List— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and fluent: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and filler words, and add one specific supporting detail. Use a linking phrase to show the example. Limit to 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes — I always make a shopping list because I often forget items otherwise. For example, when I do grocery shopping I write down all essential ingredients (vegetables, milk, and spices) so I don’t have to make a second trip.

제안: Reduce hesitation and repetition, use a clear structure: topic sentence (yes/no), one or two supporting reasons with linking words, and a short concluding sentence. Use specific examples of tasks or times to show clarity.

예시: Yes, I make a work list every morning because it helps me organise my day and meet appointments on time. For example, I list my top three tasks—emails, project work, and meetings—and check them off, which makes me feel more productive.

제안: Clarify the idea and avoid vague phrases. Start with a clear opinion, give 1–2 specific reasons with linking words (for example, because or therefore), and use correct vocabulary (e.g., ‘feel pressured’ not ‘pressurized’).

예시: Some people avoid making lists because they feel pressured by rigid schedules. For example, a detailed to-do list can make them anxious about deadlines, so they delay planning or prefer a more flexible approach.

제안: Give a direct preference sentence, then one or two concise reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and fix small grammar errors (e.g., ‘for the whole day’).

예시: I prefer making lists on my phone because it’s handy and I can check tasks throughout the day. For instance, I use a notes app to tick off items as I finish them, which saves time and paper.

× Yes, I usually make my list before I shop because I really forget the things while doing shopping and I regret after coming home.

✓ Yes, I usually make my list before I shop because I often forget things while shopping and regret it after coming home.

The original uses 'really forget the things' (awkward article and noun usage) and 'while doing shopping' (unnatural; use 'while shopping'). Also 'I regret after coming home' needs an object: 'regret it'. Use 'often' instead of 'really' for frequency clarity. ID:10

× So for instance when I I would do grocery shopping I write all the ingredients which are essential for me and also.

✓ For instance, when I go grocery shopping, I write down all the ingredients that are essential for me.

'When I I would do' is ungrammatical and mixed conditional/modal forms; use simple present 'when I go' for habitual actions. 'Write' should be 'write down' for lists. 'Which' restrictive clause is better as 'that'. Remove trailing 'and also'. ID:10

× It worked yes uh, in the morning, I usually make list of my whole day work.

✓ Yes, it works. In the morning, I usually make a list of my day's work.

Mixed tenses: 'It worked' suggests past but the habit is present, so use 'it works'. Also add article 'a' before 'list' and use the possessive 'my day's work'. ID:5

× However, it helped me to uh, it helped me to be more organized throughout the day and so that I can uh, complete all my work and also my appointments on time without delaying it.

✓ However, it helps me to be more organized throughout the day so that I can complete all my work and my appointments on time without delaying them.

Maintain present tense for habitual effect: 'helps' not 'helped'. Remove redundant repetition. Use plural pronoun 'them' to refer to 'work and appointments' or rephrase. 'Without delaying it' incorrect because 'it' is unclear; use 'them' or 'delay them'. ID:17

× And I feel more productive it if I make a plan in the morning.

✓ And I feel more productive if I make a plan in the morning.

Unnecessary insertion of 'it' breaks sentence structure; remove 'it'. Keep conditional 'if I make' for habit. ID:12

× So I usually do it and it is very. Beneficial for my.

✓ So I usually do it and it is very beneficial for me.

Sentence was split incorrectly and ended with 'my' which is a possessive adjective needing a noun. Replace with object pronoun 'me' and correct punctuation. ID:26

× I think that they are very rare people who don't like making list because, uh, if, if they make free, uh, list, they feel more pressurized whole day due to, to avoid that pressure, they avoid, uh, they uh, to work, they delay making list.

✓ I think it is rare for people not to like making lists because if they make a free-form list, they feel more pressured throughout the day; to avoid that pressure they delay making a list.

Original has chaotic structure and repetition. Use 'it is rare for people not to...' or 'rare that people don't...'. 'Making list' -> 'making lists'. 'Make free list' clarified to 'make a free-form list'. 'Pressurized whole day' -> 'pressured throughout the day'. Remove filler words and reorder for clarity. ID:26

× I usually prefer to make list on my phone because it is very handy and I can easily go through the things which I need to complete in my my task which in all day.

✓ I usually prefer to make lists on my phone because it is very handy and I can easily go through the things I need to complete in my tasks during the day.

Add plural 'lists' and article/number agreement. Remove duplicate 'my'. Replace 'which I need to complete in my my task which in all day' with 'I need to complete in my tasks during the day' for natural phrasing. ID:22

× So I prefer mostly phones which are more comfy and convenient. To.

✓ So I mostly prefer using my phone because it is more comfortable and convenient.

Sentence fragments: 'To.' is stray. Use 'prefer using my phone' or 'prefer phones' and 'comfortable' instead of informal 'comfy'. Ensure complete clause. ID:26