词。建议：1) 注意词汇搭配与时态，如将“making a shopping list previously”改为“making a shopping list in advance”或直接省略“previously”。2) 去掉冗余衔接词（如“to be honest”“so”过多），使句子更简洁。3) 用更具体的例子来支持观点，例如说明一次不使用清单导致的后果，提升内容具体性。

예시: I usually don't make a shopping list because I only buy a few items and can remember them. Also, when I do make a list, I often see other tempting products and end up buying them, which makes the list less useful. For example, last week I went to the supermarket without a list and quickly picked up three extra snacks, so I decided lists don't help me much.

제안: 回答直接且目的明确，使用了两个支持点，逻辑清晰。但有少量词汇与表达不够地道（如“emergent”应为“urgent”或“most urgent tasks”），以及衔接词可更自然。建议：1) 用更地道的词汇替换（urgent, priority）。2) 增加一两个简短具体细节或例子（例如如何安排优先级或举一个任务成功按时完成的例子）。3) 控制句子长度，避免啰嗦。

예시: Yes, I keep a to-do list for work and it helps a lot. It lets me prioritise urgent tasks so I deal with the most important ones first. For example, last month I listed all my deadlines and finished a client report two days early because I organised my time clearly.

제안: 回答有观点但表达不够流畅，存在口语填充词（uh）、语法错误（"they're feeling or mood may change"、"depends on their mood"位置问题）以及重复。建议：1) 去掉填充词并调整语序，使句子更连贯。2) 修正语法（例如“their mood may change quickly, so they prefer to act spontaneously”）。3) 可以补充另一种原因（例如怕失败或不喜欢束缚）并用连接词衔接，提升覆盖面。

예시: I think some people dislike lists because they feel restricted by schedules and prefer to be spontaneous. Their mood can change quickly, so they want the freedom to choose what to do in the moment. Another reason is that some find lists stressful if they worry about not finishing tasks.

제안: 回答明确并给出理由，包含个人习惯的具体细节（tiny checklist book），表现自然。但句子较长且有小错误（“give me disruptions”更自然为“distract me”），可用连接词使结构更紧凑。建议：1) 使用更准确的动词（distract）和更简洁句式。2) 将长句分成两句，第一句表明偏好，第二句解释原因并给出具体例子。

예시: I prefer paper lists because they feel clearer and I carry a small checklist notebook everywhere. It helps me remember tasks quickly, while my phone often distracts me with notifications.

× I don't have so many things to buy so I can remember them in my mind.

✓ I don't have that many things to buy, so I can remember them in my mind.

原句中使用 "so many" 在这种情境下常用搭配是 "that many" 来表达“那么多”。中文建议：把“so many”换成“that many（那么多）”会更地道："I don't have that many things to buy"。

× So I think making a shopping list previously is unnecessary.

✓ So I think making a shopping list beforehand is unnecessary.

原句使用 "previously" 不太适合修饰 'making a shopping list' 的语境，通常用 "beforehand" 或 "in advance"。中文建议：将“previously”改为“beforehand（事先）”或“in advance（提前）”。

× I think making a list is an important way to help you find the most emergent things that you must do instantly.

✓ I think making a list is an important way to help you find the most urgent things that you must do immediately.

原句中用词不当："emergent" 和 "instantly" 在此语境不自然。应使用常见搭配 "urgent"（紧急的）和 "immediately"（立即）。中文建议：把“emergent”换成“urgent”，“instantly”换成“immediately”。

× And besides, it can also remind me the different deadlines of each task so I can complete it in time.

✓ And besides, it can also remind me of the different deadlines for each task so I can complete them on time.

缺少介词 "of"（remind sb of sth）。此外，'each task' 对应的代词应是复数 "them"，并且习惯搭配是 "complete ... on time"。中文建议：加上“of”，把“it”改为“them”，并用“on time”。

× they're feeling or mood may change quickly so they need to decide what and when to do uh depends on their mood, so they just can't plan it in advance.

✓ their feelings or moods may change quickly, so they need to decide what and when to do depending on their mood, so they just can't plan in advance.

原句存在连词结构混乱和主谓短语不一致："they're feeling or mood" 不正确，应为 "their feelings or moods"；"depends on their mood" 与前句主句不一致，应使用现在分词短语 "depending on their mood" 与前句连接；最后用法更简洁为 "plan in advance"。中文建议：把“they're feeling or mood”改为“their feelings or moods”，把“depends on their mood”改为“depending on their mood”，并简化为“plan in advance”。

× I prefer to make a list on paper because I think it's much clearer and I also have a tiny checklist book which I will carry anywhere so it can remind me of anything I have to do instantly and I think a phone will give me disruptions.

✓ I prefer to make a list on paper because I think it's much clearer, and I also have a tiny checklist book which I carry everywhere so it can remind me of anything I have to do immediately, and I think a phone will distract me.

原句问题："carry anywhere" 应为常用搭配 "carry everywhere" 或 "carry with me"；"instantly" 用法不自然，应为 "immediately"；"give me disruptions" 不地道，常用表达为 "distract me" 或 "cause distractions"。中文建议：将“carry anywhere”改为“carry everywhere/ carry with me”，把“instantly”换为“immediately”，把“give me disruptions”改为“distract me”。