List— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Reduce hesitation and repetition; use one clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details. Be specific about when and why you make a list, and use linking words (for example, because, so, however). Keep it to 2–3 concise sentences.

예시: Yes, I usually make a list when I shop for groceries because I often forget small items. For other types of shopping, such as clothes, I don't make a list because I prefer to choose things spontaneously.

제안: Clarify vocabulary and sentence structure: use the correct word 'list' and explain how it helps with time management. Give one clear result using linking words like so or therefore. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I keep a work list because it helps me prioritize tasks and manage my time. As a result, I can work more efficiently and finish important tasks earlier.

제안: Organize the answer with a topic sentence and two specific reasons using linking words (for example, because, or, and). Avoid vague labels like 'lazy'—use neutral language. Provide an example or brief explanation.

예시: Some people dislike making lists for different reasons. For example, they find the process boring or time-consuming, and others prefer to rely on memory because they can remember tasks easily.

제안: Be concise and use correct phrases: say 'on my phone' and explain 2 clear benefits with linking words (for example, because, so). Avoid filler words. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: I prefer making lists on my phone because it is convenient and always with me. Also, I can easily edit items and set reminders, so I rarely forget anything.

× I make a list when shopping for the grocery because of the there are some items, uh, uh, I, I will, uh, I watch forget at at that time.

✓ I make a list when shopping for groceries because there are some items I might forget at that time.

Incorrect use of 'the' and awkward 'there are' placement. 'the grocery' should be plural 'groceries' when speaking generally. Remove filler words and reorder 'there are' to correctly introduce the items. Use 'might forget' for possibility.

× So in the grocery thing, so I, I'll make a list, but in the some other shopping, I will not make a.

✓ So for grocery shopping I make a list, but for other kinds of shopping I do not.

Awkward phrase 'grocery thing' and incomplete ending 'make a.' Replace with 'grocery shopping' and 'other kinds of shopping'. Use complete clause 'I do not' to finish the sentence.

× Yes, I make a leash for my work because it is the, uh, sequence is to time to time management for them.

✓ Yes, I make a list for my work because it helps me manage my time and tasks.

Wrong word 'leash' instead of 'list' and confusing phrasing 'sequence is to time to time management for them.' Replace with clear noun 'list' and express purpose: 'helps me manage my time and tasks.'

× And uh, if I make a list and according to them, according to torture, I if I work through to this is the continuously and in this less time they are the completing their.

✓ If I make a list and follow it, I can work continuously and complete my tasks more quickly.

Pronoun 'them' unclear; 'according to torture' is incorrect. Rephrase to 'follow it' (referring to the list). Simplify to convey intended meaning: working continuously and completing tasks faster.

× Uh, there are the different, different, uh, people as the individual perspective.

✓ There are different people with individual perspectives.

Redundant 'the' and repetition. Use 'different people' and 'with individual perspectives' to express the idea concisely.

× Uh, in the sometimes the making a list is the boring type.

✓ Sometimes making a list is boring.

Unnecessary articles ('the') and unnatural 'boring type.' Use simple adjective 'boring' and natural word order.

× And if the, some other lazy people, so they are the don't make a list.

✓ Some lazy people do not make a list.

Unnecessary filler words and wrong word order 'they are the don't.' Use correct negative form 'do not make a list.'

× And sometimes the more intelligent people also remembering the everything to think, don't not a maker.

✓ Sometimes more intelligent people also remember everything and do not make lists.

Incorrect verb form 'remembering' should be 'remember' for simple present. Remove double negative 'don't not' and awkward 'maker.' Use 'do not make lists.'

× I prefer to make a list in my phone in notes because of the IT is the easy to, uh, everywhere or anywhere.

✓ I prefer to make a list on my phone in the Notes app because it is easy to access anywhere.

Use preposition 'on' with phone and article 'the' before Notes app. 'Because of the IT is the easy to' is incorrect; rewrite as 'because it is easy to access anywhere.'

× I make a list and uh, I uh, and the mobile is always with me so I can see it every time and the AdWords change anything from the anytime, so I prefer the phone.

✓ I make a list and the mobile is always with me so I can check it anytime and change anything when needed, so I prefer my phone.

Replace 'see it every time' with 'check it anytime.' 'AdWords' is incorrect; likely 'always' or 'I can change anything.' Use 'when needed' and 'my phone' as possession. Remove unnecessary fillers.