List— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答要更自然、逻辑更清晰，并注意语法和流利度。首先直接给出主题句，例如“I usually make a shopping list.” 然后用1–2句具体理由并用连接词（because / so / otherwise）衔接，避免重复填词（uh, um）并改正语法错误（如“make a list can”应为“making a list can”）。

예시: I usually make a shopping list because making a list helps me avoid forgetting important items. Otherwise, I often spend more time wandering around the store and feel stressed.

제안: 需要更准确的表达和更好组织句子。先明确回答“Yes”或“No”，然后说明原因并举具体效果。注意语法（例如“a lot of experiments”，“I can finish all my experiments in one day”），用连接词如“so”或“therefore”使逻辑更连贯，减少犹豫词。

예시: Yes, I do. I have many experiments to run every day, so I make a list to prioritise tasks. As a result, I can finish all my planned experiments within a day.

제안: 答案需要更具体且语法要正确。可以给出两个清晰原因并用连接词（for example / also）衔接，同时修正错误表达（如“they don't have so much work”，“not necessary for them”，“ability to control their sales”应改为“ability to self-manage”或“good memory/self-discipline”）。避免模糊词汇“maybe”过多。

예시: Some people don't make lists because they don't have a heavy workload and find it unnecessary. Also, others rely on a good memory or strong self-discipline, so they prefer to keep things in their head.

제안: 需要更清晰、有条理的表达理由并纠正混乱句子。先给出偏好（paper or phone），然后提供1–2个具体原因并用because / so / therefore连接。避免不必要的比喻和不准确词汇（比如“highest pricing”，“Air can't control myself”毫无意义），改用“feel more committed”或“more likely to complete tasks”。

예시: Honestly, I prefer making lists on paper because writing things down by hand helps me remember them better. It also makes me feel more committed to completing the tasks.

× I think, uh, make a list can make me uh, avoid forgetting something important or otherwise I will uh, win the more again, slow, troublesome.

✓ I think making a list can help me avoid forgetting something important; otherwise it will be more time-consuming and troublesome.

句子中“make a list can make me avoid...”使用不定式/原形动词结构不符合英语习惯。此处应使用动名词短语作为主语或表目的，故将“make a list”改为“making a list”。另外“win the more again, slow, troublesome”为不规范表达，意图是“更费时、更麻烦”，故改为“more time-consuming and troublesome”。建议多用动名词作为抽象动作的主语，并使用规范的形容词短语表达性质。

× Yes, I do because every day I have a a lot of experiments.

✓ Yes, I do because every day I have a lot of experiments.

原句中“a a lot of”多了一个不必要的冠词“a”。“a lot of”本身已含数量词作用，不需要额外的冠词。建议注意不要重复冠词。

× Umm, if I don't make a list, maybe I will not want to uh, do this.

✓ Umm, if I don't make a list, maybe I won't want to do it.

原句中“will not want to do this”在口语可用，但“will not”缩写为“won't”更自然，且“do this”中指代前文动作时用“do it”更恰当。这里属于情态/助动词表达习惯问题，建议使用常见缩写和代词指代以使表达更地道。

× Uh, I think it's very work because I can finished all my experiments one day.

✓ Uh, I think it's very effective because I can finish all my experiments in one day.

原句有两处时态/用词错误：1）“it's very work”不是正确表达，意图应为“很有效/有用”，可用“very effective”或“very useful”。2）“I can finished”动词时态错误，after modal verb “can” 应接动词原形“finish”，而非过去式“finished”。另外“一天内完成”应为“in one day”。建议注意情态动词后接动词原形，并用正确形容词表达意义。

× I think maybe they don't have so many work to do, so it's not necessary for them to make a list of.

✓ I think maybe they don't have so much work to do, so it's not necessary for them to make a list.

原句问题有两点：1）“so many work”错误，work作为不可数名词应使用“so much work”或“many tasks”。2）“make a list of”后面需要宾语，若无宾语应去掉介词“of”。因此改为“so much work”并去掉句尾的“of”。建议区分可数与不可数名词并注意介词用法。

× Apart from that, maybe they had a ability to control their sales to do this work.

✓ Apart from that, maybe they have the ability to control themselves to do this work.

原句问题：1）时态和助动词不符，“had a ability”应为现在时“have the ability”，且“ability”前面要加定冠词“the”。2）“control their sales”用词错误，应为“control themselves”（控制自己）或“self-control”，原句混淆了“sales（销售）”。因此改为“have the ability to control themselves”。建议注意名词搭配并选择正确的代词或反身代词。

× I'd like to uh, make a list on my paper because umm, I can uh, write down by myself.

✓ I'd like to make a list on paper because I can write it down myself.

原句“on my paper”不自然，通常说“on paper”或“on my paper/notebook”。此外“write down by myself”中“by myself”位置不自然，常用“write it down myself”。建议使用更自然的介词搭配并把副词放在动词后。

× It will make a umm, highest pricing on me as if I write it on for air, Air can't control myself too.

✓ It will make me more careful about prices; if I write it in the air (or on my phone) I can't control myself as well.

原句非常混乱：1）“highest pricing on me”结构不正确，应表达“让我更注意价格”，可用“make me more careful about prices”。2）“as if I write it on for air, Air can't control myself too”多处错误，代词、介词和反身形式都不当。将其改为“if I write it in the air (or on my phone) I can't control myself as well”更符合逻辑。注意反身代词用法应与主语一致，且“control myself”位置和比较短语“as well”位置要正确。建议理清想表达的意思后分句重写，注意代词和副词位置。