List— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and avoid repetition and filler words (e.g., “uh”, repeating “organized”). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific supporting detail and an example. Limit to 2–4 sentences and use linking words like “because” or “for example.”

예시: Yes — I usually make a shopping list because it helps me stay organized. For example, I group items by store section (produce, dairy, pantry), which saves me time and prevents me from forgetting things.

제안: Clarify tense and sequencing; avoid fragmented sentences and correct grammar. Give a direct answer, then a concise specific example about when and how lists helped you. Use linking words like “when” and “because.”

예시: Yes, lists work well for me. When I worked in Milan, I wrote a daily task list each morning, and because I prioritized tasks by deadline, I finished urgent jobs on time.

제안: Avoid repeating phrases (“I think”) and unclear words (e.g., “pools” likely wrong). Give two clear reasons with brief explanation and a linking word like “because” or “although.” Use correct vocabulary (organization).

예시: Some people dislike lists because they find them boring and restrictive. Also, others prefer spontaneity and feel lists limit creativity, although lists can improve efficiency and reduce stress.

제안: Remove fillers and repetition, and give a concise reason plus a specific advantage of using a phone (e.g., reminders, editing). Use one linking word like “because” and provide a short example.

예시: I prefer to use my phone because it’s easier to edit and set reminders. For example, I add items to a notes app and set an alert for urgent purchases, which prevents me from forgetting them.

× Yes, usually I make a list because, uh, it helps me to be more organized.

✓ Yes, usually I make a list because it helps me to be more organized.

The original sentence had an unnecessary comma after 'because' and filler 'uh' which interrupt flow. Remove the filler and comma to make the present simple clause correct and natural: 'it helps me to be more organized.' This fits the habitual action in the present tense.

× I am a very well organized person and I like to schedule my tasks for example.

✓ I am a very well-organized person, and I like to schedule my tasks, for example.

Compound adjective 'well-organized' needs a hyphen. The sentence needs commas to separate clauses and the phrase 'for example' should be set off by a comma. This improves clarity and corrects sentence structure.

× I mean I made a list for my work because currently I'm studying, but when I was working in Milan I used to have had a list with all my tasks today and yes I it.

✓ I mean I make lists for my work because I'm currently studying, but when I was working in Milan I used to have a list with all my tasks for the day.

There is a tense inconsistency: 'made' conflicts with 'currently I'm studying.' Use present simple 'make' to describe current habit. 'Used to have had' is incorrect; use 'used to have' or simply 'had.' 'With all my tasks today' is wrong time reference; use 'for the day.' Also remove the stray 'and yes I it.' The corrected sentence maintains coherent tense and meaning.

× I think that people think that lists are boring and they prefer to do everything with pools, but I think I believe that list are very important for our self organisement.

✓ I think that people find lists boring and prefer to do everything from memory, but I believe that lists are very important for our self-organization.

Multiple errors: 'think that people think' is repetitive; 'find' is more natural. 'Do everything with pools' is incorrect—likely meant 'from memory' or 'mentally.' 'List are' has agreement error and needs plural 'lists.' 'Self organisement' is misspelled and should be 'self-organization.' The correction fixes prepositions, word choice, plural agreement, and spelling.

× I think I believe that list are very important for our self organisement.

✓ I believe that lists are very important for our self-organization.

The noun 'list' should be plural 'lists' to agree with 'are.' Also remove redundancy 'I think I believe' — choose one verb. Fix spelling of 'organisement' to 'organization.' This corrects subject-number agreement and word form.

× I definitely prefer to use my phone because I am organized with with it and I think it's a waste of paper using for example.

✓ I definitely prefer to use my phone because I'm organized with it, and I think using paper, for example, is a waste.

Remove the duplicated word 'with.' Reorder phrase to place the example 'for example' next to 'paper.' 'Using for example' is incorrect preposition/order. The corrected sentence uses natural preposition placement and clearer word order.

× Mm-hmm. Books or something like that.

✓ For example, books or something like that.

Fragment 'Books or something like that' is a sentence fragment; integrate it into the previous sentence or make it a full phrase by adding 'For example.' This fixes sentence structure by eliminating a fragment.