List— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答需更自然简洁，并包含主题句和具体细节。避免冗长重复，注意时态和词语搭配（例如：make a list, unnecessary）。可以用1个主题句+1-2个支持句，并用连接词衔接。

예시: Yes, I always make a shopping list. I find that writing items down on my phone helps me stay organized and avoid buying unnecessary things. For example, last week I saved money by sticking to the list and not being tempted by impulse purchases.

제안: 需要更自然明确地表达因果关系，避免重复“I think/ I will”。用一两个支持细节说明列表如何帮助工作，比如提高效率或按优先级执行，并使用连接词。

예시: Yes, I always make a to-do list for work because it helps me prioritize tasks and meet deadlines. By listing tasks in order of importance, I can focus on high-priority items first and complete my work more efficiently.

제안: 回答应更简洁且逻辑清晰，避免重复和模糊表达。给出1-2个具体原因并用连接词说明影响，例如喜欢灵活性或觉得形式化。

예시: I think some people dislike making lists because they prefer flexibility and spontaneity. For instance, freelancers may avoid lists since rigid schedules can feel restrictive and reduce creativity.

제안: 回答总体不错，但需注意时态一致和更自然表达。把过去和现在对比用一句话总结，再给出具体优点，如同步、提醒功能等。

예시: I used to write lists on paper when I was a child because I didn’t have a phone. Now I prefer my phone since I can sync lists with my calendar and set reminders, which helps me remember deadlines and appointments.

× Of course I will make this when I am shopping and the reason why I would like to make a list is because I think everything should be listed on a paper or a list on the phone to make more clear and to prevent from purchasing more things that is not necessary or is not the original.

✓ Of course I make one when I go shopping, and the reason I make a list is that I think everything should be written on paper or in a phone list to make things clearer and to prevent buying things that are not necessary or not planned.

问题: 使用将来时“will make”与陈述习惯行为时不匹配，应使用一般现在时；短语和搭配错误（make a list on the phone → in a phone list / listed on a paper → written on paper）；冗长句子造成结构混乱。建议: 当描述习惯或常态时用一般现在时（I make），用更自然的搭配：write on paper, in a phone list, buy things；将从句和目的短语简化，避免多余词汇。

× Yes, of course I make a list for my work and I think it works. And the reason why I would like to make a list for my work is because I would like everything to follow and obey on the schedule and I will strictly perform it. So I think the list truly works.

✓ Yes, of course I make a list for my work and I think it works. The reason I make a work list is that I want everything to follow the schedule, and I will follow it strictly. So I think the list really works.

问题: 不一致的时态和冗余的表达（would like 用于一般事实不合适，应用现在时）；不自然搭配（follow and obey on the schedule → follow the schedule；perform it → follow it）；词汇重复。建议: 描述习惯用一般现在时，简化表达并使用自然搭配如 follow the schedule, follow it strictly。

× I can't really understand that kind of people who don't really like to make this on their mind or in their mind.

✓ I can't really understand people who don't like to make lists in their minds.

问题: 结构冗余与不自然（that kind of people who... 是重复且笨重的表达；make this on their mind or in their mind 表达不清）。建议: 精简主语和定语从句，用 people who don't like to make lists in their minds。

× But in my point of view, I will say maybe it's that kind of people or hate to obligate something or don't want to follow the schedule.

✓ But in my point of view, I would say maybe they hate being obligated or don't want to follow a schedule.

问题: 代词使用不当（it's that kind of people → they；动词搭配错误和被动/使役结构不当：hate to obligate something → hate being obligated）；时态语气需一致（will say → would say 更礼貌/虚拟）。建议: 使用恰当代词 they；用被动或不定式结构表达被迫感，如 hate being obligated；使语气与陈述一致。

× They just want to do whatever they want.

✓ They just want to do whatever they want to do.

问题: 句尾省略动词导致不完整（do whatever they want → 更自然完整为 do whatever they want to do）。建议: 保持谓语完整，若使用 whatever 引导，通常加上动词以完成意义。

× When I was little, I prefer to make this on my paper because I don't have a phone.

✓ When I was little, I preferred to make lists on paper because I didn't have a phone.

问题: 时间状语表示过去（When I was little），谓语却用现在时 prefer 和 don't have，应使用过去时 preferred / didn't have；搭配也需改为 make lists on paper 更自然。建议: 过去背景用过去时，注意复数与搭配。

× But now I prefer to make this on my phone and the reason why is because I have combined my list and my calendar together and now I'm knowing that which day I have to do something and that is fine.

✓ But now I prefer to make lists on my phone because I have combined my list and calendar, and now I know which day I have to do something, which is convenient.

问题: 时态与表达不自然（I'm knowing 不用进行时，应用 know；the reason why is because 冗余，应简化为 because 或 the reason is that）；词序和搭配需调整（make this on my phone → make lists on my phone，combined my list and my calendar together → combined my list and calendar）。建议: 用简单现在时表达常态（I know），去掉冗余短语，使用自然搭配如 convenient/handy。